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|The process of producing cement and making concrete which is raw material from cement for building
4 - Hi Anabel, I have read this closely. I have found a few things which you correct. Firstly, I have...
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 9, 2017
|Being a man or a woman makes diffrence whether or not people can be excluded from a job
12 - @anabel Yeah I should be more careful with commas and learn punctuation rules in general. The missing article was...
Writing Feedbackshohruhbek - Feb 7, 2017 / shohruhbek - Feb 8, 2017
|Unemployment is inevitable issue in the society, especially among school leavers
5 - The main problem with your essay is the opening statement. It does not contain the correct information. The opening...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 8, 2017
|Does the punishment required in order to educate a children?
4 - @Riyan Mudastsir 'know whether is right and wrong' is grammatically incorrect because there is no subject. I believe you...
Writing FeedbackRiyan Mudastsir - Feb 8, 2017 / shohruhbek - Feb 8, 2017
|IELTS (unpaid work is important for the young people?)
6 - Thank you very much for taking the time to review my essay. Your input and feedback are vitally important...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Feb 7, 2017 / rozhnaz - Feb 8, 2017
|The pie chart describe the degradation of agricultural land productivity in the worldwide.
6 - Hi Anabel, You should add the part of overall or conclusion in Task 01 because this part is important....
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 7, 2017 / Minh Ngoc - Feb 8, 2017
|Life is adventure, and adventure is a challenge.
2 - Miftah, sorry to say but there are lots of corrections needed in your essay and therefore, my suggestion is...
Writing FeedbackKing_mif - Feb 8, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 8, 2017
|Ability of Various Language for British Students - data based on the charts presented
Writing FeedbackJanicelo - Feb 6, 2017 / Janicelo - Feb 8, 2017
|Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
3 - Wow! Json, you blew this discussion out of the water! What an almost perfect discussion you presented in defense...
Writing Feedbackaloha21 - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 8, 2017
|The propotion of elder people aged 65 and over in three different countries
3 - Fadhil, you have written a very interesting report. It is not mechanical in nature because it shows a clear...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Nov 10, 2016 / Holt - Feb 8, 2017
|Increasing use of vehicles contributes to air pollution and leads to an overuse of natural resources
3 - Hey Maitouyen!! Overall an ok essay. I think your conclusion is pretty solid. But the introduction can be...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 7, 2017 / DoctorWho - Feb 7, 2017
|Total School Spending in the United Kingdom during three separate decades
3 - Hey Anabel. Time distribution is very important. Firstly read up on the entire material given and then focus...
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 7, 2017 / DoctorWho - Feb 7, 2017
|Topic about different standard for performance of male and female
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Feb 7, 2017 / thuy_nguyet - Feb 7, 2017
|A healthy lifestyle or dependence on doctors and medicines? Writing task 2 IELTS
6 - For instance, it could be harmful when someone who ... In my opinion the idea of this sentence is...
Writing FeedbackrezaES - Feb 7, 2017 / rozhnaz - Feb 7, 2017
|People get information through news, but meanwhile are uncertain about the truth of these news
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Feb 7, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Feb 7, 2017
|Development and rapid expansion of supermarkets make many local businesses unfit to compete
Writing Feedbackkitis - Feb 5, 2017 / kitis - Feb 7, 2017
|Who should care more about our health if not we ourselves? IELTS writing task II about healthy life
4 - Apart from above comments, I just want to add that your introduction is quite long, even longer than main...
Writing Feedbackrezamei - Feb 7, 2017 / adamrahimov - Feb 7, 2017
|BAR & LINE GRAPH - three dimensions on the screens
3 - Gigih, I believe that there was a better way to write this essay which would have improved your overall...
Writing Feedbackgigihes - Feb 7, 2017 / Holt - Feb 7, 2017
|As the proverb goes "Union is strength", we owe to co-operating for our existence.
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Jan 30, 2017 / ainunazwaria - Feb 7, 2017
|PTE: Over a billion adults legally smoke tobacco. The long term health costs are high - for smokers
8 - Thank you @Holt, without your comments I could not realize how bad my essay was. I will keep practice...
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 1, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 7, 2017
|IELTS Task 1; Percentage of British Students able to speak languages other than English, 2000-2010
4 - Hello, here's my advice for your writing 1. It is important to paraphrase your first sentence in your...
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 6, 2017 / Gigih12 - Feb 7, 2017
|Journey of learning English
2 - Miftah, are you writing this as a practice statement for one of your English classes? While I am sure...
Writing FeedbackKing_mif - Feb 7, 2017 / Holt - Feb 7, 2017
|IELTS Practice task 2 - History education and its importance
4 - As an additional feedback to improve your band score later on, you can write a more appropriate introduction paragraph....
Writing FeedbackJane N - Feb 3, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 7, 2017
|The crucial part of being happy lies in one's everyday attitude towards life.
5 - @Ssakshijain Thank you for reading my writing. As I am more familiar with verbal english, I have difficult with...
Writing Feedbackchikachika - Feb 5, 2017 / chikachika - Feb 6, 2017
|The percentage of Australians from six different household types struggling with poverty in 1999
2 - Nhi, first up, use a comma instead of a period when indicating information in the thousands. Always follow the...
Writing Feedbackyennhihoang2712 - Feb 6, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|Pie Chart Task 1 IELTS Sample: typical house spendings in Japan and Malaysia
7 - Hi Baso, Despite those grammatical mistakes, I think you essay is not solid enough. The way you compare two...
Writing Feedbackbasohamdanianis - Jan 4, 2017 / MH_tw - Feb 6, 2017
|"You can learn about the character of a country from the way that treat animal" - Practice again
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Feb 5, 2017 / thuy_nguyet - Feb 6, 2017
|Task 2 ielts People often wonder whether money brings happiness or not
8 - Hi To, I think your essay is really good, the arguments are supported by a series of evidences and...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 3, 2017 / Janicelo - Feb 6, 2017
|The bar chart compares the projected and actual criminal incidents in 2009 and 2018.
4 - Hi Daniette, I am gonna try offering advice for improvement of your writing. I appreciate your effort to present...
Writing Feedbackforbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 6, 2017
|First college essay, 10 years since high school. Descriptive essay for basic English 101
4 - Yes, the presentation of the "Here we go." statement is exactly what I meant. The same goes for the...
Writing Feedbackjmack3d - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|Gender equality has been achieved? Unlikely.
2 - Daniette, while your paraphrasing an opinion in the opening statement is commendable, it is a bit faulty because you...
Writing Feedbackforbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|Rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete
2 - You have good skill of paraphrasing. Your position in introduction is clear enough. However, you need to improve the...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna12 - Feb 5, 2017 / forbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017
|Teaching foreign languages at primary school should be optional rather than compulsory. Ielts task 2
6 - Adam, I am not sure where you got the idea that you can present your opinion in the concluding...
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 5, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Punishment for Children and impact on their development
4 - On the contrary, since the word corporal isn't part of the keywords provided in the essay, she could use...
Writing FeedbackJanicelo - Feb 3, 2017 / Holt - Feb 4, 2017
|Investing more on railways means investing in a safer future for us and our children
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 2, 2017 / mariana13 - Feb 3, 2017
|Wrtiting Task 1 IELTS The title of population in developed countries and developing countries
6 - Hi Dayat, It's better for you to avoid using the same words with the question. In addition, you...
Writing FeedbackDayat - Dec 30, 2016 / Janicelo - Feb 3, 2017
|The Line graphs of how much people in UK and US to spend on Petrol
8 - Diaz, good work on presenting more than the minimum number of words in your essay. That said, you should...
Writing FeedbackDiazalichsan - Jan 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 3, 2017
|Parents often wonder whether they ought to let their children spend time on TV, video and PC games
9 - If you notice the question. Discuss both view and give your own opinion You should provide your own...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 2, 2017 / bagusetyawan - Feb 2, 2017
|Percentage of different types of energy used and their greenhouse emission in Australian household
2 - Janice, the information that you present is relevant to the pie chart presented. The weakness of your comparison statements...
Writing FeedbackJanicelo - Feb 2, 2017 / Holt - Feb 2, 2017
|Given pie charts compare the number of inhabitants in Yemen and Italy in 2000
5 - Ayu, why are you indicating the information in the essay based upon thousands of percent when he chart is...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Feb 2, 2017
|task 2 ielts - celebrity's privacy; should every rumour of the famous be published by media?
5 - To, try to not type the prompt into the box. That is usually how these mistakes occur. Whenever possible,...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|[IELTS task 2] Lack of Learning languages and children development in the modern society
Writing Feedbackkenthai - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Essay Writing. Methods to integrate modern ways of transportation.
2 - Ayman, I am assuming that you posted the wrong prompt instructions to go with the essay that you developed....
Writing Feedbackabohashim2003 - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|IELTS Task 1. Six pie charts about water usage worldwide
4 - Ana, the instructions clearly state that you are to present at least 150 words, nothing less. Yet you are...
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Minimum age limit for driving - Discussion
6 - very good, everyone has his own point of view and understanding of a topic, you shown yours, I may...
Writing Feedbackahamad17 - Jan 26, 2017 / mariana13 - Jan 31, 2017
|Family, television and friends are important factors in child's development. Task 2 ielts
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Jan 31, 2017 / Holt - Jan 31, 2017
|Around the world people are working more than ever. Is spending more time at work beneficial?
3 - Luong, you have written an extremely well researched essay. Normally, I would congratulate you on such a well written...
Writing Feedbackduongbaluong - Jan 31, 2017 / Holt - Jan 31, 2017
|Researching the Internet - I practice for my TOEFL writing
5 - @Holt Thanks so much. I really appreciate your professional advice and I will try the best to improving...
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Jan 30, 2017 / thuy_nguyet - Jan 31, 2017
|Task 2 ielts - sports and exercise classes and academic subjects
4 - To, the essay needs to have a better presentation on your part. You have 2 possible topics for discussion...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Jan 30, 2017 / Holt - Jan 30, 2017
|There are three reasons which support my opinion that parents aren't the best teachers
Writing FeedbackOchir - Jan 18, 2017 / SYDA - Jan 27, 2017
|Internet make our communication easier, helps with getting information, business, and transaction
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Jan 27, 2017 / SYDA - Jan 27, 2017
|What would I do if I were a billionaire?
5 - Dears Your essay has some gramarical problems . For examle, let's find out what would I do and where...
Writing FeedbackVarlamow - Jan 8, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Jan 27, 2017
|The Earth needs both governments and individuals to cooperate for a positive change
2 - Hi Mai, thanks for posting the complete prompt and revised essay on your part. Having reviewed your work in...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen123 - Jan 26, 2017 / Holt - Jan 26, 2017
|Scientists and the news media are presenting ever more evidence of climate change
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen - Jan 26, 2017 / Holt - Jan 26, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2 - the reason why do fewer and fewer people appreciate art and how to solve it
2 - Ayu, I believe that your essay can garner an overall score of 5. That means that is the highest...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 25, 2017 / Holt - Jan 25, 2017
|Some people think that reducing air travel is the best way to protect environment
3 - Hi @chathuri1982, actually i dont get the point of your essay, it will be better if you write the...
Writing Feedbackchathuri1982 - Jan 24, 2017 / ayuriska - Jan 25, 2017
|IELTS1 - the number of diarrhea cases in Mashhad over ten years, some time ago
2 - Ayu, while your essay is well within the 150 requirement of the task, it feels like you did not...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 25, 2017 / Holt - Jan 25, 2017
|University should not specifically accept more girls or boys for whatever purpose
3 - Ho, you approached this essay from the wrong perspective. In fact, you seem to have decided to answer a...
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Jan 25, 2017 / Holt - Jan 25, 2017
|Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements
4 - I agree with Holt. You seem to be missing the main issue here. If you agree that contemporary celebrities...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen - Jan 24, 2017 / Rashan - Jan 25, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: How Do U.S. Expenditures Compare With Those Of Other Countries?
4 - Hi @ellisana, in the second point, you should explain bit more about clothing percentage. In other hand, BritonJapan spend...
Writing Feedbackellisana - Jan 21, 2017 / ayuriska - Jan 25, 2017
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