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|Libraries are not just a collection of books: Are public libraries important?
4 - People still do this? I thought going off-line would result in a horrible death by some form of...
Writing Feedbackiris1 - Jun 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 27, 2009
|IELTS essay: Newspapers will soon become a thing of the past
7 - For this sort of essay, a completely one-sided argument is generally okay, and easier to write. In general, though,...
Writing Feedbacktrangquynh - Jun 26, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 26, 2009
|Your decision to enter the education field - CBEST Essay pratice
10 - I'm not so sure: Mark Twain wrote several humorous essays in the first person voice of a wrong-headed narrator....
Writing Feedbackrolandj727 - Jun 23, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jun 25, 2009
|"tip the waiter" essay - what have you learnt from a mistake?
9 - Should we tip the waiter?". "Okay.", he said. Outside the restaurant, we (me and my 4 friends) were...
Writing Feedbackchintan - Jun 21, 2009 / Liebe - Jun 25, 2009
|CBEST: Technology today has been positive or negative impact?
16 - Actually, I think you have done a very good job of showing that the creation of the atomic bomb...
Writing Feedbackbubuvio - Jun 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 24, 2009
|Essay about: what would you change of your former high school?
14 - Whenever I hear the word school, I immediately visualize phrases like exams, presentations, essays, textbooks, or dictations, rather than...
Writing Feedbackivan9210 - Jun 6, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jun 24, 2009
|Essay on the Types of Germs - bacteria
22 - I like the quotation you used. Perhaps you should cite it, according to whatever format you are supposed to...
Writing FeedbackHaya - Jun 4, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 19, 2009
|TOEFL - modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people
Writing Feedbacklibo_for - Jun 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 19, 2009
|TOEFL Writing: 2 short essays (reading versus doing things; Neighbors)
Writing Feedbackbon - Jun 15, 2009 / biggestv - Jun 18, 2009
|a baby doesn't know the intricacy of external world; TOEFL IBT Essay "Parents are the best teachers"
6 - Content-wise you could shore up your essay by defining what exactly you mean by "best teacher" before attempting to...
Writing FeedbackHVC - Jun 16, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 17, 2009
|Narrative essay- important decision for CBEST Pormpt
2 - First I will talk about content and then about grammar and style. You've made a good choice concerning which...
Writing Feedbacksapst21 - Jun 16, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jun 17, 2009
|CBEST Essay using technology prompt
8 - The handbook I am using is the one created and required by a major U.S. university. Again, Sean, your...
Writing Feedbackrolandj727 - Jun 15, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jun 16, 2009
|TOEFL Essay on why people want to study (give me any comment on my following essay)
Writing Feedbacklinjuncai - Jun 14, 2009 / linjuncai - Jun 16, 2009
|Cultural psychology short paper
Writing Feedbackcarlychan - Jun 13, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jun 16, 2009
|The Advantages of Capital Punishment-- very short essay --
6 - thank you.......
Writing Feedbacksilentheart - Jun 12, 2009 / silentheart - Jun 16, 2009
|Australian Gold Rush: Introduction writing
16 - Hey Notoman, thanks for mentioning the plagiarism detector. I knew such software existed, but I didn't know there was...
Writing Feedbackjgv115 - May 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 14, 2009
|My first essay exercise - "we learn our most important lessons in school?"
7 - thanks a lot, Special thanks to Mustafa1991. I know this article is far from perfect. But there are only...
Writing FeedbackHellANgel - Jun 10, 2009 / HellANgel - Jun 13, 2009
|Yet another CBEST Essay - an unforgettable person you have encountered in life
Writing Feedbackrolandj727 - Jun 12, 2009 / rolandj727 - Jun 12, 2009
|CBEST personal essay - an unforgettable person you have encountered in your life
13 - Notice: Several people have now repeatedly told you to omit that first paragraph, which says nothing. That's good advice....
Writing Feedbackbubuvio - Jun 9, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jun 11, 2009
|War -- victor or no victor? 2
45 - Yeah, I'm going to keep a low profile in classes where there aren't multiple choice tests, from now on....
Writing FeedbackMustafa1991 - May 18, 2009 / Mustafa1991 - Jun 11, 2009
|TOEFL - should history be a mandatory course to university students?
5 - But how would this be of any use to international students? Bear in mind that universities often have a...
Writing Feedbackrealele - Jun 9, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 10, 2009
|ielts essay: Should students be taught to compete or to cooperate?
5 - Don't call your mistakes "stupid." Making mistakes is how we learn. I'm glad you are feeling more confident....
Writing Feedbackwudan - Jun 9, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jun 10, 2009
|Essay response to Thoreau - "Does adulthood takes away the true spirit of life?"
5 - Threre are plenty grammar errors. For example: - convey a sense of nostalgia *for* - childhood is...
Writing Feedbackcarladguez - Jun 9, 2009 / Mustafa1991 - Jun 10, 2009
|Traveling in a group led by a tour guide give us a safe, useful and exciting excursion & save time
7 - Or Tour guides possess professional knowledge of an city that allows them to avoid dangerous areas....
Writing Feedbackthinhthanh92 - Jun 4, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 9, 2009
|IELTS essay : Nowadays majority of people are trying to live in the cities
6 - You have a decent essay structure, and while you do have some grammatical errors, they tend not to interfere...
Writing Feedbackferocious12 - Jun 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 8, 2009
|Making life better
Writing Feedbackbon - Jun 6, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 8, 2009
|A paragraph to persuade someone not to smoke
3 - You might also want to add more details to make your paragraph more persuasive. "Five million people died last...
Writing Feedbackferocious12 - Jun 7, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 8, 2009
|TOEFL - Prefer to work for a large company; good material rewards
7 - Actually, it is generally a good idea to avoid labeling your conclusion with one of those phrases. It should...
Writing Feedbackwing - May 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 6, 2009
|IELTS Writing - "clean learning environment"
3 - Be careful, too, that you don't get off topic. The prompt doesn't assert that an attractive and clean learning...
Writing Feedbackbon - Jun 6, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 6, 2009
|descriptive essay-The heart of the Matter.
6 - In need of some revision: "An inspiring, strong, and caring person has a lot to offer, especially if...
Writing Feedbackpnkberrychmpgne - Jun 4, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 5, 2009
|Help with a paragraph about marketing claims
Writing FeedbackFizzi - Jun 4, 2009 / Fizzi - Jun 5, 2009
|Test essay: Should children obey authority?
7 - Others think controlled children are not well-prepared for children's adult life into make the important decisions of their lives...
Writing Feedbackxinyuqingxin - Jun 2, 2009 / ferocious12 - Jun 4, 2009
|Socials Essay: Robespierre and Cromwell Which is a more effective leader?
7 - Your main problem is that you are comparing these two people in terms of the effectiveness of their leadership,...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Jun 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 4, 2009
|"the disparity (gap) between rich and poor" - sample writing
4 - I like the way you focus on the difference in the two camps' views of wealth. The redistributionists subscribe...
Writing Feedbackcarladguez - Jun 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 3, 2009
|a pretty short story, Return of satan
5 - Some minor fixes for you: "and argued that Satan was damned forever and he would never deserve to...
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Jun 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 3, 2009
|April's first day essay - A Quick Grammer Check
5 - My bus driver continues that, if anyone thinks he/she can't do it just tell him. It kind of tempts...
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - May 31, 2009 / ferocious12 - Jun 2, 2009
|itels essay: should children learn foreign language from elementary school?
7 - To sum up, though teaching the elementary school students foreign languages pose a threat to thehas risk for the...
Writing Feedbackxinyuqingxin - May 31, 2009 / ferocious12 - Jun 2, 2009
|People should read only those books which are real events& real person
10 - It's really difficult to make a determination on that without actually seeing the essay. In general, grounding your essay...
Writing Feedbackbiggestv - May 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 2, 2009
|ielts essay: should governments pay university course fees?
3 - This is better than your other essays, as it has a clear thesis with some decent reasons to back...
Writing Feedbackxinyuqingxin - Jun 1, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 2, 2009
|ielts essay - Useing animals for the benefit of the human beings
4 - Simone makes an excellent point -- you haven't presented any compelling arguments for your thesis. Making your case shouldn't...
Writing Feedbackxinyuqingxin - Jun 1, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jun 2, 2009
|Machine Learning versus Learning by Humans 2
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Oct 21, 2008 / Rajiv - May 31, 2009
|Essay on Rating TV Shows and Movies
6 - The main objection to the rating system is that the ratings may not reflect what parents think they do....
Writing Feedbacknick94 - May 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 31, 2009
|I came to knew about Jesus at young age; My salvation testimony - kindly edit.
Writing FeedbackAlfred - May 31, 2009 / Alfred - May 31, 2009
|Random weightlifting reflection piece.
3 - I'd say you should flesh out the essay a bit more, possibly adding narrative elements to the beginning and...
Writing FeedbackMond - May 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 31, 2009
|'useless in applying theories'; Daily homework is not necessary for students
Writing Feedbackeric_ly - May 30, 2009 / eric_ly - May 31, 2009
|People want stay healthy. Health is must to enjoy the life to the fullest.
7 - Notoman, That is such excellent advice!! Thank you for participating so actively in peer editing. That's what makes this...
Writing Feedbackbiggestv - May 28, 2009 / EF_Simone - May 29, 2009
|Critical essay about Persepolis.
2 - Persepolis is such a wonderful book! I'm glad to have this opportunity to review an essay about it. I...
Writing Feedbackannedoherty - May 29, 2009 / EF_Simone - May 29, 2009
|History, Royal Engineer essay.
6 - You also need to work on integrating your quotations better. "The following quote proves my point" is a horrible...
Writing Feedbackeddy9898 - May 23, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 28, 2009
|If you could invent something new, what product would you develop? (TOEFL essay)
Writing Feedbackbiggestv - May 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 28, 2009
|Persuasive essay (Lithium based batteries>Nickel based batteries)
Writing Feedbackkylelanning - Apr 27, 2009 / kylelanning - May 28, 2009
|Essay on the legal drinking age
Writing Feedbackkokujampo - May 25, 2009 / biggestv - May 28, 2009
|Clep essay-Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible.
4 - Your essay is very general and need specefic examples. Your grammer still need improvement. so I think to improve...
Writing FeedbackIndian - May 22, 2009 / biggestv - May 27, 2009
|WPE --The minimum wage in the U.S.
5 - Yes, that's the one. You know that there are reasons to increase minimum wage (protect workers from exploitation)...
Writing Feedbacksapst21 - May 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2009
|Causes of Global Financial Crisis
3 - While moderating here, I have often found myself recommending three books over and over again: Stechen King's On Writing,...
Writing Feedbackferocious12 - May 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2009
|Essay on advantages of computer games
16 - To make your essay a bit stronger in view point you could list a few well known negative views...
Writing Feedbacktara11 - May 5, 2009 / maextra7 - May 26, 2009
|[TOEFL ESSAY ] Should the Government Provide Free College?
Writing Feedbackrjsdndi - May 24, 2009 / rjsdndi - May 25, 2009
|Toefl: Is this good enough to get 24 score in writing section.
3 - Aye, the more concise the better, as multiple writers have noted. However, your fix for the sentence changes his...
Writing Feedbackbiggestv - May 23, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 24, 2009
|School bus trip - a story
4 - Better yet, write the story so that the theme emerges from it without your protagonist having to reflect on...
Writing Feedbackceberus - May 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 23, 2009
|TOEFL Essay-It can be quite difficult to learn a new language.
7 - I agree with Kevin -- you will pass! Learning a new language is generally enjoyable but at the...
Writing Feedbackwickyeden - May 18, 2009 / EF_Simone - May 23, 2009
|CLEP English Comp. -- "That Government is Best Which Governs Least"
5 - Essay is very nice, I am also planning to take the same test. Your essay helps me knowing some...
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