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|The percentage of elderly aged over 65 in USA, Japan and Sweden from 1940 to 2040 - IELTS
3 - Hi Ainun, I will give you a few corrections. Actually, based on the systematic, you can successfully write this...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Mar 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 9, 2017
|Car Ownership increasing big traffic jams
4 - Hey Nur! Like Holt said above, the introduction is mainly used to talk about the issue at hand and...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 8, 2017 / DoctorWho - Mar 8, 2017
|IELTS TASK 1 Other worker's salaries, teacher's salaries and furniture and equipment
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|The government should promote the use of renewable energy in electricity generation
3 - Luk, this is a sound summary of your policy paper research. I hope though that this is not the...
Writing Feedbacklskarena22 - Mar 8, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|IELTS WRITING PART 2 ex-criminals are good teacher for teenagers on danger of committing a crime
3 - Hi @Neo Lee After reading a whole of your essay, I can understand the reason of your agreement toward...
Writing FeedbackNeo Lee - Mar 8, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 8, 2017
|Higher entrance fees to attractions for residents than for foreign travelers?
6 - Duy, you would get a very disturbing score of 3 for this essay. The reason that you failed to...
Writing Feedbackhausofduy - Mar 8, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|News article about The Pakistan Super League.
5 - Neha, provide an overview or summary of the events that led to the brutal terrorist attack on that fateful...
Writing Feedbackhello123098 - Mar 6, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|Some alterations that had been done at West Park Secondary School from 1950 to 2010
2 - Nur, you misunderstood the illustrations that you were presented for the summary. The illustration provides information for changes to...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 7, 2017
|City or Country Life? Some people like me are fond of a fast-paced life in the city
2 - Nastya, I believe that you failed to provide another part of the prompt requirements. I am referring to the...
Writing FeedbackSoukho - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 7, 2017
|Comparison between average yearly costs on cell phone and landline phone services from 2001 to 2010
Writing Feedbacktuantu1710 - Mar 6, 2017 / tuantu1710 - Mar 7, 2017
|People have different views on dilemma if people successful in a sport should have higher earnings
6 - The format that you used is wrong. In order to accurately represent the task that you are given for...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Mar 5, 2017 / Holt - Mar 7, 2017
|Globalization - process of International integration which have its impact on people's life
3 - Globalization can trace its roots back to 1942, when Christoper Columbus first discovered the Americas during his expedition to...
Writing Feedbackjaviernilo2 - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 7, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.
7 - The sentence in the fourth paragraph is too long to read. This bad habit will form ... negatice...
Writing Feedbacksehatdinati - Feb 18, 2017 / ylin0233 - Mar 7, 2017
|The line chart compares the data of package delivery distributed by two delivery service companies
4 - Hi @ainunazwaria Some suggestions come to me are firstly writing task one's overview that should be followed the...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Mar 6, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 6, 2017
|It is inevitable for using alternative energy resources to replace fossil fuel exploitation
3 - Hi Nur, you have shown the good method for paraphrasing the statement. However, your last sentence in the introductory...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 6, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 6, 2017
|Education and health care should be financed by authorities - everyone could get free access to it
4 - Hi Nur, I really like reading your essay because you wrote this systematically. However, I have found there needed...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 5, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 6, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 : Life now is better today than it was century ago
3 - @Holt. thank for you comment and suggestion. i will note your reasons to improve my essay. Thank you....
Writing Feedbackcoco246 - Mar 6, 2017 / coco246 - Mar 6, 2017
|This essay about bar chart report related to "Average annual GDP growth"
3 - Tan, you could have done a better job of discussing the figures in the graph you were provided. The...
Writing FeedbackBinh Ngo - Mar 5, 2017 / Holt - Mar 6, 2017
|The percentage of four different type of films distributed in Australia and Britain in 2001
9 - dear @Maitouyen282 Overall your essay is good. I am here is on learning process too. And this is...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 3, 2017 / nuradiapuspa - Mar 5, 2017
|Every person is different. The happiness depends on people's own.
4 - Hi Reski, you have needed improvement for your writing. I am gonna offer you a few suggestions. Firstly, pay...
Writing FeedbackReskiRamadani88 - Nov 8, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Mar 5, 2017
|Briefly describe the work of this (My current job) organisation (max. 250 words)
3 - Diga, if there are English equivalents for the name of your organization, please use them first, with the original...
Writing Feedbackdigaprasiska - Mar 5, 2017 / Holt - Mar 5, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TEENAGE YEARS OR ADULT YEARS ARE MORE HAPPY ?
7 - Overall, I quite like this essay although it is a little long and there are a few grammar and...
Writing Feedbackkalyn - Mar 1, 2017 / adamrahimov - Mar 5, 2017
|Percentages of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features
3 - Raimov, your overview summary needs more work. It would have been best if you combined the first paragraph with...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 4, 2017 / Holt - Mar 5, 2017
|Choosing other jobs, changing occupations frequently - IELTS TASK 2
4 - @reptile5566 Since you already received feedback on the essay structure, I will try to highlight some grammatical/stylistic errors. Because...
Writing Feedbackreptile5566 - Mar 4, 2017 / serikbar - Mar 4, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - INFORMATION ABOUT DIARRHEA CASES IN MASHHAD FROM 1983 TO 1992
4 - Ainun, regardless of the minor problems that exist in your essay, those do not erase the fact that you...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Mar 4, 2017 / Holt - Mar 4, 2017
|Students should take priority to living away from home than sharing place with their parents
7 - Hai @thanhdo I have several comments about your writing. Firstly, you write too short essay for writing...
Writing Feedbackthanhdo - Mar 2, 2017 / ainunazwaria - Mar 3, 2017
|Ask a friend for some help regarding a part time job
Writing FeedbackNilendra - Mar 2, 2017 / Nilendra - Mar 3, 2017
|This essay will discuss the main reasons for increase the crime rate
5 - @akbarmappiare thank you very much. it is very helpful. I will concentrate about those when I am writing next...
Writing FeedbackNilendra - Mar 2, 2017 / Nilendra - Mar 2, 2017
|Promotion of the well-being in societies and environments in which they operate.
2 - Paras, your score for this essay cannot be higher than a 3 for the following reasons: Your overview summary...
Writing Feedbackparas01 - Mar 1, 2017 / Holt - Mar 2, 2017
|MY IELTS PRACTICE ESSAY ON THE "EXTINCTION" OF SEVERAL LANGUAGES
7 - Hello Pham Since you mentioned in the first sentence that some of languages are in danger of extinction...
Writing Feedbackkalyn - Feb 22, 2017 / diamondsky - Mar 1, 2017
|IELTS Task1. SUA, Sweden and Japan; Proportion of elderly in three different countries.
6 - Ana, do you see how the graph is arranged chronologically by year and how the percentage discussions followed suit?...
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 28, 2017 / Holt - Mar 1, 2017
|Deciding which age of the life is the happiest is a controversy
5 - @Holt thank you very much for your time. your explanation is clear. i will try my best next time....
Writing FeedbackNilendra - Mar 1, 2017 / Nilendra - Mar 1, 2017
|IELTS GT Writing Task 2 - Modern technology. Comment (test date approaching soon)
2 - Bumblebee I think you essay as pretty good contents and I think you clearly answered the prompt given, with...
Writing Feedbackbumblebee - Feb 28, 2017 / Fab - Feb 28, 2017
|Full time education before the age of 18 is beneficial for students and the whole society
2 - Jessie, please come up with an original title for your essay next time. You cannot use the prompt topic...
Writing FeedbackJessiewu - Feb 28, 2017 / Holt - Feb 28, 2017
|Problem/Solution essay Causes of crime - social inequality and low-wages are provoking this
4 - Hi Salma, welcome to Essay Forum. This is a right medium to improve your skill so that you should...
Writing FeedbackSalZappa - Feb 28, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 28, 2017
|You are a wealthy person who can buy either a house or a company. What would be your choice?
4 - Hi Sandeep I have read your essay and try reviewing this. In the first paragraph, you stand out...
Writing Feedbacksandeep kc - Feb 27, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 28, 2017
|Some people claim that the goal of politics should be the pursuit of an ideal. Others argue ...
4 - @paras01 The issues I see that needs tweaking are grammatical errors. Take note that you need to observe...
Writing Feedbackparas01 - Feb 28, 2017 / sugartown0829 - Feb 28, 2017
|The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
8 - @hongnguyentp92 I hope my suggestion would be useful. On the first paragraph, you tried to paraphrase "produce" with...
Writing Feedbackhongnguyentp92 - Jan 11, 2017 / bagusetyawan - Feb 27, 2017
|Giving tips for your sister on Simple Ways to Save Money
Writing FeedbackChewyy - Feb 26, 2017 / Chewyy - Feb 26, 2017
|Write a letter to your friend, in your letter ask your friend to send you one of the photographs
Writing Feedbackbumblebee - Feb 25, 2017 / Holt - Feb 25, 2017
|The tendency that youth graduates find it difficult to find a job nowadays
Writing Feedbacktramnguyen123456 - Feb 20, 2017 / Holt - Feb 25, 2017
|IELTS task 1 - describe the changes of an island before and after it turned to a resort
6 - @ainunazwaria Hi, thank you for your comment. But about the built or was built, I was trying to use...
Writing Feedbackthien_my - Feb 25, 2017 / thien_my - Feb 25, 2017
|A lot of technological enhancements have taken place in developing societies
6 - Prasanth, the proper paraphrasing of the prompt depends solely on the way that you understand the topic for discussion...
Writing Feedbackprasanthbab - Feb 20, 2017 / Holt - Feb 24, 2017
|The number of UK residents going abroad and overseas residents visiting the UK - IELTS WritingTask 1
4 - Hi Sehat, I have read your writing. I am gonna try giving you a few suggestions. Honestly, your first...
Writing Feedbacksehatdinati - Feb 24, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 24, 2017
|IELTS - the grievance note about the noise from your flat
3 - Hello Jaya Krishna, The content is good, I just would like to suggest you to change some sentences: ...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna - Feb 22, 2017 / pb1013 - Feb 23, 2017
|Children's education punish or award - ielts task 2
2 - I'm confused a bit since both sides don't seem directly disagreeing with each other, and the word qualified citizen...
Writing FeedbackFirework - Feb 23, 2017 / Nitivat - Feb 23, 2017
|INFORMATION ABOUT COMMUTING PATTERN IN HOUSTON, TEXAS AND CO2 EMMISSIONS
3 - As an additional feedback, reaching 6 or above is quite difficult isn't it? Even though you have written as...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Feb 22, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 23, 2017
|Food Production - is it important to know how our meal is produced? Or the taste only matters.
3 - Aziz, it seems that you somehow understood the prompt but failed to properly discuss the requirements. The paraphrasing of...
Writing FeedbackAziz_Gibran - Feb 23, 2017 / Holt - Feb 23, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1 : Wind Turbine placement and principle of operation (diagram)
3 - @Holt. thank for you comment and suggestion. The diagram actually just one. I forget to delete the first one...
Writing FeedbackAziz_Gibran - Feb 22, 2017 / Aziz_Gibran - Feb 23, 2017
|The ways used to dispose of the harmful garbage in Korea, Sweden and United Kingdom
3 - The introductory paragraph is well done, but I think you need to put some ideas in order to make...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Feb 22, 2017 / eddies - Feb 22, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: The main features of Global Water Usage in Brazil and Congo
2 - Nuradia, the summary overview of the essay is not presented at all. The opening statement should have first indicated...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Feb 22, 2017 / Holt - Feb 22, 2017
|I would argue that dwelling in small village had several merits and demerits.
5 - An effective thesis statement is one that paraphrases the prompt while delivering a personal understanding on your part of...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Feb 21, 2017 / Holt - Feb 22, 2017
|The quantities of goods moved using four kinds of means in the UK between 1974 and 2002
4 - dear @Abrahamlincoln, A few corrections from me.. Watch the grammar. In paragraph 1, The line graphs compare...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Feb 16, 2017 / nuradiapuspa - Feb 22, 2017
|Minimizing the traffic issue - proposed ways
7 - As mentioned, your introduction paraphrase should give your opinion for agree or disagree questionnaire. 2 or 3 rd...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Feb 14, 2017 / jaikrishna - Feb 22, 2017
|The bar chart indicates the figure of time spent in billions of minutes by UK people on phone calls
8 - Hai @Maitouyen282 These are few corrections from me. Hope it could be helpful :) 1. In paragraph...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Feb 21, 2017 / nuradiapuspa - Feb 22, 2017
|Marriage in early adulthood
3 - @Holt Thank for your advice. It took me two hours to think about main ideas for this essay. I...
Writing Feedbackthichankem - Feb 22, 2017 / thichankem - Feb 22, 2017
|Artificial environments. Positive and negative sides of zoos
4 - Hi @adamrahimov Don't you think you need to switch the opinion paragraphs? It will flow better (even though it...
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Feb 20, 2017 / d2ny - Feb 22, 2017
|[REFERENCES LETTER] She has demonstrated an exceptional ability to grasp the rigorous demands of job
7 - Sehat, keep the continued balance in your referral letters. Always present one professional and one extra curricular / socio-civic...
Writing Feedbacksehatdinati - Feb 21, 2017 / Holt - Feb 22, 2017
|task2; The pros and cons of living longer for human being
4 - Hi Jing, I will admit that this is one of the better developed essays that I have come across...
Writing FeedbackAllen1988 - Feb 20, 2017 / Holt - Feb 21, 2017
|Reading has become less significant to Americans.
7 - @akbarmappiare Thank you so much for your feedback. Can you give some suggestions regarding smooth transition from one paragraph...
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