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|Harm fume gases from private cars' bring some serious problems [IELTS WR Task 2]
3 - @Wakalanud Your idea in this essay is good, yet it's better to paraphrase the question and put in the...
Writing FeedbackWakalanud - Sep 7, 2017 / ayibram - Sep 22, 2017
|MYSTERIES OF THE UNIVERSE - MY ESSAY TO GET INTO COLLEGE
2 - This essay is amazing. I can truly see you worked hard on this. This essay flows cohesively. The only...
Writing Feedbackcalliepj24 - Sep 21, 2017 / Kiera9473 - Sep 22, 2017
|SAT essay, topic: Taking the responsibility
7 - @TatyanaMileva I like this essay but, there is some grammar mistakes. English is not your native language though, so...
Writing FeedbackTatyanaMileva - Sep 19, 2017 / calliepj24 - Sep 21, 2017
|Reasons and solutions for wasting food
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Sep 15, 2017 / ditoaji - Sep 21, 2017
|Materials printed on paper or given in an electronic form? I am working for Toefl Exam.
2 - Fahri, rather than creating your own information in relation to the original prompt, you must simply restate the prompt...
Writing FeedbackFahri - Sep 21, 2017 / Holt - Sep 21, 2017
|Our Trip Our Adventure in Jambi - Narrative Essay
2 - Nuraya, your narrative essay is too broad in scope and should use the first pronouns "Me, myself. and I"...
Writing FeedbackNuraya - Sep 21, 2017 / Holt - Sep 21, 2017
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 2: Essay Writing (Effect of the Internet in society)
2 - Riya, I believe that this is a level 6 essay. It has a clear presentation of the discussion points...
Writing FeedbackIELTS_Academic - Sep 20, 2017 / Holt - Sep 21, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Debatable Issue of Genetic Engineering
5 - hay @ditoaji I think this "World's livestock and availability of ..." sentence quite confusing and it is hard...
Writing Feedbackditoaji - Sep 18, 2017 / Wakalanud - Sep 20, 2017
|[IELTS writing task 2] Performance enhancing drugs : causes and effects?
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Sep 20, 2017 / Wakalanud - Sep 20, 2017
|Clear indicator of a great nation is the common well-being of all its people.
3 - Nikhil, you can very possibly score a 4 with this essay. You were able to show a clear understanding...
Writing Feedbacknikhiltinder - Sep 18, 2017 / Holt - Sep 19, 2017
|Exploring Natural Resources (high demand in oil and gas) - IELTS 2: Essay Writing
2 - Riya, this essay will automatically get a failing score of 2 for the TA portion. That score is based...
Writing FeedbackIELTS_Academic - Sep 18, 2017 / Holt - Sep 19, 2017
|More and more factories are being built to serve for the massive production of large enterprises.
2 - Kim, your essay will fail on the basis of your opening statement alone. You were not able to properly...
Writing FeedbackMimi123 - Sep 18, 2017 / Holt - Sep 18, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1: Australian school leavers' activities
3 - @Holt I have just revised the report as you advised. My latest one: The pie charts compare three...
Writing Feedbacksarahna - Aug 22, 2017 / sarahna - Sep 18, 2017
|ISSUE:-think on task rather than worry about result
5 - As a reader, there is an ambiguty in your essay.Sometimes,it is like you are deviating from a main topic...
Writing Feedbackshraddhashende - Sep 8, 2017 / abhilashbhure - Sep 17, 2017
|Crime is a serious problem in most countries and the crime rate has tendency to increase annually
Writing FeedbackAnnie Tran 162 - Sep 17, 2017 / Annie Tran 162 - Sep 17, 2017
|THE EATING HABIT AND LIFESTYLE OF CHILDREN
4 - @Holt Thank you so much for your assessment. I apologize for not having the question. Here it is: In...
Writing Feedbackhongphuoc - Sep 16, 2017 / hongphuoc - Sep 17, 2017
|Argument Topic about the way to increase the more viewers of news programs
3 - Abhilash, your arguments are not very convincing as you do not show a higher degree of analytical thinking beyond...
Writing Feedbackabhilashbhure - Sep 16, 2017 / Holt - Sep 17, 2017
|CBEST Writing Test : Explain if you have taken any risk in your life.
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. I will try again. Can you please tell me what else needs an improvement,...
Writing FeedbackRaj1234 - Sep 15, 2017 / Raj1234 - Sep 16, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Job Vacancies Restriction in Many Countries
4 - @ditoaji I think Your introduction did not directly relate to the question being asked. The statement of the question...
Writing Feedbackditoaji - Sep 13, 2017 / Ganesh Mumar - Sep 16, 2017
|Essay about whether university students must pay all tuition fees
4 - Hai, your paraphrase is inaccurate and does not properly reflect the sentiment of the original prompt. there is no...
Writing Feedbackhaiinnn - Sep 15, 2017 / Holt - Sep 16, 2017
|[IELTS Writing Task2] - Hiring people with only practical skills and not looking at their education
3 - @Hold Thank you so much for your feedback. I will come up with another essay by incorporating your feedback....
Writing Feedbackpurushotham - Sep 16, 2017 / purushotham - Sep 16, 2017
|Young generations may be more aware on issues related to the environment and starvation
Writing Feedbacknguyentoan1999 - Sep 15, 2017 / nguyentoan1999 - Sep 15, 2017
|Is the speaking competence or the writing ability playing a more decisive role in people's life
Writing Feedbackws0034 - Sep 15, 2017 / ws0034 - Sep 15, 2017
|Seminar report about the nuts and bolts of the graduate program
2 - Bonita, the summary regarding Henry is too short and uninformative. You need to expand on the discussion that he...
Writing FeedbackBonita_se - Sep 15, 2017 / Holt - Sep 15, 2017
|Ielts General Training Essay on reading for kids
4 - Raven, while the advice regarding the grammar changes in your essay is good, a more accurate analysis of your...
Writing FeedbackRavenlui - Sep 14, 2017 / Holt - Sep 15, 2017
|The resistance to change is a striking human's instinctive trait [IELTS TASK 2]
3 - Hi @Holt thank you for your remarks. I've finished the final work, please take a look at it and...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Sep 1, 2017 / hailung - Sep 15, 2017
|Easiest way getting good grades: organizing ourselves and our time, being active in the class
4 - thank you for all of your suggestions. i have corrected both introductory and conclusion of mine. this essay is...
Writing FeedbackNuraya - Sep 14, 2017 / Nuraya - Sep 14, 2017
|Businesses social responsibilties provide values for community
Writing Feedbackvinhconnect - Sep 13, 2017 / vinhconnect - Sep 14, 2017
|(Paragraph contrasting food) Homemade Salsa vs. Restaurant Salsa
2 - Kaycee, make it clear that you are going to be comparing generic restaurant salsa with your family recipe for...
Writing Feedbackbandgeek98 - Sep 13, 2017 / Holt - Sep 14, 2017
|People with five distinctive employment status allocating their spare time
3 - Well. I think you should change the way you describe the information because it looks too simple.You can also...
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - Sep 12, 2017 / Watsup - Sep 13, 2017
|The plans for a school's development within a 20 year period - diagrams/maps
2 - Hi Melinda, this essay is pretty good. You have managed to properly discuss this essay in an acceptable manner....
Writing FeedbackMelindaLinda - Sep 12, 2017 / Holt - Sep 12, 2017
|Recently, people have a tendency of living on their own
2 - Nguyen, this essay did not follow the prompt requirement for the discussion. The instruction is asking you if this...
Writing Feedbackthuong0504 - Sep 12, 2017 / Holt - Sep 12, 2017
|[IELTS WRITTING TASK 2] Should universities be free? High cost of education, especially in Vietnam
Writing Feedbackmushishi013 - Sep 11, 2017 / mushishi013 - Sep 12, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree that increased global tourism are more harmful than beneficial?
3 - thank you very much holt, you are very helpful. May i ask another question? ( i just did). can...
Writing FeedbackIELTS JOHN - Sep 12, 2017 / IELTS JOHN - Sep 12, 2017
|We are living in the world of highly-educated people
5 - my mentors always remind me not to over complicate my essays. Also, they constantly tell me that my essays...
Writing Feedbackharrybin - Sep 11, 2017 / IELTS JOHN - Sep 12, 2017
|IELTS Writing Tas 1 (The Total Value of Fish Including Its Comparison of Imported-Countries)
Writing Feedbackditoaji - Sep 12, 2017 / IELTS JOHN - Sep 12, 2017
|You learn foreign languages because you are going to work or travel in a particular country. IELTS
4 - In your opening, you should add an emotional statement like I strongly agree with to show which side you...
Writing Feedbackplamchiiii - Sep 11, 2017 / daiha20082009 - Sep 12, 2017
|Kind, helpful. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbour?
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for reading. Actually, I have never tried to write TOEFL. This is my first...
Writing FeedbackJinsungPhil - Sep 10, 2017 / JinsungPhil - Sep 12, 2017
|Human history has been a journey from ignorance to knowledge
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Sep 11, 2017 / sfiza - Sep 11, 2017
|[IELTS Writing] Writing, reading and maths are the three major subjects
2 - Khoa, your line of reasoning in the body paragraphs are highly applicable to the discussion. The problem, is that...
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - Sep 11, 2017 / Holt - Sep 11, 2017
|As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units.
3 - I think you are aware of arranging ideas by using firstly, secondly but it fails to connect all those...
Writing FeedbackJun12 - Sep 10, 2017 / daiha20082009 - Sep 11, 2017
|The portion of those who own devices by four different categories in Vietnam during 6-year period
6 - hi@tan_hao_hcmut The line graph illustrates the portion (...) different types the proportion of ownership of devices in Vietnam...
Writing Feedbacktan_hao_hcmut - Sep 9, 2017 / sfiza - Sep 11, 2017
|How to tell a good nation? Nation achievements? Or general welfare?
Writing Feedbacktiffanytw - Sep 11, 2017 / tiffanytw - Sep 11, 2017
|[TASK 2] Being friends with colleagues or not?
4 - @ditoaji Thank you for your correction! @Holt Thanks so much. Now I know what my strengths and weaknesses are....
Writing Feedbackphuongsongao - Sep 8, 2017 / phuongsongao - Sep 11, 2017
|Cement manufacturing. Essay about diagrams. English learner.
Writing Feedbackterry5419 - Sep 10, 2017 / terry5419 - Sep 10, 2017
|Will Robots take over our jobs in the future?
2 - Mike, this was a pretty well developed analytical essay of a given topic. The essay had a bump in...
Writing FeedbackMikezukerberg - Sep 10, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|Japan travellers outside their homeland
2 - Athanasia, this essay is so severely incomplete in terms of informing the reader that it was not worth the...
Writing FeedbackLaLaLand999 - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|Why I want to be dentist. I dream about it.
4 - Janjie, this is very weak personal statement for application to dental school. In a personal statement, you must show...
Writing FeedbackJJKanyarat - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|Everyone should study at school until 18. To what extent,do you agree or disagree?
3 - It is useless to write two paragraphs that only pertain to the body of the discussion. That is not...
Writing FeedbackWatsup - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off before going to university.
3 - Dat, it would have been of greater benefit to you if you had posted the original prompt that you...
Writing Feedbackdatbu - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|More public parks or sports facilities should be built in new towns rather than shopping centers?
Writing FeedbackNhungDuong - Sep 9, 2017 / NhungDuong - Sep 10, 2017
|Citizens, businesses as well as government are major responsible for environmental improvement.
2 - Thanh, what is the complete prompt requirement for this essay? You provided us with only a partial prompt that...
Writing FeedbackModesty - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|[TASK 1] Changes planned for a town center.
2 - Phuong, this is a compare and contrast reporting essay. Therefore, the essay should have come in with 4 paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackphuongsongao - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|Culture - expansion of International media has negative or positive impacts on cultural diversity
2 - Pham, did you mean to say "same" not "sane"? "Same" means similar or no difference. "Sane" means not mentally...
Writing FeedbackPham To Anh Dao - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|Essay about the benefit of internet
5 - @Putrisalju2200 I think you need to be careful when using pronouns. In some sentence, you used " we" but...
Writing FeedbackPutrisalju2200 - Sep 8, 2017 / phuongsongao - Sep 9, 2017
|A lot of people still smoke all over the world - they do not care about health warnings
3 - Thuong, if not for the mistake that you made in the opening paraphrase and the improper concluding statement at...
Writing Feedbackluanmoon - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1 (Population of people using different languages online)
3 - Dian, this essay severely lacks the proper format for an IELTS Task 1 essay. You do not have any...
Writing Feedbackditoaji - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made the world a better place
4 - Tuan, your essay will fail in an actual test because you did not follow the discussion instruction. You were...
Writing Feedbacktututuan - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|The park is place we like to go when we want to relax. Observation Descriptave Essay
3 - Mackenzie, I can see why your teacher told you that something was missing from the essay. It was highly...
Writing Feedbackmacdavis70 - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|Family - Men or Women take responsibility in raising children
3 - Pham, without the actual prompt requirement that you are responding to for comparison purposes, I cannot authoritatively say that...
Writing FeedbackPham To Anh Dao - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
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