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|Is it essential for newcomers to get used and follow the traditions and culture in a foreign country
4 - @Holt Thank you very much for your comment. I really appreciate it and will try my best to follow...
Writing Feedbackhoanghienktvn141 - Oct 19, 2017 / hoanghienktvn141 - Oct 26, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 2 about influence of colour on our purchasing decisions
4 - Nguyen, your second sentence in the opening paragraph is almost a direct quote from the original prompt. You need...
Writing Feedbacknh_diemquynh - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|The graphs below presents data about computer ownership as a percentage of the population, 2002-2010
Writing Feedbacktom73217321 - Oct 24, 2017 / tom73217321 - Oct 25, 2017
|Living in a big city is more convenient and easily to find better jobs than in a suburban area
6 - @hiimsandra I will rewrite this essay. Your corrections are very useful. Thank you:) Oh, and the request is "What...
Writing Feedbackirisyuki - Oct 24, 2017 / irisyuki - Oct 25, 2017
|Reasons for land degradation - what impair the productive capacity of agricultural land?
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Given are two pie charts illustrating how different languages are spoken by British students
3 - Sandra, it is difficult to review your essay because you forgot to upload the image for our reference. You...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Parents and teachers task is to teach good behavior to children - by force?
4 - @just_writer 1. This kind of essay need to discuss the reason why you agree / disagree. You can...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / hiimsandra - Oct 25, 2017
|Charts below show how energy is used in an average Australian household vs greenhouse emission
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Writing task 2 : Some people say it is OK to use animals for our benefit, others say it is not good
5 - Hello, Here are some corrections, human takes advantage most people who a good intention, but they do it...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 23, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 25, 2017
|An Essay on the topic: Mistakes are always part of learning
4 - Hello, Here are some corrections, it is simply inevitable successful (Typo) after the job is done, you can...
Writing FeedbackJoey351 - Oct 25, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 25, 2017
|Governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people disagree
3 - @just_writer Of course I won't give up on you. I am going to keep helping you and providing constructive...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished
5 - @Holt I just remember, I recently printed out IELTS answer sheets, to get used to it, actually, This essay...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 25, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time.
3 - I just removed all my comments cause I think you do not need them. Please just follow Holt's instructions....
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 25, 2017 / ah_zafari - Oct 25, 2017
|[task 1] map writing: arrangements in an American town between 1948 and the present year
3 - @Holt Glad to hear your advice. I appreciate your corrections, especially I know the usage of "to...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 25, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 25, 2017
|Essay about the influence of the internet
4 - Ainur, there is a lack of clarity in the presentation of your essay. Don't get me wrong, I can...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Information concerning the production of oil in six different countries from 1990 to 2010. IELTS 1
2 - Reinhardt, your sentence presentations do not follow the minimum 3 sentence requirement, which is why your essay automatically fell...
Writing Feedbackkampusbarbarrr - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Where there is no struggle, there is no strength. An essay for financial assistance.
4 - @HoltI am trying to obtain financial assistance from a program they offer for recent graduates of my school and...
Writing Feedbackaundraj - Oct 24, 2017 / aundraj - Oct 24, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good?
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 23, 2017 / pier - Oct 24, 2017
|There is a lot of information in each country that becomes accessible if you know their language.
2 - You must never begin the discussion of the essay with a representation of information that is not located in...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 24, 2017
|Statistics of CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal
2 - Just_writer, hi, there are some grammar mistakes and misspellings. I will address the core: 1. Yous start well...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 24, 2017 / nemezidus - Oct 24, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 : Many TV advertisements nowadays cause effects on children
4 - Hello, Here are some corrections, them to reduce the harmful effect clamor spend the amount of time to...
Writing FeedbackEster - Oct 23, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 24, 2017
|The diagram shows the changes at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950
2 - Tran, the overview summary is meant to help you write a better essay. It is there so that you...
Writing Feedbackngoantran - Oct 23, 2017 / Holt - Oct 24, 2017
|The difference of consumption between chicken beef lamb and fish in a European country
4 - Hi Jessie. Listen, there is actually a proper format to be followed for the opening presentation of a Task...
Writing Feedbackcherry_amour - Oct 22, 2017 / Holt - Oct 23, 2017
|Allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters or not
3 - You have properly represented the requirements of the Task Accuracy section of scoring. There is a clear representation of...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 23, 2017 / Holt - Oct 23, 2017
|The diagram presents the process of generating electricity from geothermal energy in a power plant
3 - Your essay is not effective in reflecting the C&C and GRA considerations of your essay. All of your paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 23, 2017 / Holt - Oct 23, 2017
|Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 23, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: International tourism brings negative consequences for visited countries.
5 - hello, glad to read your essay. you wrote more than 250 words and you used well grammar but you...
Writing Feedbackpeachaddiction - Oct 5, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 23, 2017
|The place where students hang out
Writing FeedbackSheGoesLalala - Oct 22, 2017 / SheGoesLalala - Oct 22, 2017
|Some people think that boarding schools are an exellent option for children, while others disagree
5 - Helloo Usman, you have met the IELTS criteria when it comes to writing task 2. This essay has covered...
Writing FeedbackUkiUsman - Oct 5, 2017 / eddies - Oct 22, 2017
|The bar chart illustrates the Biritish male and female employees working in different occupations
3 - @hapi_hana9 Hi, I'd like to rewrite a sentence for you. Overall, the percentage of men ... => Overall,...
Writing Feedbackhapi_hana9 - Oct 10, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 22, 2017
|Students want to live away from home while they continue to study
2 - Luong, you need to learn how to use a wider vocabulary range. Your essay becomes redundant because you use...
Writing Feedbackaliceliang - Oct 22, 2017 / Holt - Oct 22, 2017
|Kids can learn from the very first days by their parents, but other say it's the task of the school
3 - @Ummu Hi, I'd like to give you another example of paraphrasing the prompt: Children is an essential thing......
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 9, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 22, 2017
|A person's worth should be judged by social status, material possessions or traditional values
4 - @tadey Hi, I'd like to give you an example to paraphrase the prompt: Opinions differ as... => These days,...
Writing Feedbacktadey - Oct 5, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 22, 2017
|People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 21, 2017 / duynguyen1808 - Oct 22, 2017
|GRE issue essay of claim and reason type
4 - likhitha, due to the existing problems with your essay, I do not believe that it can score higher than...
Writing FeedbackAhona ash - Oct 21, 2017 / Holt - Oct 22, 2017
|The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurant between 2003,2013
3 - You should actually aim to write at least 200 words of the 150 minimum for this type of essay....
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 21, 2017 / Holt - Oct 22, 2017
|[task 1] line graph - the revenue of a New York City Bookstore
6 - @Holt @pier...
Writing Feedbackphduyenngo - Oct 21, 2017 / phduyenngo - Oct 21, 2017
|IELTS task 2: The advantages and disadvantages of the current population structure
5 - @monopolymi Hi. I think your paraphrase of the prompt is good enough. I'd like to give you another example....
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Oct 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 21, 2017
|Why grand and expensive marriages became more and more common in recent years?
3 - @Ecirtaeb Hi, as @Holt has said, you didn't paraphrase the prompt correctly. I'd like offer you another example. ...
Writing FeedbackEcirtaeb - Oct 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 21, 2017
|Is it better to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway or on public transport?
2 - @just_writer to makes we need better railway so we can have better access to other cities in a...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 21, 2017 / sgassani - Oct 21, 2017
|The official forbiddance of smoking in public places - IELTS writing practice task 2 academic
5 - @lhy1216 Hi, I'd like to make a correction for you. ...because smokers contribute make up only a ......
Writing Feedbacklhy1216 - Oct 19, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 21, 2017
|[task 1] bar chart writing - where people live in the Northwest region
7 - I totally understand and it's perfectly fine. I just did not like the Holt's comment. It was quite offensive....
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 21, 2017 / ah_zafari - Oct 21, 2017
|The bar chart compares the worldwide sales figures for four different games over 6 years period
9 - Hi monopolymi, A few pieces of advice: 1. In the introductory statement, while you are paraphrasing the...
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Oct 6, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 20, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Bar chart - Population distribution in the Northwest region (1900 to 2050)
8 - Holt has briefly pointed out the main faults in this essay. However, I would like to point out some...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Oct 15, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 20, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: The trend of GDP growth in post-reform China
6 - Hello Wong, As a fellow candidate preparing for IELTS academic I can give you few pieces of advice...
Writing Feedbackwinky_wong - Oct 9, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 20, 2017
|[task1] map writing: the evolution of a villege
4 - I see. Thank you for your advice. I will improve skills accordingly and try to turn writing into my...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 20, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 20, 2017
|Punishment for each type of crime was often a prominent rule in societies
2 - Jalaleh, I would have been very happy to review this introduction for you had you just not forgotten one...
Writing FeedbackSol19921992 - Oct 20, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|When proffesors give project on which students must work together, the students learn more effective
5 - @pier Hello Pier, your second draft is a lot better. However, there are some sentence construction errors in...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 18, 2017 / Onyinye123 - Oct 20, 2017
|Use of animals for testing medicines is cruel or not ?
3 - Hi jayy, I think you didn't correctly paraphrase the prompt. You also didn't discuss two views correctly. For example,...
Writing Feedbackjayy98 - Oct 20, 2017 / pier - Oct 20, 2017
|[task1] Three possible sites for a new hypermarket, which will be built in the city of Pellington
7 - @Holt Thank you for your explanation. But I'm a bit confused. I suppose the map is about "shopping center",...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 19, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 20, 2017
|A school has been given money to spend on one thing to improve the school.
2 - Laura, I think you have not been properly briefed as to how to write the opening statement of a...
Writing FeedbackLauraMoriarty - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|Academic IELTS task 1-The maps of town center of Islip now and in the future
3 - Lu, when you provide the summary overview for your essay, always remember to include the discussion instruction at the...
Writing FeedbackChi Han - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|The population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults. good or bad?
2 - This sort of essay, based upon your title heading, indicates that you are to pick only one side of...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|Communication and trust are considered to be indispensable parts of social life
5 - @Holt Thank you very much, but I still don't know what should I do about the opening paragraph. Could...
Writing FeedbackRubenstein - Oct 19, 2017 / Rubenstein - Oct 19, 2017
|Maps below show the centre of small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development
4 - Hi just_writer, One mistake in paragraph 3: "The main road usability...." The meaning of "usability" means the ease...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 19, 2017 / Chi Han - Oct 19, 2017
|Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to VIP's personal lives
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 19, 2017 / TJLuschen - Oct 19, 2017
|Whether taking a gap year is a reasonable idea? (help, rescue poor writting)
4 - Hello Jane, I found some mistakes from your essay. Firstly, Grammar: -learn different culture of other countries...
Writing Feedbackchche - Oct 18, 2017 / happyfunny - Oct 19, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Many countries increase the amount of household garbage going to landfill every year.
2 - Hang, you are taking an IELTS Task 2 test. This means, you are not allowed to start your discussion...
Writing FeedbackHannielee - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Is local history more important than world history? Opinion essay.
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 18, 2017 / Hannielee - Oct 19, 2017
|It is now possible for scientist and tourist to travel remote natural environment eg. the south pole
3 - Ummu, the difficulty in understanding your presentation and the lack of cohesive and coherent paragraphs have led me to...
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
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