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Rhetorical Analysis - Advertisement photos

2 - Right after this, add another sentence before ending your first paragraph. Make it a thesis statement that clearly...

Writing FeedbackShelty - Mar 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2010
"the real reason for the Yosemite decline" - my argument essay

5 - EXCELLENT! Clearer than my guilding book. I Got it! thanx so much, I'll rewrite it later. :P...

Writing Feedbackjade - Mar 25, 2010 / jade - Mar 30, 2010
Response to Scholarly Reading of Paulo Friere's "Banking" Concept of Education

3 - Yes, thats good idea, I will do that way....

Writing Feedbackalina967 - Mar 23, 2010 / alina967 - Mar 30, 2010
Living in the country or city? Living in the country aint all that you think!

3 - Therefore you have to go ... if you like going without money ... ...the country have has less...

Writing Feedbackjr24 - Mar 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
The legal drinking age in Ontario

4 - I think you should scratch out this sentence and replace it with a sentence says something about countries with...

Writing Feedbacknafiro - Mar 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
GRE ISSUE221 The chief benefit of the study

5 - Yes, I did find another one: Although time and tide elapsed, these inspiring words of Sphinx can still be...

Writing Feedbacksnowdropie - Mar 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2010
Tony Hoagland's "Romantic Moment" -- personal response essay

4 - Thank you very much for your reply!...

Writing Feedbackmbiscoe25 - Mar 4, 2010 / mbiscoe25 - Mar 28, 2010
IELTS essay-sports professionals people vs.people in other essential professions

2 - There has been some debate over whether athletes should get higher incomings incomes compared with... It is...

Writing Feedbackgmt_snail - Mar 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2010
Computers and operation systems - My introduction

5 - How about "compete to" instead of "compete about" ...are competing about releasing to release the best operating systems....

Writing FeedbackRaz - Mar 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2010
A woman's place should be in home?

8 - That is an important point, thanks! However, I don't see any contractions in the essay. Some words...

Writing Feedbackhungvud - Mar 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 27, 2010
ielts:role of computers in education

4 - Firstly, they prepare a friendly atmosphere in class. i recommend you dicuss more here....

Writing Feedbackgingerpopo - Mar 23, 2010 / gmt_snail - Mar 27, 2010
TOEFL:People enjoy change.others like their lives to stay the same

5 - thank u wang for the time that you have spent to edit my essay zhiyang , this topic...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 23, 2010 / djanat - Mar 26, 2010
the effects of stress (cause and effect paper)

11 - Here is another way to improve this sentence: Considering the fact that everybody deals with puzzling matters everyday, it...

Writing Feedbackbrooke4013 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2010
"How people look, dress & act reveals their attitudes and interests" -GRE ISSUE

5 - Thank you! Kevin~...

Writing Feedbacksnowdropie - Mar 24, 2010 / snowdropie - Mar 26, 2010
Take caution (one important aspect of your character)

2 - No need for drastically here, because it has no meaning in the sentence: Time drastically came to a halt...

Writing Feedbackmegdance48 - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
Is Technology changing the world for better?

4 - to lead a live where we know when we have a sufficient amount of material comforts. material is always...

Writing Feedbacklongwu - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
DREAM BRING ME TO ANOTHER WORLD

4 - She was right to say that, because it applies in many situations in real life. But there are some...

Writing Feedbackautumnwave - Mar 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
Toefl integrated essay：Were there life-form on Mars？

4 - Good example! These have slightly different meanings, though!! If you say it completely refutes the passage, it sounds...

Writing Feedbackodie6467 - Mar 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
"Preventing Herpes" - Current Issue in Public Health using an article about health problem

9 - I think this should be two sentences instead of one: Herpes is one of the most co mmon sexually...

Writing Feedbackcomet2000 - Mar 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
My essay relating to job satisfaction :)

2 - Satisfaction obtained from work is considered as a more and more by many to be a crucial way to...

Writing Feedbackgmt_snail - Mar 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2010
Introduction/Thesis Help (good family = good future, bad family = bad future)

9 - Usually people say, "The teenage years" rather "the years of a teenager" Oh, I'm glad you finished and...

Writing FeedbackKurogashi - Mar 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 21, 2010
I believe that both classmates and parents have considerable influence on children

4 - if you see the mistakes, help correct them! Here we go: Oh, wait a minute! I...

Writing Feedbackjimmy1983 - Mar 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 20, 2010
Cause & Effects of Computer Addiction

5 - Thanks for all the kind words and help. If you guys see anything else or can think of something...

Writing Feedbackbrown287 - Mar 18, 2010 / brown287 - Mar 19, 2010
TOEFL:Decision can be made quickly

2 - We have to take make decisions. "make" Almost all people have to make some decisions in their daily...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
TOEFL:Some people trust their first impression about a person character

3 - "Lot" is a singular noun, so you have to write: There are many people who believe that the... ...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
"What is love?" - It's the beauty of a rose, yet often vile as her thorns

7 - Did she tell you what she took points off for? If she gives great feedback, you'll know what...

Writing Feedbacktrevor5249 - Mar 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 19, 2010
Private car ownership has grown dramatically in recent years.

7 - There are two small points : (1) two "there be " sentence patterns It is no doubt...

Writing Feedbacksaruul2004 - Mar 2, 2010 / cathyliu - Mar 18, 2010
'Getting what is different' - TOEFL:People are never satisfied with what they have.

2 - Great intro paragraph! The first factor is the jealousy. The jealousy ... Jealousy also makes people to...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 17, 2010
TOEFL: Most of secondary schools include the art and music course in their annual program

4 - but it will be tedious to have them as a mandatory courses at secondary school. he or she...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 14, 2010 / mocixuan - Mar 17, 2010
GRE argument: sales prediction

2 - In sum, the author wants to make a prediction about the future sales whereas his deduction contains several facets...

Writing Feedbackmocixuan - Mar 16, 2010 / r43ew - Mar 17, 2010
insufficient respect towards old members of society

3 - thanks kevin i'll try my best to overcome my mistakes in future...

Writing Feedbackvikasp - Mar 15, 2010 / vikasp - Mar 16, 2010
Report Help - Reflection on choice of education.

2 - I think the answer is to take it one sentence at a time. You know what it is...

Writing Feedbackspecwarop - Mar 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 15, 2010
living in one place or always moving for a good job ,house,or even climate.

3 - This is very thoughtful, but you will need to practice English a lot. It's hard to learn, but you...

Writing Feedbackmuxuan - Mar 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 15, 2010
Words effect (Cause and Effect essay - Power of words)

5 - Thanks Kevin and djanat.....

Writing Feedbackbilal ABUZENAH - Mar 12, 2010 / bilal ABUZENAH - Mar 15, 2010
Technical Article: How GNU/Linux differs from Unix

4 - Thanks a lot trevor5249 and EF_Kevin....

Writing Feedbackvinaytp - Mar 12, 2010 / vinaytp - Mar 15, 2010
American Government "Paper" Concerning the Constitution...

3 - During the drafting of the United States Constitution, the legislating delegates were faced with solving several dilemmas, including... In...

Writing FeedbackMarkTwain90Angl - Mar 13, 2010 / EF_Susan - Mar 14, 2010
"It is the artist, not the critic," GRE ISSUE144

4 - We human beings always feel our oats when talking about arts. --- What does "feel our oats" mean? I...

Writing Feedbackflydreams - Mar 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2010
TOEFL:reading fiction or watching movies

2 - Reading fiction is more advantageous than watching movies. First of all, reading fiction such as novels or short stories...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2010
comparing myself now to myself in the past

2 - your essay seem clear to understand. the bad thing is you have mentioned a lot of details i suggest...

Writing Feedbackangel 91 - Mar 11, 2010 / djanat - Mar 13, 2010
TOEFL: Schools should allot some hours a day to the physical exercises for their students.

2 - i think that you have little problem with grammar i'm pointing out some of your mistakes hope it will...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 12, 2010 / vikasp - Mar 12, 2010
TOEFL:a university plans to devlop a new research centre in your country.

2 - Most of the universities in the world seek to develop some research in some various countries. These research...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2010
IELTS Writing: opinions on children's part-time job

5 - Thanks for your help,Kevin~...

Writing Feedbackzebraessay - Mar 10, 2010 / zebraessay - Mar 12, 2010
What difficulties will face your country in the next ten years?

4 - Thank you Kevin, Your comments everytime help me much indeed, I really appreciate your responsiveness....

Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Mar 10, 2010 / plotophyte - Mar 12, 2010
Hunger - it's difficult to fully grasp the plight of it; Causes, Concerns and Symptoms

3 - Thanks!!...

Writing Feedbacksperkie - Feb 28, 2010 / sperkie - Mar 12, 2010
"people wanting to be important" - Definition essay: Pride

4 - Although it's a little bit late now, but thanks to both of you for your help :)...

Writing Feedbackmaryam_mah - Mar 10, 2010 / maryam_mah - Mar 11, 2010
SAT prep essay about materialism

3 - While countries like America and England enjoy ... Because of low production costs, and because of American and...

Writing Feedbackjordansearches - Mar 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
TOEFL:Sport may be dangerous if we will become possessed by it too much.

3 - You didn't capitalize the first letter of the essay. Whatever the reasons for the sport practiced by young...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
Photographs/ Reminisce about the past ; Classification Essay

6 - Sounds like a tough class, but it will make you a good writer! I think you should google dianna...

Writing FeedbackGYG17 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
History & Literature Vs Science & Mathematics; Every subject is important

2 - Taylor, that's really nice of you to spend so much time with it. The argument over... Some people may...

Writing Feedbacketaewoo - Mar 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
Sharuk Khan! He is my favorite hero.

6 - Sorry!! I can't give an accurate grade, because I don't know how these are scored. But if it's...

Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
GRE issue 153 skepticism in studying

5 - Ha ha, it's in the lower right corner of every post, and you can click on member names...

Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Mar 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2010
TOEFL:A person' childhood years are the most important years of a person's life

3 - Great job, Sabuhi, thanks!!! I think this correction is great, but it might be a misundersanding of...

Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2010
should or should not schools create single sex education

3 - yea for a single sex school i forgot to type not and so as the would not benefit part...

Writing FeedbackSpitFires - Mar 8, 2010 / SpitFires - Mar 10, 2010
IELTS Essay -250words - Technology Progression has a negative impact on us?

3 - You write almost perfectly. I want to tell you, though that your first paragraph seems incomplete. It should have...

Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Mar 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2010
GRE issue 48 History is like a puzzle

4 - Yeah, your sentences seem complex, like sentences used in formal writing. I notice that you are good at varying...

Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Mar 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2010
SAT practice essay about the possibility of knowing oneself

3 - Thank you for your time! Your critique was extremely helpful....

Writing Feedbackjordansearches - Mar 9, 2010 / jordansearches - Mar 9, 2010
TOEFL topic: wheter or not to build a school in your hometown

6 - i didn't check well for the errors but i do like your essay me too i will take the...

Writing Feedbackpeter007 - Feb 24, 2010 / djanat - Mar 9, 2010
Life in symmetry - Essay.

2 - You have a verb tense problem at the beginning. You can do this: Today, I spent almost two hours...

Writing FeedbackWanderer_x - Mar 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2010
Email and text messaging threats written language

5 - thank you so much.......

Writing Feedbackmalek1406 - Mar 3, 2010 / malek1406 - Mar 6, 2010
University education is mandatory to get a good career. Discuss opinion. IELTS

4 - Thank you all for your thoughtful observation....

Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Mar 4, 2010 / usalma2002 - Mar 5, 2010

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