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Musqueam and UBC Golf Course Research Paper, Part 2

3 - Thanks, I just really dissaprove of our current Premier cause he is repeatedly abusing his power and adding extra...

Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Jan 26, 2010 / icemaster2340 - Jan 27, 2010
the defendant's past criminal record - IELTS Writing Task 2.

2 - Crime is one of the most discussed problems in the world, and governments of countries spend lots of time...

Writing Feedbackgabrielesan - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 27, 2010
Air Pollution in Hong Kong - ( 500-word essay )

2 - Let's begin with the cause of the problems, which includes three main aspects. You should add this sentence to...

Writing Feedbacknarrow1234 - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 27, 2010
My Assignment: My New Year's Resolutions (200 words)

4 - Time flies so fast and Chinese's New Year is coming around the corner. And It's time for me...

Writing Feedbacklvnnk - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2010
Narrative My life changing moment

3 - I joined the Army to become a strong , disciplined and a courageous person. --- I think it sounds...

Writing Feedbackmellyp74 - Jan 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2010
Evolution of Federalism

2 - The word federalism is not seen in the constitution; however, throughoutthe many years in history, federalism has gradually... ...

Writing Feedbackpacers7ind - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 26, 2010
Organic foods against conventional foods - Can you check my essay

4 - Organic foods are getting more popular among the people of the world, and people are often choosing them over...

Writing Feedbackkichikov - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2010
Toefl essay: Students learn better when they are not threatend

4 - Thanks a lot! @RabiaG: I'm in first steps of writting an essay,I will try to improve it! @soarer:I think...

Writing Feedbackreiihane - Jan 22, 2010 / reiihane - Jan 26, 2010
Take a trip to Vietnam? (persuasive paragraph)

3 - I think that you shouldn't summerize what you're going to talk about in your intro. Just give out key...

Writing Feedbacknicolethuynh - Jan 25, 2010 / lic12 - Jan 26, 2010
computers have complicated people's life- agree disagree TOEFL essay

3 - thanks for your all comments kevin and yin anymore it is more clear to me.. i think i must...

Writing Feedbackpinpin - Jan 25, 2010 / pinpin - Jan 26, 2010
rejected for Early Action - SHORT AND QUICK EMAIL

9 - I'm sorry that you didn't get accepted. Maybe you should try setting up an appointment with the undergraduate admissions...

Writing Feedbackalexakrivoniak - Jan 17, 2010 / wongtongsoup22 - Jan 25, 2010
marriages should be arranged by the parents or not?

6 - Yes, I'm getting to them all as quickly as I can. Are there any particularly urgent ones? Also,...

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Nov 21, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2010
the Musqueam Reconciliatory Agreement: Part 1

3 - Keep this as part of the intro paragraph: In my opinion: Contrary to the... That is great thesis...

Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2010
How I learnt English

2 - I think you should start off where you came from, then proceed on to telling us where you work...

Writing FeedbackGSK - Jan 23, 2010 / lic12 - Jan 25, 2010
My grandfather - Essay for school.

8 - Thank you for your time commet2000 and Kevin....

Writing Feedbackjgv115 - Nov 24, 2009 / jgv115 - Jan 25, 2010
Question about the structure of discussion essay according to IELTS exam.

2 - these sentences below are interesting because of the rule called "number agreement." As a result, many employees may...

Writing Feedbackgazel - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 24, 2010
TOEFL ESSAY:HOW TO USE THE LAND THAT YOU WISH?

2 - Land is a valuable resource, as we can make a lot of money and a lot of other things...

Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2010
Descriptive essay of a person you know (family first, himself last)

2 - I know that sounds bad becauseit makes you think we used him. It's not like that at all,...

Writing Feedbacktwillis32 - Jan 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2010
My Existentialism Beliefs-Free Will, karma, and reincarnation

3 - It depends on whether or not you care about showing "good composition," whatever that is. If you want...

Writing Feedbackrosschang - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
people should try to earn money as much as possible??

5 - There are Hundreds of thousands of deaths around the world are caused every year by smoking. or There...

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
using computers in schools results in the rise in the illiteracy rate?

3 - Great corrections, caonhungchi! Here is another one: There is no doubt that the computer is one of the...

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
Dream Job essay (independent films)

3 - Thank you two for all you input. And to Juniper this essay is for Western Washington University, i'm also...

Writing Feedbackalejandrocastil - Jan 20, 2010 / alejandrocastil - Jan 23, 2010
Advantages and disadvantages of computer to run a small business!

7 - you use too many linking words. This may make your essay incoherent or maybe sometimes illogical...

Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 9, 2010 / hatung94 - Jan 23, 2010
Trafficking in human beings - My 500-words essay

7 - After studying a number of publications on this subject I made the following conclusions. Non-governmental organizations are doing a...

Writing Feedbackmalenkaya_ya - Jan 22, 2010 / malenkaya_ya - Jan 23, 2010
"Recent Moscow State University bachelor in psychology came to an unknown world"

2 - Let me introduce myself here. My name is ***, and I am ** years old. Throughout all this...

Writing Feedbacksarapultseva - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 22, 2010
governments should try to promote alternative energy resources?

NEW - i am preparing for ielts, however, my writing skill is not good.could u check this essay for my mistakes....

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Compare and Contrast Paragraph - Frogs and Toads

2 - I think you could come up with something more interesting as the first sentence! :-) It might...

Writing Feedbackilovetowrite - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
Some people prefer to work for large company. I belong to the technical domain

2 - The choice of company for an individual generally depends upon two factors -- namely, the salary package and the...

Writing Feedbackshraps - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
[TOEFL]Governments should spend much money on exploring outer space?

2 - ... an idea that seems sensible. In actuality , I believe that ... ... are not sure about...

Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
[TOEFL]I dont agree that businesses should do anything they can to make a profit!

6 - Thank you very much Kevin. I appreciate your help. :D...

Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 15, 2010 / yin - Jan 19, 2010
MySpace Not Responsible for Predators (an argumentave essay)

3 - He backs his claim with four very strong and direct points, which include the following: MySpace is not there...

Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 19, 2010
Evaluate: Is it more important to learn more about business or about agriculture

3 - Today with new technologies and globalization the world is shrinking and it has become difficult to define the differences...

Writing Feedbackjagk2j - Jan 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 19, 2010
learning from experience or learning from books - compare essay

2 - Hi you tend to forget a toefl format In the introduction part, you do not write an thesis,...

Writing Feedbackpinpin - Jan 19, 2010 / Keng - Jan 19, 2010
Problem Solving Essay:Contradicting Characteristics-Correct my essay

5 - Well, it should be something that resonates with ou. Think of what you feel strongly about; what problems are...

Writing Feedbackmilkee_0923 - Apr 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 18, 2010
1500 word report on a letter by the author Norman Angell appeared in Times 1914

NEW - FULLY UNDERSTAND AND EVALUATE OF SOURCE PROVENANCE 10% UNDERSTAND AND APPLY WHERE APPROPRIATE WIDER CONCEPTUAL QUESTIONS REGARDING SOURCE MATERIAL...

Writing Feedbackblue50 - Jan 17, 2010 / — -
the rise in good consumption reflect the power of advertising not for real needs

NEW - i am preparing for ielts test. however, my writing is bad, please help me to check for my essay....

Writing Feedbackkhoctham - Jan 17, 2010 / — -
Industrial Revolution (essay on a respectable topic)

2 - They showed us a powerful video/audio footage of Rachel's life and the Columbine tragedy that led everyone, including me,...

Writing Feedbackawaterbottle38 - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
IELTS: The money spent on Leisure and Education was a very little amount in all 5 countries

2 - This is very good! You should feel confident in your communication skills. Whenyou put 2 complete sentences together...

Writing FeedbackRuah - Jan 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
Essay about responsible for bringing children up

2 - I see that Jen made some excellent corrections here! Notice that she put an s at the end of...

Writing Feedbackcavin301 - Jan 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
toefl essay - Human is a threat to an another human

6 - Thank you for your feedback. It seems that i may lose a point in an essay exam because i...

Writing FeedbackKeng - Jan 8, 2010 / Keng - Jan 16, 2010
education at schools is necessary for all people, not just excellent students

3 - Thank you, Yuwei Zhang :) Your feedbacks are very helpful to me. Thanks so much....

Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 16, 2010 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
TOEFL "Playing game is fun when you win?"

5 - In my point of view, the latter group's idea due to some significant reasons which will be discussed in...

Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Dec 31, 2009 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
Clean energy / threat to life on Earth - Benefits and risks of Nuclear Technology

2 - Do the people rate you on just your structures and grammar or including your ideas? If they rate you...

Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 8, 2010 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
Toefl essay Advertising can tell you a lot about a country

4 - Usually, people say More importantly More importantly, it can draw a lot of tourists to visit your country....

Writing FeedbackKeng - Jan 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 15, 2010
Are Juveniles Responsible for Their Crimes

4 - What's a boat ride 8? :-) Well, I totally hear you about the injustice of it. And...

Writing FeedbackJeannie - Jan 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 15, 2010
IELTS practice writing for music.

3 - In my opinion, traditional music in the past seemed to be more important than modern , international music but...

Writing FeedbackSeong - Jan 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 15, 2010
" GRE essay: Laws should not be rigid or fixed. ..

4 - I have a small suggestion. State your claim clearly at the begining...

Writing FeedbackDipD - Jan 4, 2010 / Dulie - Jan 14, 2010
"Miss Wordy" strikes again. I have to chop oh, about 193 words.

4 - This sentence gives chills. It is very powerful the way you place it here. It's a very powerful...

Writing FeedbackJeannie - Jan 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 14, 2010
dormitory or apartment - comparison essay

NEW - please correct my essay and give me some tips how to improve my essay ?Students at universities often...

Writing Feedbackpinpin - Jan 14, 2010 / — -
Animal and music lover - NCSSM Essay #1

7 - Hey again, here are some things I would do if it were my essay: (Ambitious is a good word...

Writing Feedbackfishbish4 - Jan 11, 2010 / salbazili - Jan 14, 2010
A girl who decides to stand up for what is right - Antigone essay

3 - Many people argue if about whether or not Antigone is a hero. This essay is all about the...

Writing FeedbackBenk84 - Jan 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 11, 2010
Taking one long vacation has more educational benefits than it used to be.

3 - Hi Panyapon, Don't capitalize student in that first line. They will have a good opportunity to do...

Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 10, 2010
An essay about Building up our Immune System.

8 - Thank you everybody for all your help! I really appreciate your prompt reply to my questions. Regards...

Writing Feedbackabd85 - Jan 6, 2010 / abd85 - Jan 9, 2010
The overpopulation leads many serious problems

4 - Thanks you for helpful comments. I wil continue to write and share them to you. Your advice and encouragement...

Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 5, 2010 / vothiha - Jan 7, 2010
"Terrorism is not new." - can sb help me edit this analytical writing piece?

5 - Hey Yin! Tnx a lot. I actually agree wid you that the first paragraph completely seems bizzarre and out...

Writing Feedbackmarpals - Jan 2, 2010 / marpals - Jan 7, 2010
essay on sovereignty, MA International politics essay

5 - Thank you very much for the answer. "Relative equality of states and the ungoverned international arena" is a practical...

Writing FeedbackUmbyboy - Dec 28, 2009 / Umbyboy - Jan 7, 2010
"Faker?" - Somatization Disorder (abnormal psychology essay)

4 - Is it possible to feel physical pain from a psychological disorder with no traceable cause? In the 1980's the...

Writing Feedbackdas74d - Dec 29, 2009 / psitutor - Jan 6, 2010
Write an argumentative essay Modern technology has increased material weath

2 - Yes, this is easy to understand. It is okay for you to write in a way that shows that...

Writing Feedbackngothanhtam - Dec 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010
Talk about how the poets show their respect to animals.

4 - This confused me... Agamemnon is ancient mythology, and it has been told many times, but when I google...

Writing FeedbackKellyli - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010
Media essay - GRE (Issue Topic)

4 - The structure is pretty good; those grammar errors Susan caught are most important. For the structure, you hae...

Writing Feedbackivanka22 - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010

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