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What I like apart from having fun.

3 - Thank you.It's as if you was on my mind.I,m looking forward into releasing anathor thread....

Writing FeedbackCharz - Jun 2, 2010 / Charz - Jun 4, 2010
TOEFL: NEWS ABOUT CELEBRITIES

7 - hi~~ Nowadays, it is very easy to hear the news about the personal lives of famous people such as...

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Equal number of students:IETLS essay

4 - the indispensable role of education in a man's life cannot be overlooked: i meant to talk about importance of...

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comparison between 5 countries, asking about Ielts writing task one

3 - thank you very much...

Writing Feedbackrashahanna - Jun 1, 2010 / rashahanna - Jun 4, 2010
SAT essay: Is censorship sometimes justifiable?

10 - Hi Jesslyn, I became a fan of your writing. I read your other posts. It was very interesting...

Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 20, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 4, 2010
In some countries at the age of 18 young people are allowed to drive, vote and mar

5 - In some nations, it is common that, young people at around 18 years are allowed to vote, drive and...

Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jun 2, 2010 / phuocqui - Jun 3, 2010
'Imperfection is beauty' - If there has been some obstacle or bump in the road

4 - Imperfections, or bumps in the road are mere fragments that are there for a reason. (I crossed out part...

Writing Feedbackaubrey - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 3, 2010
I analyzed the lyric "Temptation Waits" by Garbage

3 - Thank you very much!~ :)...

Writing Feedbackghgyfkd1 - May 31, 2010 / ghgyfkd1 - Jun 3, 2010
Quammen vs. Scully: my Essay that compares and analyses two texts

2 - Hi there, We are lucky to have such an outstanding writer participating in our forum. I see that...

Writing Feedbackmisspellar - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2010
Compare and Contrast Essay- sibling/no sibling

2 - Christian, how weirdly self-effacing it is to combine consonant sounds from your first and last name to produce "Crud"......

Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
"I had a blood disorder" - help with Descriptive Personal Essay

15 - Yep, it was interesting to watch you make progress with this one. I hope you stick around and keep...

Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
Nowadays young children are using mobile phones

4 - Here is a quick lesson about has and had: It has become a custom that every children need to...

Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
TOEFL: "couch potato"; How do movies or television influence people's behavior?

NEW - Watching television and movie are become a common entertainment in our daily life. In my opinion, movies and television...

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Agree or disagree that progress is always good? Yes it is always good!

4 - Thanks a lot Kevin and for homework as well. Your feedback was very encouraging. Will keep writing ......

Writing FeedbackUmeda - May 28, 2010 / Umeda - Jun 1, 2010
IELTS ESSAY: INFLUENCE OF LARGE FACTORY

3 - The main disadvantage is contamination. It is true that some areas are suffering the dire consequences caused by overdeveloping...

Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
Healthy life style

4 - Thank you, I try to improve my essay...

Writing FeedbackJuliaS - May 27, 2010 / JuliaS - May 31, 2010
Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and playing

3 - Your comments were absolutely fantastic. Along with your correction you mentioned the reason to emphasis why schools are important...

Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 29, 2010 / renga78 - May 30, 2010
Income gap is necessary to sustain a society to run dynamically; sports professionals earn big money

4 - Mustafa, don't you think it's important to help people in different ways depending on their level of skill with...

Writing Feedbackcathyliu - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
IELTS ESSAY : PREPARED FOOD

3 - This is great, thanks for making this an excellent thread. I'll add some ideas: Nowadays, more and more...

Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
Why We Crave Horror Movies

3 - It is great that you do not include lots of unhelpful words and phrases, like some writers do. Yet,...

Writing Feedbackreeseinskool - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
CAPE poetry essay, experiences of trauma in the Caribbean

3 - Thanks, i appreciate it. I did not even realise that i had made so many mistakes. Also, i am...

Writing Feedbackhustlerprince - May 27, 2010 / hustlerprince - May 30, 2010
TOEFL: What I would change in my hometown if I could

5 - thx~everyone...

Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - May 27, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - May 30, 2010
Students should be required to attend classes; may need explanations of teachers

5 - the teachers can find out what the students still do not understand or misunderstand and then explain ... ...

Writing Feedbackphuocqui - May 24, 2010 / sheldon - May 29, 2010
TOEFL: Improve Roads or Public Transports

3 - I'm so glad Azeri is here helping people. Thanks!! Many people think that governments should spend money on...

Writing Feedbackhatung94 - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
Online Education Myths, peer review assignment

4 - Yep, maybe it'll be me, or maybe it'll be someone else, but you can get help here! :-)...

Writing FeedbackHigherEducation - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
Has the Chinese government changed after the Tiananmen Square Massacre?

2 - Hello, I think you need to proofread your essay better. There are quite a few grammatical errors, some...

Writing Feedbackken349137 - May 26, 2010 / puroodsy - May 27, 2010
SAT Essay: Are our decisions always limited by the rules of society?

3 - Thanks for all the comments! 'Chimerical' is a word I picked up from the SAT word list. It...

Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 25, 2010 / puroodsy - May 27, 2010
PEOPLE SHOULD CHANGE THEIR JOBS ATLEAST ONCE - FEEDBACK

NEW - If we are to compare the job flexibility of today's generation and those of 20 years back. We can...

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Classification essay- Modern students's learning style

5 - For a long time, studying have has been a significant issue among human beings. That is the only...

Writing FeedbackHUTAllen - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
Computer based Instructions ! Good or bad.

4 - Yes, good corrections here. You have some options: Computers represent one of the... or The computer is one of...

Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
ESSAY - READING ENTERTAINMENT BOOKS INSTEAD OF EDUCATIONAL BOOKS - FEEDBACK

2 - Capitalize the titles of books. If we are to compare the difference between the reading habits of today's...

Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
IELTS ESSAY : FINANCIAL AID TO DEVELOPING COUNTRIES

4 - thanks for your generous help!!...

Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 24, 2010 / sheldon - May 26, 2010
Art history paper about looted artwork during WWII

NEW - I just need general feedback like if my sentences and grammar make sense and if I'm answering the question...

Writing Feedbackqueensuri - May 25, 2010 / — -
Factory is always links to the pollution problem

2 - I'll give some help here, too. I hope you will tell us if you have questions about the changes...

Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - May 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 25, 2010
TOEFL: THE INTERNET - problems or information? 'most powerful media'

8 - I think like these: To begin with/The first factor(/belief/reason/catalyst...) is that/I believe/.../(TRY NOTHING in replacement, just leave a gap...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - May 4, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 25, 2010
Should crimes committed many years ago be forgotten? - Essay writing advice

7 - Well, some sentences like the one above are very, very impressive. You write like someone who is...

Writing Feedbacklentan - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2010
IELTS TASK 2 : Study abroad (advantages and disadvantages)

3 - Comments: - Grammatical mistakes are quite visible, proving you not to have proofread. This field of errors includes...

Writing FeedbackNguyenXuanKien - May 23, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 23, 2010
People are moving in to the big cities for more comfortable and convenient life

10 - Mickey, you seem seriously interested in helping people. Everyone participating in this thread made such a unique contribution; I'm...

Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2010
Art Self-Evaluation piece: the process of creating your art portfolio

3 - I have had to take a long look at the last four years in LaGuardia & my art through...

Writing FeedbackJd87rh - May 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
Technology, one offspring of science, is a world of imagination being made true

7 - to some extent* :? Interesting way of approaching the prompt. placing down arguments for the assertive and...

Writing Feedbacktriplesmickey - May 12, 2010 / meisj0n - May 22, 2010
It is easy to welcome innovation and accept new ideas

3 - Is this really how they wrote the statement? It is a run on sentence. I would do...

Writing FeedbackGary1986 - May 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
Today we have a variety of food and we have various choices to prepare food

3 - I also think that eating "fast food", whether it McDonald's or the Olive Garden it's not as healthy as...

Writing FeedbackArshin - May 21, 2010 / haeddleman - May 21, 2010
Music and art in school essay

6 - In conclusion, undoubtedly, this is the era of computers and science. Therefore, schools must be flexible enough to...

Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2010
ESSAY- Comment on freedom on choice of clothing in schools - FEEDBACK

2 - No comma necessary here: School is the place which lays foundation ... progress or their overall personalities ....

Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2010
Marine Pollution Introductory paragraph

2 - Source of survival is a strange phrase. It might be better to write: Water is the most crucial factor...

Writing Feedbackeveehp - May 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
My hero, Terry Fox born in Canada

3 - Yes, that is true. It seems that Namon is struggling to improve her/his English, though, so let's help...

Writing Feedbackthailand - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
Parents should encourage their high school students for part time jobs !

4 - Working twenty years at an inconsequential job may not give as much satisfaction as a highly prolific and demanding...

Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
SAT: even though having a good leader is important, we should not blindly follow his decision

5 - Thank you for your advice :)...

Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 18, 2010 / puroodsy - May 20, 2010
"True beauty" is the good humanity

6 - I think your grasp of English is really good actually, but it just takes practice Tips on writing:...

Writing Feedbackyangzom - May 14, 2010 / meisj0n - May 20, 2010
IELTS; MOVIES & TELEVISION CAN POSITIVELY INFLUENCE PEOPLES' BEHAVIOR

2 - try to avoid writing firstly, secondly.. instead use sentences like one of the significant reasons.. over all good ideas,...

Writing Feedbackphuocqui - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 19, 2010
"Failure is necessary for education to take place?" - grade my essay

5 - thank you very much....

Writing FeedbackMizo Metallic - May 13, 2010 / Mizo Metallic - May 19, 2010
ielts essay: Advantages of attending school from a young age

2 - HI..SEPIDEH You have some grammatical errors in your essay.Which i guess, already been corrected by other users. Just remember...

Writing Feedbackgingerpopo - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 18, 2010
'dark metal genre'; About the Music and why it's important to many people?

4 - thanx alot bro for your notes,but unfortunately most of them are typos. i just want you to give...

Writing FeedbackPink1 - May 16, 2010 / Pink1 - May 17, 2010
Control over happiness - 'people gain happiness differently' (SAT)

5 - The first sentence, which should aptly give the first impression, is quite prolix and obscure. To say that...

Writing FeedbackSA51 - Apr 28, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 17, 2010
Theatre Under The Stars

NEW - The popular musicals titled Shrek the Musical and West Side Story will be joining another popular musical that had...

Writing Feedbackshane123 - May 17, 2010 / — -
"Fifty-Four Forty or Fight" History Research Essay

2 - Capitalize "River" because it is part of a proper noun. Columbia River I see a little typo: rejection...

Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - May 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
Term Paper: Sailor Mentality

3 - Don't use a semi-colon here: ...when he writes: "With a philosophical flourish... or ...when he writes, "With a philosophical...

Writing Feedbackwilcerf - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
The important lesson is life. The best teachers for the life are parents.

4 - Generally, people should count( consider) their parents as their life's teacher.Because they had got more experienced life. They could...

Writing FeedbackShukur - May 7, 2010 / babydoll - May 16, 2010
Children have trend to be significantly more violent and careless in their study and social life

5 - Hi! Here is a little feedback I'll add to the great advice that has been given... It is...

Writing FeedbackPink1 - May 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
Text messaging: write about an invention that has changed your life

3 - The invention that made the biggest change in my life was text messaging. This discovery changed my way of...

Writing FeedbackLordBartosz - May 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2010

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