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Essay on the legal drinking age

8 - Your essay come up with a very different way of presentation. I loved it. I will use it...

Writing Feedbackkokujampo - May 25, 2009 / biggestv - May 28, 2009
Clep essay-Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible.

4 - Your essay is very general and need specefic examples. Your grammer still need improvement. so I think to improve...

Writing FeedbackIndian - May 22, 2009 / biggestv - May 27, 2009
WPE --The minimum wage in the U.S.

5 - Yes, that's the one. You know that there are reasons to increase minimum wage (protect workers from exploitation)...

Writing Feedbacksapst21 - May 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2009
Causes of Global Financial Crisis

3 - While moderating here, I have often found myself recommending three books over and over again: Stechen King's On Writing,...

Writing Feedbackferocious12 - May 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2009
Essay on advantages of computer games

16 - To make your essay a bit stronger in view point you could list a few well known negative views...

Writing Feedbacktara11 - May 5, 2009 / maextra7 - May 26, 2009
[TOEFL ESSAY ] Should the Government Provide Free College?

4 - Thank you sooooo much. It helps me a lot. :)...

Writing Feedbackrjsdndi - May 24, 2009 / rjsdndi - May 25, 2009
Toefl: Is this good enough to get 24 score in writing section.

3 - Aye, the more concise the better, as multiple writers have noted. However, your fix for the sentence changes his...

Writing Feedbackbiggestv - May 23, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 24, 2009
School bus trip - a story

4 - Better yet, write the story so that the theme emerges from it without your protagonist having to reflect on...

Writing Feedbackceberus - May 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 23, 2009
TOEFL Essay-It can be quite difficult to learn a new language.

7 - I agree with Kevin -- you will pass! Learning a new language is generally enjoyable but at the...

Writing Feedbackwickyeden - May 18, 2009 / EF_Simone - May 23, 2009
CLEP English Comp. -- "That Government is Best Which Governs Least"

5 - Essay is very nice, I am also planning to take the same test. Your essay helps me knowing some...

Writing FeedbackTWRTW106 - May 21, 2009 / Indian - May 22, 2009
VIETNAM PAPER- Why did we lose?

3 - So, did all of Asia fall under communist rule? Or did the U.S. involvement in Vietnam prevent that?...

Writing FeedbackSmartFelix - May 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 21, 2009
English Comprehension Clep exam - essay to practice

2 - Maybe the tasks other people give us to do are just as difficult . In the next few paragraphs,...

Writing Feedbackakfir - May 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2009
nothing wrong - Young people are less interested in studying than in earning money

5 - Thanx for the feedback guys!...

Writing Feedbackceberus - May 17, 2009 / ceberus - May 20, 2009
Paragraph Elements

4 - You might also wish to avoid random capitalization: "Eggs, milk and cheese where just a few of the...

Writing FeedbackPeterV - May 15, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 19, 2009
Mercutio's importance to the plot and theme - Romeo and Juliet

5 - Kevin is right, you need to focus a bit more on a single key idea (your thesis). You might...

Writing FeedbackGebraroest - May 16, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 17, 2009
'manned spaceflight and education' - CLEP TEST ESSAY

3 - Your essay seems to focus more on what happened before your trip into outer space, and on how...

Writing FeedbackPeterV - May 15, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 17, 2009
Need your corrections for agumentative paragraph ("my supervisor")

4 - Thank u -Sean and Kevin. and Kevin, yes it did help me..thank u again.=D...

Writing Feedbackkyleighgrace - May 14, 2009 / kyleighgrace - May 17, 2009
Will You Buy a House or Start a Business?

9 - I think if you take advantage of most of the suggestions and changes offered, your essay will be just...

Writing Feedbackadalumi - Apr 27, 2009 / Londyn64 - May 16, 2009
CHANGE or AVOID CHANGE? Which is better?

4 - It's interesting that you are honest and not at all ashamed about being mediocre. Since you said something interesting,...

Writing Feedbackkirin - May 10, 2009 / Mustafa1991 - May 15, 2009
Do you support it or not? A mall construction in your neighborhood

6 - I don't think because it is your neighborhood, you necessarily own own your living space. What if you're renting...

Writing Feedbackadalumi - May 12, 2009 / Mustafa1991 - May 14, 2009
Violence and the youth - two reports

3 - Here are some quick revisions you could make to the essay in your latest post. I'll do 1 line...

Writing Feedbackttc1234 - Apr 28, 2009 / Mustafa1991 - May 14, 2009
Essay about violence and violent behavior in the Media

3 - I notice you seem to use a lot of paraphrasing in your essay, with few direct quotations. Some direct...

Writing Feedbackttc1234 - May 13, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 14, 2009
What are the differences between life in America and life in Third World nations

14 - Great, they'll be lucky to get your feedback. I had a Spanish teacher once who pointed out how much...

Writing FeedbackRhadames - May 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2009
Feedback for my essay on Philosophy Paper relating to parfits personal identity

3 - Unlike the de-connecting of hemispheres, and reconnecting them, and then suddenly having the stream on consciousness connect, you would...

Writing Feedbackhketek - May 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2009
"How must we change our lifestyles to meet the threat of global warming?"

6 - Thanks for this help, i am now feeling more confident on constructing this essay and it may lead me...

Writing Feedbackantondude - May 9, 2009 / antondude - May 12, 2009
Iranian Revolution Recounted in Persepolis

2 - This seems to start in media res. You need to work on situating the events you describe in context....

Writing Feedbackbanannax - May 11, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 12, 2009
Detecting Deception Based on Nonverbal Behaviour Cues:a literature review

2 - I don't see any grammar mistakes, but I can tell you're lying by analyzing your sentence structure! No,...

Writing Feedbacklialia - May 10, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2009
IELTS writing: email and text messaging threats written language

6 - hi, i do not think the disadvantages of email and text message rest with the weakened position of...

Writing Feedbackmarine - Apr 30, 2009 / kirin - May 10, 2009
The New Great Depression

4 - Great ideas from Sean; and Marcel explained a problem better than I could have: overly colloquial. What a great...

Writing FeedbackDan - May 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2009
My paper, for Newt Gingrich...

19 - Yes, for sure, if you are seeking help from everyone possible, and if you show them that you really...

Writing FeedbackMoeMoe1 - Mar 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 9, 2009
Reflective Essay On This School Year: "Closed Doors Are Not The End"

6 - Ah, you get to workshop this essay a bit, then, do you? It's always nice when teachers let you...

Writing FeedbackBabiix - May 6, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 8, 2009
"The Contested Terrain of Media Text and its Effects on Contemporary Culture"

3 - This is a fascinating subject. I notice you didn't mention that the world of 24 had an America governed...

Writing Feedbackgudjuju22 - May 5, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 8, 2009
"Our desire to conform is greater than our respect for objective facts." - Essay

15 - Yeah, I know what you mean. They have their purpose. Still, I am often surprised at how much better...

Writing Feedbackx0vicksz - May 3, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 7, 2009
Essay on Traditional meal in Christmas Day

6 - :) Sarma mmmmmmmmm, hi neighbor! :)...

Writing Feedbackgacesaa - Apr 30, 2009 / Chidem - May 7, 2009
English Comp. CLEP - practice essay "Impossible Goals"

9 - Well, they are testing for English competency, and so presumably have backgrounds in language rather than in computer science....

Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 24, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 6, 2009
What essential skills young people should have in our complex society?

14 - These days, I am busy preparing... Awesome, see you when you get here! :)...

Writing Feedbackflorazhou - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 6, 2009
CLEP Practice Essay - effect of computers on work now versus 100 years ago

4 - Thanks so much. My intro was much longer in draft with a better hook and a more specific example...

Writing Feedbackabryant - May 5, 2009 / abryant - May 6, 2009
Aboriginal Rights in the Twentieth Century-My term essay for History

7 - Great question! Fluidity comes from having a central theme for the whole essay, and then having a mini theme...

Writing Feedbackmacawtopia - Apr 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 5, 2009
Archimedes; "Eureka!" essay

10 - Hmmm . . . what exactly were the assignment instructions? If you are just writing a biographical piece, you...

Writing FeedbackFreedomMoto - Apr 30, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 5, 2009
TOEFL Essay - Convenience food can not improve the way we live.

15 - Perhaps it is a good idea to make time to be healthy? For that matter, while some people have...

Writing FeedbackMonkeyDDragon - Apr 15, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 5, 2009
"The Masque of the Red Death" by Edgar Allan Poe Research Paper

3 - This is high-quality stuff. You write very well, so you can now go up to the next level by...

Writing FeedbackLunasly - May 3, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 4, 2009
Language-Way of Dialect-

5 - The exact instructions would help, as Tyler said. Also, you might want to consider adding more detail to your...

Writing Feedbackcin ali - Apr 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 4, 2009
My attitude towards writers is mostly positive. Writers have creative and imaginary minds.

10 - It will be impossible to completely eliminate the use of "I" in an essay on this sort of topic,...

Writing Feedbacksally12 - May 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 4, 2009
"Bad Boss" Essay - selfish, hypocritical, harassing, malice, poor communicator.

3 - Use " " marks to show the term you are discussing: Defining a "bad boss" is difficult, as...

Writing Feedbackinsidecars - May 2, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2009
Descriptive Essay: Joffrey's is My First Distance

5 - You might want to elaborate a bit on the descriptions, given that this is supposed to be a descriptive...

Writing Feedback3looy - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 2, 2009
Today, the dominance of global product brands threatens individual identity

5 - thanks Sean for your comment!I will keep practising!:D...

Writing Feedbackmarine - Apr 29, 2009 / marine - May 1, 2009
Write about a belief you have and the pros and cons of it (online writing essay)

5 - Thanks guys, I am working on revisions now!...

Writing Feedbackplugging_along - May 1, 2009 / plugging_along - May 1, 2009
I've vowed to change how I interact with people; Fruitful discussion.

5 - I think you once wrote that wordsmiths pick verbal arguments for the same reason jocks often pick physical fights...

Writing FeedbackMustafa1991 - Apr 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 1, 2009
Bioethical Disputes: simple essay on explaining a concept

7 - No, I meant I don't understand how institutionalization is a bioethical dispute. Sorry, I guess the emphasis wasn't clear...

Writing FeedbackTESE - Apr 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 1, 2009
Process Anaylsis Essay in 5 paragraphs (CompTIA Network+ Exam)

5 - This is an excellent process analysis essay. The only suggestion I can think of is that you might want...

Writing Feedbackalexxis - Apr 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 1, 2009
All Quiet on the Western Front, main theme of camaraderie

4 - Thanks :)...

Writing Feedbacknuker2guy - Apr 29, 2009 / nuker2guy - May 1, 2009
Description Essay: The Rider

7 - You deserve it! Congratulations....

Writing Feedbackalexxis - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2009
Rough Draft on relation between the epigraph and Gatsby in The Great Gatsby

4 - You might want to add a paragraph on to the end of your essay in which you explain why...

Writing FeedbackLifeisallugot - Apr 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 30, 2009
English Comp Essay for clep exam- "Banning ammo"

3 - Awesome... I wish I'd thought of that. :) Thanks. I'm working on another right now. I'll definitely reread it...

Writing FeedbackTemsik - Apr 29, 2009 / Temsik - Apr 29, 2009
"Leave it to Allah!" Does this article sound good in English?   2

48 - I'm curious; do you mean that calling for love requires learning, arts, literature, and religion, or that love...

Writing Feedbacktasneemspring - Mar 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 29, 2009
Under the Age of Eighteen and in the Military: Evaluation Essay

4 - Your essay needs a sharper focus. Tyler already pointed out your need for a thesis upfront. You will also...

Writing Feedbackmichaelfrye1970 - Apr 26, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 29, 2009
The Effects of Violent Movies

9 - i have to do a similar essay...i think you should write out an outline intro-thesis main body- write...

Writing Feedbacksilentheart - Apr 17, 2009 / ttc1234 - Apr 28, 2009
Spend more time working hard on jobs or stay with families?

10 - When family is in conflict with working， which one will you will pay more attention to and spend more...

Writing Feedbackflorazhou - Apr 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2009
Here's the Problem - an essay

3 - It is my children and their friends who have made me realize how different the coming world is going...

Writing FeedbackRajiv - May 26, 2007 / Rajiv - Apr 27, 2009
Financial anaysis essay (cash flows)

5 - I have no background in this area of expertise, but I can show where some words are missing: ...

Writing FeedbackAbby002 - Apr 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2009

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