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|Education in home country vs study overseas
3 - Hello, I believe you catched the main points about studying abroad. I would suggest you to mention about...
Writing Feedbackfirefox2010 - May 13, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|It is high time to encourage different sources of energy all over the world
3 - Hello Sfiza, It's a very interesting and popular topic. You may want to read some articles about this...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - May 19, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|Motivation Letter of Taking M.TESOL program in Monash University
3 - Hello Ahmad, Firstly, I wish you good luck for receiving the scholarship. You have well explained why...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - May 22, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|[IELTS Writing part 2] Playing computer games is harmful. Do you agree with it?
3 - There are some sound arguments in the essay, but I would reconsider the arguments made in paragraph 4....
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - May 21, 2017 / wtangalang - May 23, 2017
|Intended major and future goals and why you have chosen your field of interest
2 - Ngan, this is absolutely the wrong response to the prompt. Your response sounds like a a childish paper written...
Writing Feedbackngannkh - May 22, 2017 / Holt - May 22, 2017
|Share information in scientific research, business and the academic world. Good or bad
2 - Dear @kevin1983 You can rearrange this sentence to be more concise and simple: "All of the giant company...
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - May 21, 2017 / flykitten - May 22, 2017
|Past or Future. Why not to move just forward?
2 - Hello @ngannkh I will just correct some grammar mistakes, has value... = has a value / has values...
Writing Feedbackngannkh - May 20, 2017 / flykitten - May 22, 2017
|Technological skills through computer games? Any other influence?
5 - furthermore this is able to stimulate them - this can stimulate them they do not be easier to...
Writing Feedbackjazulirahman - May 11, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 21, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 Industrial and business center relocation
3 - @Ahmadham However, this might create a new congestion spot ... I think this can be expanded, or...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - May 3, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 21, 2017
|[IELTS Writing part 2] Money should be spent on health education instead of medical technology
5 - @mandyduong It is a excellent essay, however, I am not convinced about the conclusion about "Develop countries", for there...
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - May 15, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 21, 2017
|Should foreigners pay more for tourism ? Should the host country require more money ?
2 - @tranvinhquang720 Hi, I would like to give you my brief feedback about the essay. First of all, I assume...
Writing Feedbacktranvinhquang720 - May 19, 2017 / mandyduong - May 19, 2017
|Punishment for Children is important for them to learn the difference between right and wrong?
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - May 18, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 19, 2017
|Must the free time of kids be always educational?
3 - @Bekhruz Good response. I think you state your position well and have good reasons backing it....
Writing FeedbackBekhruz - May 17, 2017 / acecomer98 - May 18, 2017
|Too much requirements from students? Should they focus strictly on the academic subjects?
2 - Hi..You got to know that essay question with agree and disagree type can be answered by five forms of...
Writing Feedbackyuzukachan - May 16, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 17, 2017
|The line graph: tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
2 - Hi I think you have been working hard with pies/charts/diagrams. That's why your language use is good such as...
Writing Feedbackbaonhisu - May 11, 2017 / mandyduong - May 16, 2017
|This is my first Issue topic on the desire of corporations. Evaluate and grade me.
2 - The main aim of government corporations is to work for the welfare of their people. Although sometimes they...
Writing Feedbackmnagrik94 - May 14, 2017 / niesaysi - May 16, 2017
|Music will never disappear from our life
Writing Feedbackndocojocojo - May 14, 2017 / ndocojocojo - May 15, 2017
|Nowadays it is possible to use computers and mobile phones for automatic language translation
2 - ...
Writing Feedbackhahoang2312 - May 15, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 15, 2017
|It's a short story about a aunt and his nephew.
3 - @Holt Thanks for your help and your advice,I knew about that, but I'm a beginner,I wrote this story mainly...
Writing Feedbackxujiantao - May 14, 2017 / xujiantao - May 15, 2017
|Task 2: Living in big cities is bad for your health. To what extent do you agree or disagree
2 - Hi, I believe you have a wide range of knowledge about this topic or at least do careful research,...
Writing Feedbackchmt - May 7, 2017 / mandyduong - May 15, 2017
|An essay about "How to Deal with Stress?"
Writing Feedbackconniecon - May 10, 2017 / conniecon - May 14, 2017
|SHOULD GOVERNMENT REGULATE THE FAST FOOD INDUSTRIES
2 - HI...when analyzing your essay, I have to say it is a nightmare for you. Despite less grammatical errors, your...
Writing Feedbackarashzh - May 12, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 13, 2017
|In my opinion railways are more important than roads. Government support. IELTS- writing task 2
2 - Halo Lin Yi, It seems that you still have a problem with grammatical understanding. Some sentences you made are...
Writing Feedbackblackheartbt - May 13, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 13, 2017
|Fatally Ill People's Choice
2 - Without pain and suffering, there is no existence (not to mention 'no pain, no gain). Life is by design...
Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - May 9, 2017 / Rich Monte - May 13, 2017
|Kids skills and familiarization in using new gadgets
5 - It's pretty good, but you failed to discuss how the technology would help children learn about the real (not...
Writing FeedbackIrmadesyre - May 11, 2017 / Rich Monte - May 11, 2017
|Parents often let their children play a lot with computer and tablets in order to improve skills
Writing FeedbackMuhammad Yoki - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|IT sector business and childrens impact
Writing Feedbackitaseptiyani - May 11, 2017 / trilestari - May 11, 2017
|Play a lot with gadget in the early age
Writing FeedbackFatmaFaricha - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Writing IELTS Task 2 parents let children playing computers and tablets
Writing Feedbacktrilestari - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Empowering Gadgets to Access World
Writing Feedbackharis_ibrahimm - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Children are very familiar with their electronic 'toys'
Writing FeedbackAdhanice - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Essay ielts task 2 (Improve technolgical skill)
3 - 1.i completly...... let take an........ please use CAPITAL after (.) 2. teckle : itu should be TACKLE...
Writing FeedbackRianda Ridho - May 11, 2017 / Irmadesyre - May 11, 2017
|THE GAP BETWEEN THE WEALTHY AND LESS WEALTHIER CITIZENS.
NEW - Economic inequality among people Nowadays, an increasing of people are concerned about the gap between the upper and...
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|Punishment on educating children
3 - Hello mail257, thanks for your feedback on my essay. With regard to yours, I believe you have good...
Writing Feedbackmaily257 - May 8, 2017 / daxXx_ryan31 - May 11, 2017
|Various cases of people living abroad
4 - Let me give your advice, pay attention with the connective word like between. Not between to, but between, and....
Writing FeedbackDora Elia Kasih - May 11, 2017 / haris_ibrahimm - May 11, 2017
|Progress Report English Course
6 - please attention your grammar and punctation, because there are some mistakes in your sentences. so, try to use complex...
Writing FeedbackIrmadesyre - May 11, 2017 / Dora Elia Kasih - May 11, 2017
|Museums and artworks are important for the country, for the history, and culture from international
2 - Some mistakes of your essay: ... artworks are two of the most ... In the 2nd paragraph, i feel...
Writing FeedbackdaxXx_ryan31 - May 10, 2017 / maily257 - May 10, 2017
|Flying should cost less - benefits and drawbacks
2 - Nowadays, more more cheap cheaper ordinary people citizens world, so environmental environmentally friendly, so ...
Writing Feedbackdearbao - May 7, 2017 / eminhaqi - May 9, 2017
|Discuss about the roles of metabolism and nutrient on one's ability to perform exercises.(400 words)
NEW - carbohydrates provides energy All the energy and nutrients that enable us to live and do exercise come from...
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|IELTS Writing TASK2 - Women participate in the armed force
Writing FeedbackEstrellajajajaja - May 7, 2017 / thisissabrinaxx - May 8, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - SPORT ON TELEVISION
2 - some mistakes ^ ^ impact on st some of them have sport events favourite teams playing so they think...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - May 6, 2017 / maily257 - May 8, 2017
|IELTS essay task 1 - Table "Scottish cultural activities"
2 - experienced --> showed/performed. I think it might be better. comparatively --> relatively. The tone would be better...
Writing Feedbackbakakurothanhtam - May 6, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 6, 2017
|Raising a company productivity through promotions - basing on a performance or on the seniority?
3 - Hi @vinusi, you could have done a better job of discussing the matter related to promotions based on seniority...
Writing Feedbackvinusi - May 4, 2017 / Binh Ngo - May 6, 2017
|Give 2 reasons on why schools should allow the public to use school sports facilities after school
Writing Feedbackthisissabrinaxx - May 3, 2017 / thisissabrinaxx - May 6, 2017
|Should parents attend parenting training course?
3 - Hi Reza, I reckon you have needed improvements for finalizing your essay. Please meet my notes and review them...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - May 1, 2017 / akbarmappiare - May 6, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - the extensive use of computers in classroom, reduce the number of teachers
Writing FeedbackQuanbong - May 5, 2017 / Quanbong - May 5, 2017
|Writing 2: It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV and a fridge.
2 - @Arlen You have already presented your opinion quite clearly. The reader can easily understand that from your point of...
Writing FeedbackArlen - May 4, 2017 / Eng Phin - May 4, 2017
|Difficulties of living in a city. How to make urban life better?
2 - I think you should make clear what is the thesis statement of your essay in the introduction, you can...
Writing FeedbackHashirama - May 3, 2017 / vinusi - May 4, 2017
|New Port city - a report about criminal activieties in this area
Writing Feedbackelirya - May 2, 2017 / elirya - May 3, 2017
|PRESERVING RARE LANGUAGES FROM VANISHING
2 - I've found some mistakes in your essay: _Language as so many "another things" like art and old ... _Ancient...
Writing Feedbackhadeel22 - May 3, 2017 / Hashirama - May 3, 2017
|People who visited theme parks, museums, galleries, historical objects and zoos in Britain
Writing Feedbackquocphap36 - May 3, 2017 / baochau2014 - May 3, 2017
|The table below shows the television viewing figures for sports by country, in million
3 - @adambacon813 Dear @adambacon813, I am very thankful for your useful recommendation. I hope to get more your...
Writing Feedbackbaochau2014 - May 2, 2017 / baochau2014 - May 3, 2017
|The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel.
2 - Hi Mai, I have read your essay closely. I will try you a few suggestions. First, if you wanna...
Writing Feedbackmaily257 - May 2, 2017 / akbarmappiare - May 2, 2017
|How to be a good mother or father - you can learn it!
4 - My comment: - parents are the first school for every children in the world -----> clearly, parents cannot be...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - May 1, 2017 / maily257 - May 2, 2017
|American TV shows vs broadcast foreign films
3 - Hi Itachi, I will give you a few suggestions. Hopefully, you can meet my notes and deal with them....
Writing Feedbackctk41 - May 2, 2017 / akbarmappiare - May 2, 2017
|Parenting training led parents to be a good parent for their child
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - May 1, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 2, 2017
|Alteration of Foster Road before and after improving
2 - Hi @Reza_Hidayat, here several suggestions for your writing : Firstly, pay attention on overview, I think your overview is...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - May 1, 2017 / Anhy chan - May 2, 2017
|Increasing parenting abilities in result of participating in specified courses
3 - Syamsiah, I have to say your essay is quite confusing. In your thesis, you clearly state that the trend...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - May 1, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 1, 2017
|Car-free days or other ways to reduce air pollution.
4 - @Tai I have red you essay, and I think that you present a clear position and relevant main idea...
Writing FeedbackTai - Apr 29, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - May 1, 2017
|Some people think that a factory will bring many risks to the area they live in.
4 - @Wilby In my point of view, you express a position but you present less supporting ideas to emphasize your...
Writing FeedbackWilby - Apr 28, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - May 1, 2017
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