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|Young people are often asked for participating for the development of communities as a volunteer
2 - Dear Septi. Overall, it is a good essay despite some corrections. First. PARTICIPATE --> IN Second....
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 28, 2016 / MufliHamid - Nov 28, 2016
|Discussing the benefits of working in more than one job
4 - Hi, here are my suggestions - first, for your introductory paragraph, you have to make some paraphrases of...
Writing Feedbackm7mdbsheer - Nov 20, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Nov 28, 2016
|Nowadays, the majorty of children are facing a huge pressure rather than in the past
3 - Dear Septia. I have read your essay fully, and yes, you have addressed the question effectively. However, some...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 28, 2016 / MufliHamid - Nov 28, 2016
|Coconut crab's bone-crushing grip is 10 times stronger than ours
2 - Dioba, you're not a new member of this forum. I believe you already know that you need to mention...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Nov 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 28, 2016
|Development communities usually utilize young adults to work for them
2 - Meireza, using fake facts in actual test is not suggested. If you keep practicing by using them, the pressure...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Nov 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 28, 2016
|An info about people shares of money, spent for five different necessities in four various countries
2 - Hello, miss @septiadara29 :) I just found little bit faults in your this written :) Overall I think your...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 28, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Nov 28, 2016
|Ielts academic writing task 2: What is an ideal society? How people can achieve it?
4 - Hi, here are my thoughts towards your essay - first, for your introductory paragraph, you have to make...
Writing Feedbacknguyenngochuyen - Nov 22, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Nov 28, 2016
|There are many things which could be changed in my university; TOEFL independent writing
4 - here is my advice for you There are many thingspoints/aspects which could be changed in my university likesuch...
Writing FeedbackDifferent - Nov 25, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Nov 28, 2016
|How many pupils have passed their high school exams, according to the subject and sex
2 - Septia, I can see that you have successfully maintained a recommended writing pattern for IELTS task 1. Yet, you...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 28, 2016
|A lot of people want to have a better life and it requires a good amount of educational background
5 - I have to point out that while the overall essay is informative and has a point, the basis for...
Writing Feedbackrei2141968 - Nov 14, 2016 / Holt - Nov 28, 2016
|Citizens have the joy of shopping, regardless of their need or the product function
Writing FeedbackKeith817 - Nov 26, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Nov 28, 2016
|Exercise writing test 2 (Inventors are not as important to society as doctors, Agree or disagree)
6 - In the past, numerous inventions waswere discovered by inventions,here you do not need "comma" because that could ... We...
Writing Feedbackalfinkurnia - Nov 23, 2016 / Pramudia27 - Nov 28, 2016
|Students' achievement in the high school competency exams based on the lesson classifications
4 - 1. Overall, the girls hit the high point ... ------>Overall, the girls hit the highest point in computer science...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Nov 28, 2016 / Wilyaftika23 - Nov 28, 2016
|Recently, youth movement has developed significantly, especially throughout voluntary activities
3 - Hello Faiz, I think you writing is quite good. I will give you my correction. Feel free to correction...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Nov 28, 2016 / alfinkurnia - Nov 28, 2016
|Here's depicted a breakdown of expenditures' usage in some of countries of three continents in 2009
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Nov 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 28, 2016
|The Main Feature to Get Happy Life is Depending to The Around Factor of Self
4 - hello yuri.. this is my suggestion for you Happy(happiness) is the most important and the main feature which beare...
Writing Feedbackyurikeyuri - Nov 19, 2016 / Pramudia27 - Nov 28, 2016
|The water cycle has three natural steps which start by evaporation water through the rain process.
4 - Hello! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) ... the information regardingin regards to how...
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Nov 21, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 28, 2016
|Pupils are pressed by their surroundings like academic circle even for commercial purposes
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Nov 28, 2016 / IvanMS027 - Nov 28, 2016
|A villain who turned out to be a hero ----------- Short Story Writing
2 - Hi @tahseen, your essay is understandable, and grammar is really good. However, Bellow is some mistakes I think...
Writing Feedbacktahseen - Nov 27, 2016 / kaun - Nov 28, 2016
|A comparison of the amount of High School Students who reach minimum grade to pass competency exams
3 - Hello Faiz, let me give my correction for you A comparison of the amount of High School Students...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Nov 28, 2016 / yurikeyuri - Nov 28, 2016
|Guests' quantities on two music sites
4 - Hello! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) ... regarding to new music sites is...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Nov 10, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 28, 2016
|"Inventors are not as important to society as doctors, Agree or disagree?"
Writing Feedbackyurikeyuri - Nov 23, 2016 / Pramudia27 - Nov 28, 2016
|Elizabeth Gilbert tells the audience about how creativity can survive from failure.
Writing FeedbackDioba - Nov 23, 2016 / Beauty17 - Nov 28, 2016
|The new appearance of The Canada transition out of coal-powered electricity by 2030
6 - Hello yurike 1. In the beginning of your paragraph don't use "the" as your first article. Because...
Writing Feedbackyurikeyuri - Nov 23, 2016 / faizunaa17 - Nov 28, 2016
|Why Rochester Minnesota is the greatest place to go to? Top 100 Best Places to Live.
Writing FeedbackYui1010 - Nov 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 28, 2016
|From my point of view, the most crucial trait of a person is his diligence
3 - Hello Fenya. To make good introduction paragraph you can use this pattern. 1. Background Information. You already...
Writing FeedbackFenya - Nov 27, 2016 / faizunaa17 - Nov 28, 2016
|Ielts writing task 2 - Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.
3 - 1. Since this is the first time you mention "huge salary", you don't need to use the. Because...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Nov 27, 2016 / faizunaa17 - Nov 28, 2016
|Finland to set become the first country to ban coal to use for energy
3 - Hi Bambang.. These are my corrections for your summary Note: Actually, It is a good job because you...
Writing FeedbackBams17 - Nov 27, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 27, 2016
|To be an athlete is the dream for many - the famous sporty stars usually have an impressive income
3 - Arlen, your task accuracy, which is related to the paraphrasing of the prompt scores a 3. You presented most...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Nov 27, 2016 / Holt - Nov 27, 2016
|The contemporary society have witnessed significant breakthrough of advertisement industry
6 - @daubu2200 Yes Daubu, I think you should argue just one side positive or the converse. If you take positive...
Writing Feedbackdaubu2200 - Nov 27, 2016 / NinaJoesuf25 - Nov 27, 2016
|Positive Impact on The Walking Activity
6 - HI,there are several mistake i found in your summary. 1.One of the daily activitydaily activitiesof by some people is...
Writing Feedbackyurikeyuri - Nov 23, 2016 / Dioba - Nov 27, 2016
|We live today in an electronic information age. It is easier to be connected by technology
Writing Feedbackutsi - Nov 27, 2016 / utsi - Nov 27, 2016
|Summary Article World's Tallest Water Slide Will Be Torn Down After 10-Year-Old Boy's Death
6 - 1. The world tallest water slide ... The tallest water in the whole world is Verruct. As such, it...
Writing Feedbackalfinkurnia - Nov 23, 2016 / NinaJoesuf25 - Nov 27, 2016
|Crime is a problem all over the world and there is nothing that can be prevent it
3 - Hi son, let me help you to give you such feedback. well, just try your first sentence with the...
Writing Feedbackleson06031995 - Nov 27, 2016 / NinaJoesuf25 - Nov 27, 2016
|It is often claimed that males and females have got different type of abilities and shortcomings.
3 - sorry, It is my first time to write essay on this site .thank you very much for your comments...
Writing FeedbackAbrorjon - Nov 27, 2016 / Abrorjon - Nov 27, 2016
|IELTS T2: Is prison the best punishment for criminals?
3 - HI,below through my advice for you. 1. Always bare in your mind - Introduction (including paraphrase the question your...
Writing Feedbackm7mdbsheer - Nov 26, 2016 / Dioba - Nov 27, 2016
|In the present time, big towns become the predominant living places chosen by many ambitious people
2 - Nda, you will immediately have failed in the task accuracy portion of this essay. The reason behind the failed...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Nov 26, 2016 / Holt - Nov 26, 2016
|Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby.
3 - Hi rasam, these are my thought towards your essay firstly, you have a good essay and good paraphrase...
Writing Feedbackrasam11 - Nov 25, 2016 / nda18 - Nov 26, 2016
|The chart compares some countries in term of the sale volume of hybrid vehicles around the world
2 - HI Syeda. These are my corrections to offer improvement for your writing. Please, meet my notes and review them....
Writing FeedbackSYDA - Nov 25, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 26, 2016
|The involvement of well-known people in international aid organisations attracts the attention
Writing Feedbackkaun - Nov 25, 2016 / kaun - Nov 26, 2016
|IELTS-W-2: people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life
Writing FeedbackSYDA - Nov 22, 2016 / Holt - Nov 25, 2016
|The picture reveals the steps of processing of chocolate using cacao beans. IELTS-W-1
4 - Holt ........thank you very much. your each word is inspiring.again thank you from my bottom of my heart. ...
Writing FeedbackSYDA - Nov 22, 2016 / SYDA - Nov 25, 2016
|Summary Article - Airbnb launched new service
5 - Hi Alfin, here's another one from my end. - Airbnb, the company whichthat shook up the - world...
Writing Feedbackalfinkurnia - Nov 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 25, 2016
|Cement production with combining all of the materials and how it is used for the building purposes
4 - ...shows how much every of the materials is needed for producing a concentrate. First of all, it is needed...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Nov 21, 2016 / krempetkov - Nov 25, 2016
|Automatic translation between different languages - is it possible nowadays?
Writing FeedbackKeith817 - Nov 25, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 25, 2016
|The government is wasting money on arts? Arts is required to express our thoughts and feelings.
4 - Hi Syeda, thank you for appreciating our work here on EF, we do strive to provide you with the...
Writing FeedbackSYDA - Nov 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 25, 2016
|Many people argue that salary is the deciding factor when choosing a job.
2 - Hi Mohammed.. These are my thoughts toward your essay. Please, you review my notes You did not...
Writing Feedbackm7mdbsheer - Nov 24, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 25, 2016
|MAKING CHOCOLATE; ten steps process with the pods for raw-chocolate and factory for final production
5 - Hi Nina, yes indeed, it is the diagram that needs to be attached to this particular analysis essay. As...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Nov 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 24, 2016
|Global trade of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009
Writing FeedbackBams17 - Nov 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 24, 2016
|Many consider starting to study a foreign language at primary school better than at high school
3 - Hi Augustin, as this is my first review on your argumentative essay, I would like to WELCOME you to...
Writing FeedbackAugustinOlariu - Nov 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 24, 2016
|Short piece of writing on 'The Negative Impacts of Winter Season'
6 - Holt, thanks for the reply! I'm gonna work on it pretty soon after my exams end. About myself: Aged...
Writing FeedbackPinkyTune - Nov 23, 2016 / PinkyTune - Nov 24, 2016
|Ielts task 1 - Graphs comparing the male and female employment status
2 - Hi Krempetkov, here are som suggestions: - The graphs reveal(provide, give) the information inon/aboutregard to the number of...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Nov 23, 2016 / m7mdbsheer - Nov 23, 2016
|Essay about an opinion regarding traditional festivals
2 - First, i believe It is better to separate the paragraphs - Don't combine the conclusion and your 3-rd paragraph....
Writing Feedbackarako - Nov 23, 2016 / krempetkov - Nov 23, 2016
|The pie chart depicts the main three reasons which led to the degradation of agriculture in the 90's
6 - Hi Kaun, below are my thoughts on your analysis. - The pie chart depicts the three main three...
Writing Feedbackkaun - Nov 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 23, 2016
|Summary article Why Japan's 6.9 Quake Wasn't 2011 All Over Again
Writing FeedbackDioba - Nov 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 23, 2016
|From an accident to conclusions.. summary ted physical therapy
2 - Hi Bambang, in this particular TED summary, I believe the modification should be focused on the minor details such...
Writing FeedbackBams17 - Nov 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 23, 2016
|Handedness or the dominant hand has been researched by a psychologist, Mathew.
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Nov 22, 2016 / yurikeyuri - Nov 23, 2016
|Summarize article : Porpoises plan their dives and can set their heart rate to match
3 - There are two divers called Freja and Sif need full stop .they want to costumize ... With this activity,...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Nov 22, 2016 / Bams17 - Nov 23, 2016
|Article Summary : 'Moana', not your typical Disney Princess
5 - Hello this is my correction for you, feel free to correction me too. ... animation studio company, releasedlaunched...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Nov 22, 2016 / alfinkurnia - Nov 23, 2016
|Where all inventors come from? The education background is an important aspect.
Writing FeedbackBams17 - Nov 23, 2016 / alfinkurnia - Nov 23, 2016
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