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|IELTS task 1: People who lived in Charlestown
3 - Hi Peter, let me show what you are supposed to improve. Please, meet my notes and deal with them....
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Dec 1, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Dec 2, 2017
|The school system should start teaching foreign language class at primary school.
3 - Roba, contrary from what the above poster said, you MUST use the pronoun "I" in these discussions because these...
Writing FeedbackRobaa - Dec 1, 2017 / Holt - Dec 2, 2017
|The top performing sportsmen earn huge amount of money as compared to people in other professions
5 - @chinkybehl22 hello, I have read your whole essay. as per my knowledge I have rearrange your essay to...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 18, 2017 / sfiza - Dec 1, 2017
|IELTS TASK 1-The chart gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity
3 - Hi Ulica,I have read your writing closely and it is actually a good job. However, you forgot a few...
Writing FeedbackUlica - Dec 1, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Dec 1, 2017
|IELTS WT2, Fast-food companies should not be allowed to give away free toys with their food
3 - Kay, you have set an admirable goal for yourself with regards to your desired score for the IELTS test....
Writing Feedbackmacbz - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Dec 1, 2017
|A university education should include an internship or some type of work experience.
2 - Trà , which of the English tests are you preparing for? IELTS or TOEFL? Also, what is the complete...
Writing FeedbackSakiCCS - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Dec 1, 2017
|The information superhighway was greatly transformed the way man conducts his activities today
Writing FeedbackErica Tin - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Nov 30, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Material Possessions or Kindness/Trust?
Writing Feedbackzeqiyasin - Nov 29, 2017 / happyfunny - Nov 30, 2017
|Internet is as violent as entertaining - essay based on a short story
3 - @Holt Dear Holt. Thank you very much for your advice! I will reconsider the problem that you have mentioned...
Writing Feedbackqin6882060 - Nov 29, 2017 / qin6882060 - Nov 30, 2017
|Exercise should be a more important part of the school curricullum - persuasive essay
2 - Alex, your teacher is right. This is not a persuasive essay. This is an opinion paper and nothing more....
Writing Feedbackaryanxxx - Nov 29, 2017 / Holt - Nov 30, 2017
|The idea of using a standardized national curriculum in the entire nation
4 - Hello, I think your response is adequate, but i believe you should change somethings to make the essay fall...
Writing Feedbacksy9891 - Nov 27, 2017 / jrd519 - Nov 29, 2017
|Reading reflections about artical
5 - Hi Jeannie! I am also a non-English as a first language-person. I agree with Holt that translating the English...
Writing FeedbackJeannieHo - Nov 27, 2017 / benamilada - Nov 29, 2017
|Female teachers were dominant in pre-school, primary and secondary school in the UK in 2100
Writing Feedbackquanghuy219 - Nov 29, 2017 / quanghuy219 - Nov 29, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2: TV or newspaper? neither? Internet
2 - Peter, This is a pretty good essay, even though your opening paraphrase is not proper. The opening paraphrase is...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017 / Holt - Nov 28, 2017
|task 2 essay : Gender Inequality Aspect In The Professional Zone
8 - Some spelling mistakes For example Although nowadays we are ... Frist of all First? Aim for long sentences. Normally,...
Writing FeedbackNguyenBinh - Nov 21, 2017 / PeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017
|People today suffer from pressures different from that present in the past. Life is more stressful.
4 - I believe that you should make your sentences longer as that what they are looking for as far as...
Writing Feedbacknooraleslam - Nov 19, 2017 / PeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017
|WRITING TASK 1: opinions of male and female members about a city sports club.
3 - ... male members are not satistifed unsatisfied with compared ... You use the same word too many...
Writing FeedbackJames Hoang - Nov 25, 2017 / PeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017
|People increasingly access the news online these day, rather than buying newspapers and magazines
7 - @Hiwi_Life Thanks a lot for your feedback. :) @Holt yes, maybe Holt is right. I'm really "thinking in...
Writing FeedbackHanh Mai - Nov 26, 2017 / Hanh Mai - Nov 28, 2017
|IELTS task 1: reasons for either driving or cycling to work
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017 / Holt - Nov 28, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: More people are moving away from an agriculture background to big cities
5 - Hi Vu, You should address what are you about to do to the reviewer in your essay by providing...
Writing Feedbackchauvb38 - Nov 26, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 27, 2017
|The caused of deforestation around the world. Solution essay.
3 - @Holt, thank you so much for the informative feedback. You are right, this is called cheating if I revise...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 27, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 27, 2017
|Opening the novelties of efficient train services for travel across city capitals
3 - Hi Qianting, I have paraphrased the topic for its reference. Some people who live in a portion of...
Writing FeedbackQianting - Nov 27, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 27, 2017
|Sharing is a vital step in conducting research and doing business
Writing FeedbackQianting - Nov 11, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 27, 2017
|TASK 1 - BAR GRAPH - ANNUAL RIDERSHIP; public transport in Williamsville
Writing Feedbackhunghoiham2608 - Nov 23, 2017 / hunghoiham2608 - Nov 27, 2017
|Technology has a significant influence on communication and relationships between people.
4 - Sophie, since this is not a comparison essay, you should not be discussing both points of view in the...
Writing Feedbackilove199784 - Nov 26, 2017 / Holt - Nov 27, 2017
|IELTS WRITNG 1: The total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
3 - I also find it struggling to describe a bar char every time when I check with the sample answers....
Writing FeedbackThuyLinhMarC - Nov 22, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 27, 2017
|Do you prefer to eat out or at home? Life in a big city versus a small town. Toefl independent essay
3 - Hi naseernasrati, Here are some suggestions to your essay: 1. Your opinions are too absolute. Try to...
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 26, 2017 / qinshirl - Nov 26, 2017
|The percentage of U.K. university students in England who were capable to speak different languages
Writing Feedbacklouislo1006 - Nov 26, 2017 / louislo1006 - Nov 26, 2017
|Some school have special course for sports while others do not provide any of the kind.
Writing FeedbackH962018 - Nov 25, 2017 / H962018 - Nov 25, 2017
|OBESITY IS A NEW DISEASE FOR CHILDREN
3 - please give me the site to read some English documents and also, to check some writing. to increase the...
Writing Feedbackamateur - Nov 23, 2017 / amateur - Nov 24, 2017
|TOEFL Integrated task - three possible explanation regarding the origin of this old manuscript
2 - Behzab, your opening paragraph could have been stronger if you have indicated the criteria that was to be discussed...
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 23, 2017 / Holt - Nov 24, 2017
|Contrast paragraph between adulthood and childhood.
Writing Feedbackfrankovidaxt - Nov 23, 2017 / frankovidaxt - Nov 24, 2017
|Single-gender profession brings more advantages owing to numerous differences in sexual physiques
Writing Feedbacklinhluong158 - Nov 22, 2017 / linhluong158 - Nov 23, 2017
|Each househole and family produces a large amount of rubbish every week [IELTS]
5 - you were not clear about the role of the government in solving the problem. the role of citizens should...
Writing Feedbacktrandangkhoa - Nov 23, 2017 / Codex1717 - Nov 23, 2017
|TASK-2: schools are no longer necessary because there is so much information available through WWW
4 - fiZa, here is the scoring breakdown: TA - 4, your opening paraphrase and body of paragraphs are only...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Nov 23, 2017 / Holt - Nov 23, 2017
|Students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money. What are the reasons?
3 - Dear@quynhvan, I have read your essay, I think you need follow the structure of essay for writing otherwise...
Writing Feedbackquynhvan - Nov 23, 2017 / sfiza - Nov 23, 2017
|Both charts gave the readers a glance of the education rates of different levels across the world
2 - Ellie, this essay will get an automatic failing score because you wrote only 141 words when the minimum is...
Writing Feedbackellie8615 - Nov 22, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|It is observed that some languages is diminishing as time goes. Saving those or not?
3 - Sumerlin, your introduction is not perfect. In fact, you show that you did not understand the prompt discussion instruction...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 22, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|Product variety and supply chain
3 - Chen, what exactly is the point of this statement? I know from the presentation that this is not for...
Writing FeedbackCHEN ZHIXIN - Nov 22, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|Report for a university lecturer describing the information on Japanese tourist traveling abroad
3 - It is always my pleasure to read your feedback. The bar chart illustrates the percentage of some hurdles...
Writing FeedbackRidho Kodel - Nov 18, 2017 / Ridho Kodel - Nov 22, 2017
|All young people should be encouraged to try new sports, including extreme sports?
3 - Kathrin, what is the complete prompt that you are responding to? What kind of test is this for? Is...
Writing FeedbackKathrin1221 - Nov 21, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|Essay about general&specific education - Writing IELTS Task 2
3 - I could praphrase the introduction in this following sentences below: In several nations, students are taught many subjects to...
Writing FeedbackRzkMg - Nov 21, 2017 / Richard Le - Nov 21, 2017
|Some people are afraid of new things therefore they stick to what they know
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 20, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 21, 2017
|Companies should actively recruit younger employees who have greater potential to learn
4 - @kuan446697 your line of reasoning in the essay is faulty. You have not appropriately defended your first line of...
Writing Feedbackkuan446697 - Nov 20, 2017 / Holt - Nov 21, 2017
|Proportion of older and young people in the society
2 - Arlen, while your opening statement is a somewhat accurate depiction of the original prompt, it falls under the minimum...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Nov 20, 2017 / Holt - Nov 21, 2017
|The international community should reduce or eliminate the debt of the world's poorest countries
5 - Thanks! summerlin I am also referring to Youtube English learning channel which helps me to work on my...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 19, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 20, 2017
|Today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives?
5 - @pier Thanks for your recommendations, it's helpful! @summerlin Thank you very much! @Holt I will rethink about...
Writing Feedbackvum - Nov 19, 2017 / vum - Nov 20, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - TABLE - AVERAGE MONTHLY RAINFALL - Woodsville and Blacksboro
4 - Hello, here are my advises, I think the first paragraph should be like introduction, you shouldn't mention any...
Writing Feedbackhunghoiham - Nov 20, 2017 / Arlen - Nov 20, 2017
|Calories, protein - how much people need? Nutrient absorption in different parts of the world.
3 - Lin, your opening summary is incomplete. The various regions on the world should have been enumerated in the second...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 19, 2017 / Holt - Nov 20, 2017
|Writing letters on a paper is obsolete nowadays?
6 - @chinkybehl22 Thanks a million ! I really appreciate your effort trying to help my with my essay !...
Writing FeedbackTuan Anh 16 - Nov 19, 2017 / Tuan Anh 16 - Nov 19, 2017
|Identity, Turkey's history and conflict with the west
3 - It will be really helpful, if you can write the actual topic in order to seek feedback. There are...
Writing Feedbackj9622 - Nov 15, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 19, 2017
|ILETS Task Line graph: Precantage of workers with Illness Absence
6 - @Holt It's just my reading, I am not confident enough be sure about my understanding. I wanted to make...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 14, 2017 / summerlin - Nov 19, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - PIE CHART - AGRICULTURAL PRODUCTION
Writing Feedbackhunghoiham - Nov 17, 2017 / summerlin - Nov 19, 2017
|Should schools allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as to their libraries?
4 - @Holt I thank you so much for your constructive comment. This is an IELTS essay, and due to the...
Writing FeedbackAnn Ngo - Nov 19, 2017 / Ann Ngo - Nov 19, 2017
|Every success is because of hard working, luck has not much in common with success.
5 - @naseernasrati, You did a great job. But still, you need more practice same as all of us:). I am...
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 15, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Nov 19, 2017
|TOPIC:- Crime is a problem all over the world, crime prevention will make no difference.
2 - P1 ... unlawful activities, etc." (I hope your intention to use etc. is to imply that the the reader...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 17, 2017 / Ridho Kodel - Nov 17, 2017
|Young members of a society wants independence from their parents
4 - Overall good read, there are few sentence construction errors for which I would like to give suggestions: 1st...
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 14, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 17, 2017
|A paragraph about "Causes of children obesity"
4 - I recommend using e-prime. It allows your paragraph to have more specific information. Basically, you do not use any...
Writing Feedbackfrankovidaxt - Nov 17, 2017 / sugarcanexox - Nov 17, 2017
|The graph provides an overview of the percentages of people whose age is 65 or more
4 - The graph provides an overview... The graph shows the percentages of people from the United States, Japan, and Sweden...
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 16, 2017 / rowliejohnflores - Nov 17, 2017
|IELTS essay Task 2. English as a global language. Advantages overweight the disadvantages? 250words
5 - Dariela, you totally misunderstood the prompt requirement. This is an "emotional" essay response. Note the existence of the word...
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 16, 2017 / Holt - Nov 17, 2017
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