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|IELTS TASK 2: What are the perspectives for study abroad?
Writing Feedbackimcloud16 - Jun 10, 2017 / imcloud16 - Jun 10, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 1 : Why young executives are stressed at work and the consequences.
4 - You should add an overall paragraph after the introduction and one more body paragraph (because the third paragraph seems...
Writing Feedbackguan721 - May 21, 2017 / Riley Nguyen - Jun 10, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: Electricity Production Change in Australia and France
4 - Be careful when using words in writing task 1. Not all words can be used, for example: "different pattern...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Jun 9, 2017 / eddies - Jun 10, 2017
|IELTS 2: Education in prison is used to reduce the crime rate so that prisoners can get a job.
2 - Nhu, I cannot accurately review this essay in terms of form and content because you did not provide the...
Writing Feedbackthieman - Jun 9, 2017 / Holt - Jun 10, 2017
|[Task 1] The graph below shows the changing trend of the use of modern technology in homes in the UK
Writing FeedbackTung Anh - May 30, 2017 / baosoftware1 - Jun 9, 2017
|Should schools spend more time in teaching traditional subject or skills?
3 - Well, when it comes to introductory statement, then your task is to simply state the background or the rubric...
Writing Feedbackiisernaw - Jun 7, 2017 / eddies - Jun 9, 2017
|Some people say international sports events help in world peace. Agree or disagree?
2 - CJ, you have the potential to become a good essayist. You have a good handle on the background of...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Jun 8, 2017 / Holt - Jun 8, 2017
|People think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum age for driving.
4 - I reckon brainstorming the ideas first before writing. Your body paragraphs needed to present more clear points. ...
Writing Feedbackbaosoftware1 - Jun 4, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Jun 8, 2017
|Emotion based decisions will have high tendency to be wrong - they should be taken with free mind
2 - Jayati, I have a few points of major concern in your essay. The first of which is the incomplete...
Writing FeedbackJt548313 - Jun 7, 2017 / Holt - Jun 8, 2017
|The technological progress and globalization influence positively to human's life (with exceptions)
3 - There are some rules using apostrophe ('s) in English such as possessive form (e.g. the bird's cage) and plural...
Writing Feedbackhidzikatat - Jun 6, 2017 / iisernaw - Jun 7, 2017
|Age distribution of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for future
3 - Jade, you can improve upon your opening statement in order to get a better task accuracy score. At the...
Writing Feedbackkxwai - Jun 5, 2017 / Holt - Jun 6, 2017
|IELTS-Task 1: The flow chart below shows the three stages of glass bottle recycling
3 - @Holt thank you very much. Your feed back have proven to be extremely useful and i really appreciate that....
Writing FeedbackLeonardo Nguyen - Jun 4, 2017 / Leonardo Nguyen - Jun 5, 2017
|Entertainment and sport or healthcare and education
2 - @thanhhoang12a7 your opening statement should represent the two points of view prior to the presentation of your opinion. That...
Writing Feedbackthanhhoang12a7 - Jun 4, 2017 / Holt - Jun 4, 2017
|Chances do not make a major contribution to the triumph of anyone
5 - Do you guys can check my rewritting again ? It is argued that fortune plays a leading role in...
Writing Feedbackanhdt117 - Jun 2, 2017 / anhdt117 - Jun 4, 2017
|The same educational opportunity should be given to both gender students
2 - Lung, you have developed a very interesting and highly appropriate discussion for the subject provided. Your lien of reasoning...
Writing Feedbackmrgreatteacher - Jun 4, 2017 / Holt - Jun 4, 2017
|Quick world means quick decisions to make.
2 - Trung, considering that the essay proves that you are not well versed in the English language, you should not...
Writing Feedbacktrungomega - Jun 4, 2017 / Holt - Jun 4, 2017
|Issue Essay for GRE AWA section - technology and human skills
3 - Thank you Holt, I will work on constructing fluent grammatical structure, I would also appreciate hint on how to...
Writing Feedbacktizentos - Jun 3, 2017 / tizentos - Jun 3, 2017
|Australian teenagers and junk foods in their diet
4 - 1. You wrote: ... of eaten per year for pizza, fish ... Feedback: The article is missing before...
Writing Feedbackd2ny - May 30, 2017 / thunga2603 - Jun 3, 2017
|IELTs Task one: You live in a room in college which you share with another student.
4 - Hi I think your letter is not formatted right.I think you should start what is your request and...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - May 30, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Jun 3, 2017
|Immigration has a major impact on the society. Main reasons of immigration and its consequences.
2 - Utsi, the way that you introduced the topic is exaggerated. You must only present a discussion that relates to...
Writing Feedbackutsi - Jun 2, 2017 / Holt - Jun 2, 2017
|The Connection between Technology and Trafficking
2 - Ashley, what is the focal point of your research? You will need to clarify the thesis statement in your...
Writing Feedbackanmart36 - May 31, 2017 / Holt - Jun 1, 2017
|The number of people smoking, divided into two different gender groups
2 - Ngo, the major flaws of this essay are your inability to write a good introduction and lack of detailed...
Writing FeedbackTung Anh - May 31, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - May 31, 2017
|I need correct my TOEFL Independent Writing: Raising children in urban or rural areas
3 - Holt, I appreiciate your comments. I am not clear with your opinion: "It takes more than just 2 lines...
Writing Feedbacksilkworm - May 29, 2017 / silkworm - May 30, 2017
|Essay IETLS task 2: Sponsor for national sport teams. Who should financially support the teams?
3 - Sri, although you tried your best in the introductory paragraph, it is not good enough to earn you substantial...
Writing FeedbackSri Hardiyanti - May 29, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - May 30, 2017
|How inhabitants in UK spent their time on separate types of telephone calls over a 7-year period
2 - Khoa, where is the chart for this analysis essay? I don't have anything to compare your written information to...
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - May 30, 2017 / Holt - May 30, 2017
|Many people believe they cannot count on the same job perpetually
2 - Hsin-ya, your opening statement is really because it immediately represents your opinion of matters to be discussed in the...
Writing Feedbackhsinya0316 - May 29, 2017 / Holt - May 29, 2017
|Transport investments. IELTS Task II, Roads VS Railways.
2 - Yong, the main problem that you have work this essay is that you are not discussing it properly. Read...
Writing Feedbacksunraise2005 - May 29, 2017 / Holt - May 29, 2017
|As global trade increases between different countries
Writing Feedbackquanking - May 27, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - May 28, 2017
|The total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into 3 categories
Writing Feedbackhello_dmmm - May 27, 2017 / TJLuschen - May 27, 2017
|Summary: How can parents help students survive the exam season?
4 - Bao, I must give you a thumb-up for the excellent skills you showed in summarizing the article. Stating each...
Writing Feedbackbaokhanhlqd - May 16, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - May 26, 2017
|Should doctors either be engaged in more profitable activities or health-oriented
3 - @okorobiadimma14 Thanks for your suggestions. I appreciate it. I admitted that I do have the weaknesses of writing skills...
Writing Feedbackadambacon813 - May 25, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 26, 2017
|Essay about job contribution. I need mentors advice, remark, write score band...
2 - Anhphong, the essay is very confusing to read. There is a lack of proper representation of the two argumentative...
Writing Feedbackwind0111 - May 26, 2017 / Holt - May 26, 2017
|The proportion of consumers purchasing items online from three countries
2 - ...
Writing FeedbackRamShackle - May 24, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 25, 2017
|Two types of solution of solving poor.
Writing Feedbackadambacon813 - May 23, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 25, 2017
|People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country
Writing Feedbackandreekhuat - May 25, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 25, 2017
|Who should integrate children into public life?
Writing Feedbackzoeymisu - May 23, 2017 / zoeymisu - May 25, 2017
|Treatment of ill people vs promotion of healthy lifestyle
2 - This is quite an interesting topic to read. I notice that you identified your position early in the paper....
Writing Feedbackxuantruong94 - May 24, 2017 / Frank86 - May 24, 2017
|Children should always follow their parents' advice.
3 - @TJLuschen thank you for your comments. Here is a topic of writing in IELTS book that i'm studying. My...
Writing Feedbackanhgiang - May 23, 2017 / anhgiang - May 24, 2017
|Kidnapping is the worst crime
Writing FeedbackCandice523 - May 23, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 23, 2017
|Education in home country vs study overseas
3 - Hello, I believe you catched the main points about studying abroad. I would suggest you to mention about...
Writing Feedbackfirefox2010 - May 13, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|It is high time to encourage different sources of energy all over the world
3 - Hello Sfiza, It's a very interesting and popular topic. You may want to read some articles about this...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - May 19, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|Motivation Letter of Taking M.TESOL program in Monash University
3 - Hello Ahmad, Firstly, I wish you good luck for receiving the scholarship. You have well explained why...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - May 22, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|[IELTS Writing part 2] Playing computer games is harmful. Do you agree with it?
3 - There are some sound arguments in the essay, but I would reconsider the arguments made in paragraph 4....
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - May 21, 2017 / wtangalang - May 23, 2017
|Intended major and future goals and why you have chosen your field of interest
2 - Ngan, this is absolutely the wrong response to the prompt. Your response sounds like a a childish paper written...
Writing Feedbackngannkh - May 22, 2017 / Holt - May 22, 2017
|Share information in scientific research, business and the academic world. Good or bad
2 - Dear @kevin1983 You can rearrange this sentence to be more concise and simple: "All of the giant company...
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - May 21, 2017 / flykitten - May 22, 2017
|Past or Future. Why not to move just forward?
2 - Hello @ngannkh I will just correct some grammar mistakes, has value... = has a value / has values...
Writing Feedbackngannkh - May 20, 2017 / flykitten - May 22, 2017
|Technological skills through computer games? Any other influence?
5 - furthermore this is able to stimulate them - this can stimulate them they do not be easier to...
Writing Feedbackjazulirahman - May 11, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 21, 2017
|The Effects of Video Games on Kids - English 102 Essay
2 - Burton, complete your thesis statement, that it's, your introductory paragraph by closing it with information about what you hope...
Writing FeedbackNegativebob1 - May 21, 2017 / Holt - May 21, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 Industrial and business center relocation
3 - @Ahmadham However, this might create a new congestion spot ... I think this can be expanded, or...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - May 3, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 21, 2017
|[IELTS Writing part 2] Money should be spent on health education instead of medical technology
5 - @mandyduong It is a excellent essay, however, I am not convinced about the conclusion about "Develop countries", for there...
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - May 15, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 21, 2017
|Should foreigners pay more for tourism ? Should the host country require more money ?
2 - @tranvinhquang720 Hi, I would like to give you my brief feedback about the essay. First of all, I assume...
Writing Feedbacktranvinhquang720 - May 19, 2017 / mandyduong - May 19, 2017
|Punishment for Children is important for them to learn the difference between right and wrong?
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - May 18, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 19, 2017
|Must the free time of kids be always educational?
3 - @Bekhruz Good response. I think you state your position well and have good reasons backing it....
Writing FeedbackBekhruz - May 17, 2017 / acecomer98 - May 18, 2017
|Too much requirements from students? Should they focus strictly on the academic subjects?
2 - Hi..You got to know that essay question with agree and disagree type can be answered by five forms of...
Writing Feedbackyuzukachan - May 16, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 17, 2017
|The line graph: tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
2 - Hi I think you have been working hard with pies/charts/diagrams. That's why your language use is good such as...
Writing Feedbackbaonhisu - May 11, 2017 / mandyduong - May 16, 2017
|This is my first Issue topic on the desire of corporations. Evaluate and grade me.
2 - The main aim of government corporations is to work for the welfare of their people. Although sometimes they...
Writing Feedbackmnagrik94 - May 14, 2017 / niesaysi - May 16, 2017
|Music will never disappear from our life
Writing Feedbackndocojocojo - May 14, 2017 / ndocojocojo - May 15, 2017
|Nowadays it is possible to use computers and mobile phones for automatic language translation
2 - ...
Writing Feedbackhahoang2312 - May 15, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 15, 2017
|It's a short story about a aunt and his nephew.
3 - @Holt Thanks for your help and your advice,I knew about that, but I'm a beginner,I wrote this story mainly...
Writing Feedbackxujiantao - May 14, 2017 / xujiantao - May 15, 2017
|Task 2: Living in big cities is bad for your health. To what extent do you agree or disagree
2 - Hi, I believe you have a wide range of knowledge about this topic or at least do careful research,...
Writing Feedbackchmt - May 7, 2017 / mandyduong - May 15, 2017
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