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|IELTS -writing 2 - The most appropriate time for learning a foreign language
2 - @dianakelin The first paragraph needs a lot of work. You need to reorganize the whole passage and make it...
Writing Feedbackdianakelin - Dec 20, 2016 / realtalk - Dec 20, 2016
|Property ownership - justification essay
6 - @Holt I really appreciate your help Holt I was so lost preparing for this test, and your responses gave...
Writing Feedbackredjohn - Dec 18, 2016 / redjohn - Dec 19, 2016
|Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, th
2 - Dimitry, I am not sure about how to review your essay. That is because you used the full prompt...
Writing Feedbackxenuseeng - Dec 19, 2016 / Holt - Dec 19, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : Is Advertisement informative or deceptive
Writing Feedbackm7mdbsheer1 - Dec 19, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 19, 2016
|Essay about the advantages of co-operation in your learning English
Writing Feedbacklahavip06 - Dec 18, 2016 / lahavip06 - Dec 18, 2016
|We have to depend on technology which makes our life easier, but we need to use it in a proper way.
5 - Jone, your overall score for this essay could be a 5 in terms of task accuracy. That is because...
Writing Feedbackjone75 - Dec 16, 2016 / Holt - Dec 18, 2016
|Congress should overturn policy in regards to women in combat (I need help editing my paper)
2 - @kaleidoscopic You are good at your platform but you are only moving around the background you have created....
Writing Feedbackkaleidoscopic - Dec 17, 2016 / koun - Dec 17, 2016
|Factories not stadiums, is what we need. Do you agree? Argumentative essay
2 - Azeddine, Somehow I don't feel like you posted the complete prompt along with the essay. The reason that i...
Writing FeedbackAdam10 - Dec 17, 2016 / Holt - Dec 17, 2016
|TOPIC OF AN ORIGINAL ARTICLE I AM WRITING ON: THE CAREER WOMAN
Writing Feedbackchizy7 - Dec 16, 2016 / Holt - Dec 17, 2016
|Advertising directed only to a particular target audiences who can make decision for their selves
3 - @Holt Thank you for your valuable feedback Mary. I realize that my essay is too rigid. I will try...
Writing FeedbackStreetwalker - Dec 16, 2016 / Streetwalker - Dec 16, 2016
|The line graph provides the information about the number of people who visit Australia
2 - Combining the information from the graph and table into the overview sentence is quite simple. You don't need to...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 15, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 16, 2016
|Working as volunteers should be taken into consideration for children - WRITING TASK 2
4 - Obviously, this concern is proliferating and gaining fame ... ... is pivotal factor to burgeon their self-development. ... interact...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 15, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 16, 2016
|GRE-University should require all students to take classes outside of the students' field of study
2 - Sun, you did very well for yourself in terms of developing your discussion essay. However, you were prevented from...
Writing Feedbackxuesun - Dec 15, 2016 / Holt - Dec 16, 2016
|Technologies such as computer benefits society
6 - In your essay, you mostly focused on the usage of computers using "the Internet". But before the Internet was...
Writing FeedbackHoaidepchi - Dec 7, 2016 / mualla - Dec 16, 2016
|Three exported products (graph) such as meat products, dairy products, and international tourism
2 - Hi let me give you some grammar corrections and my suggestions: The given bar chart informs the comparisons aboutcompares...
Writing FeedbackFatirtalent - Sep 27, 2016 / mualla - Dec 15, 2016
|CANADIANS SCHOLARS from a third level of education in Canada - the rising trend
2 - I can see some grammatical errors that need addressing. "The graph illustrates an overview [...] a peak over...
Writing Feedbackeve01 - Nov 10, 2016 / Xenoyia - Dec 15, 2016
|People tend to enjoy interaction with their friends in social networking more than in the real life
4 - @yika In my view and agree are repetitive in the starting. Tend to agree --only agree can work....
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 6, 2016 / abdon786 - Dec 15, 2016
|Wasting production in Six different countries in twenty years period presented in Table
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Nov 2, 2015 / Jeremy Newcastl - Dec 15, 2016
|Almost every country consider smoking in public areas as a detrimental issue.
2 - Nur, your task accuracy score is 3. Yes, it is a failing score. Why did you fail? Consider the...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Feb 21, 2016 / Holt - Dec 15, 2016
|Causes of stress in society nowadays - working environment, financial condition and family issue.
2 - Hi, Although I can see your main points about stress, I believe your writing would benefit if you...
Writing FeedbackHoaidepchi - Dec 14, 2016 / mualla - Dec 15, 2016
|The length of phone calls in the United Kingdom - WRITING TASK 1
2 - Be careful in providing false descriptions because it wasn't a line graph, yet it is a bar chart. Also,...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 14, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Ielts writing task 1 -The graph reveals the information in regard to the ownership
3 - George, you are suggested to complete the description of information in the overview / introduction part in your essay....
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Nov 30, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Writing test exercise for ielts; the number of trips to and from UK increased every year 1979-1999
3 - Resa, writing an acceptable and recommended paragraphing structure for an IELTS task 1 is not that difficult. It is...
Writing Feedbackresair - Dec 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Ielts writing task 2 - Safety standards are important when building people's homes.
3 - The thing that makes your essay seems odd is because you did not answer the question properly. Reaching band...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|The alteration of an island; new vehicle track and footpath to connect the western and eastern areas
6 - I can see some improvements and that's quite good. Yet, there are still some rooms to enhance the quality...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|The increasing number of the elderly people and its influence on society
2 - Hello Zen, Your writing is well structured, I can tell that you've planned out how to deliver the...
Writing Feedbackzen111 - Jun 18, 2015 / CDuke93 - Dec 13, 2016
|Businesses and their profit - they should protect the environment instead and help others in need
NEW - Hello everyone. I am Kadir and I am currently preparing for TOEFL. I wrote a essay about this topic....
Writing Feedbacktheunnamedfeelin - Dec 13, 2016 / — -
|IS IT ACCEPTABLE FOR CHILDREN TO LEARN FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL? WRITING TASK 2
2 - @NinaJoesuf25 NinaJoesuf25 Needless to say ; ** could you replace this with a different phrase? What I...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 13, 2016 / CDuke93 - Dec 13, 2016
|The importance of communication skills in job relation
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 6, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 13, 2016
|I disagree with the opinion that says always telling the truth in a relationship is important.
Writing Feedbacksushantpaygude - Jun 16, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 13, 2016
|IELTS task 1: How heat is lost and energy wasted since the air circulation in a house
3 - Your paragraphs are too short to be considered an actual summary of the diagram that you were provided with....
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 1, 2015 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|The proportion of water in six gulf countries in 2000, based on three main objectives
2 - Azmi, here's my feedback towards your first and last paragraph. I hope you can follow through. 1st paragraph:...
Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Sep 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 13, 2016
|Various ways of communication summary - all contribute to conveying information equally
3 - Ignacy, you neglected to represent what I consider to be the key point of the essay prompt. You failed...
Writing Feedbackwladca - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|English spoken throughout the world essay
2 - Ivan, your paraphrased prompt is incomplete. You were supposed to mention that there are languages that are slowly losing...
Writing Feedbackuzbeklord - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|The information about the air diffusion in a house and how it reduces heat
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 7, 2016 / debby17 - Dec 12, 2016
|WRITING TASK 1 Process making of bricks for building industry
2 - Sari, where did the term loam, that you keep using throughout most of the essay come from? There is...
Writing Feedbackss158284 - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|The Spammy Pokemon Go Apps Being Pushed to Millions of iPhones
2 - Eka, there are a number of misinformation in your current summary article. Most of them are quite serious because...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 13, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|Traveling is a good way of improving our knowledge
2 - Love the last paragraph that includes your opinion along with a quote. But have you thought of bringing that...
Writing Feedbackbongxugalaxie - Jan 8, 2013 / giuzu98 - Dec 12, 2016
|Corporations should focus on taking people who are innovative and able to work self-contained
3 - I really liked the fact that you first included a background on the popular belief and then talked about...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Nov 30, 2016 / giuzu98 - Dec 11, 2016
|Thesis for essay on Japanese internment versus the Holocaust?
Writing Feedbackcocobean3 - Dec 11, 2016 / Holt - Dec 11, 2016
|In this modern society, the more languages you can speak, the more competitive you are
3 - Arlen, what made you think that the discussion being provided by the prompt asked you to consider the age...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Nov 30, 2016 / Holt - Dec 11, 2016
|Cause and problems: Stress in your country (length of essay over 100 words)
NEW - Stress has been a majour for a long time affecting students seriously in many countries.Vietnam is one of those,two...
Writing Feedbackvoivua1993 - Dec 10, 2016 / — -
|Opinion Essay (The Athletics Centre in Georgian College)
Writing FeedbackAhaSeki - Dec 10, 2016 / Holt - Dec 10, 2016
|DO YOU AGREE THAT THE STUDY OF MATHEMATICS IS ESSENTIAL TO THE PROGRESS OF HUMAN RACE?
4 - In my opinion, the study of Mathematics is essential to the progress of human race. - I like this...
Writing Feedbackphamlethutrang99 - Dec 3, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 9, 2016
|The various plus points of international tourism are definitely worth the exchange.
3 - Six, ownership of the information and opinion that is presented in an opinion essay is very important. It shows...
Writing Feedbackcoucou97 - Dec 9, 2016 / Holt - Dec 9, 2016
|TED Summary - The Internet Secret
4 - Try to rephrase confide citizens the concealed (...) privacy of internet users"?, try making it easier for readers to...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 9, 2016 / kervina - Dec 9, 2016
|New Zealand: the cricket as a sport which attracted the smallest number of girls to involve in
6 - I am also interested in ilets and following up so many sources "we" language is not preffered so much....
Writing Feedbackhanhchoick - Dec 6, 2016 / clementiness - Dec 9, 2016
|The controversy statement that American's airport left far away from other countries' airports
2 - Lincoln, I think that you need to learn more about collocation. Your sentence structure seems quite confusing due to...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 9, 2016
|Article Summary : Longer 'Penis' drives evolution of bigger brains in female fish
2 - Some suggestions for better clarity: "...bigger genitals means more mating success. Suprisingly..." "become larger and to escape from over...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 9, 2016 / rousua - Dec 9, 2016
|Nile River Civilization influences on the Modern World
2 - Some suggestions to help clean it up and bring more clarity: "it is undoubted that all early civilizations"...
Writing Feedbackjamiewach - Dec 7, 2016 / rousua - Dec 9, 2016
|Listening Summary : Chaos Theory - the alteration of dynamic variables
2 - #... and mathematics that focuses on the alteration of dynamic variables. #changes in environment. However, this theory > changes...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 9, 2016 / sus_007 - Dec 9, 2016
|People can freely choose clothes they like, while they cannot be assessed from their appearance
3 - Aloha Kurnia, here are my thoughts for you; (1) word choices basically, it is absolutely crucial that you...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 8, 2016 / ibe13 - Dec 9, 2016
|The appearance of people as one of the essential indications of what characteristics they possess
Writing FeedbackDioba - Dec 8, 2016 / nda18 - Dec 9, 2016
|Writing Task I about the relationship between worker with their supervisor and partners.
3 - Dear Dioba, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too! ...iswere the highest...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Dec 8, 2016 / mem77 - Dec 8, 2016
|Where is the best place for children to learn how to be a good member of society?
2 - First of all, I do not think your introduction is appropriate for the exam. I will suggest to use...
Writing Feedbackimagenius - Dec 8, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 8, 2016
|Article Summary - New Investigation from Malaysia Airlines
2 - Lincoln, I am sure that this is too short for an article summary. You are suggested to write more...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|The average distance in miles which people drove to somewhere else in England from 1985 to 2000
2 - Mardian, apart from the above-mentioned feedback from one of EF contributors, I would like to focus on your content....
Writing Feedbackmardian24 - Dec 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|Some people argue that judging from the clothes that they wear is not appropriate. Others disagree.
3 - Do not create a 'hung' introduction paragraph if you want to reach band 6 or above. It should be...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|The education fee should not be charged for every student with different household budget
3 - There are many IELTS candidates that have the same mistake in deciding their position towards the essay. I believe...
Writing Feedbackleeminhee - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|"The Aesthetics of Silence" My personal essay on remaining silent
4 - Is Aaron still your best friend at this point? After this falling out, did the two of you become...
Writing FeedbackRahulkb - Dec 8, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
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