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|The Attic Hatch is a circulation place where the largest amount of heat is lost
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 2, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Nov 2, 2016
|The popular opinion that the company has to focus only on how to make money
2 - Hello, IvanMS027. i think your essay is really good. it is simple but i can get your idea. but...
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Nov 2, 2016 / badafebriani17 - Nov 2, 2016
|There are some rooms where the warm air is leaking outside. Air leaks and heat loss in houses
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Nov 2, 2016 / Anna94 - Nov 2, 2016
|There are several goals of business that people want to achieve it.
3 - HELLO, There are several goals of business that people want to achieve it [it >> refers to several...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 2, 2016 / Anna94 - Nov 2, 2016
|Governments should invest more in public services, but arts cannot be neglected
4 - Hellooo! Allow me to give you some suggestion. ... in which most of government investments ... ... not...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Oct 31, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Nov 2, 2016
|People who conduct a business should concentrate only to their aims to make money.
2 - Hi Meireza.. These are my few corrections for your essay. Hopefully, they can help to finalize yours. People...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Nov 2, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 2, 2016
|Extreme Weather is Behind Record Lows in Butterfly Populations
3 - Hello! I will give you some opinions about your summary. (1) ... be under threat from increasingly from...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Nov 1, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 2, 2016
|The air leaking into the house in the first floor passes dryer vent, crawl space and windows
2 - 1st paragraph: - The diagram illustrates the circulation of airair circulation that waft throughentrance and exit from a house...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Nov 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 2, 2016
|Europe had the largest total land degraded with 23% caused by deforestation and over-cultivationd
3 - INTRODUCTION *successfully paraphrased the question *presented an overview, but did not cover all the main trends Thetabel shows...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|The two figures which provide data about the land degradation in 1990s
3 - INTRODUCTION *tenses and sentence form (active-passive), subject+verb agreement errors *appropriately selected information to be presented as overview although...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|It is said, that the main goal of entrepreneurship is to collect money without looking on others
3 - Aloha Faiz, here are my thoughts; (1) ... goal of entrepreneurship is to produceget/earn/collect money ("produce" is not...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Nov 2, 2016 / ibe13 - Nov 2, 2016
|Overeating in wealthy countries - a problem that is greater than hunger to other.
Writing FeedbackJessi0504 - Oct 30, 2016 / ryan31 - Nov 2, 2016
|The air is leaking from every ventilation and going out in the first floor, in the roof.
2 - Hi. here are a few corrections for your writing. ... the process of RELEASING heat lost and energy...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Nov 2, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 2, 2016
|People are assisted by sophisticated technology tools, such as body scanner and CCTV
3 - ... that they are assisted with shopisticatedsophisticated technologies. It is consisted body scanner and CCTV ... 'consist' is...
Writing Feedbackdelvis92 - Nov 1, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Nov 2, 2016
|A breakdown of telephone call duration in UK during 1995 to 2002
4 - Hello Niks30! Allow me to give you some suggestion. A breakdown of telephone call duration in UK during...
Writing FeedbackNiks30 - Nov 1, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Nov 2, 2016
|These days, electronic media are commonly used by people in the world
6 - HELLO FRA, i give you some suggestions, here they are... ..., electronic media [is >> because this sentence...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Nov 1, 2016 / Anna94 - Nov 2, 2016
|The charts provides several factors that affected on lower numbers of farm-land productivity
3 - INTRODUCTION *effective and well-developed introductory paragraph *presents a clear overview of main trends, components, and differences on data...
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Oct 30, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|How to produce power energy using wind turbine with its proper location
6 - Hi bada, I want to make some comments 1. ... how producingproduce power energy ... You need a...
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Oct 27, 2016 / mardian24 - Nov 2, 2016
|Electronic devices have brought negative effects on human, especially in personal communication
5 - Hello anna! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) Using of electronic devices is now...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Nov 1, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 2, 2016
|Dealing with client as an external communication skill and listening carefully to colleagues ...
2 - Hi Ifra.. These are my corrections for your writing. ...essential communication skills in A people's job (...) surveys...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Nov 1, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 2, 2016
|In 1990s Europe became the widest area affected by land degradation. Why? Over-grazing.
2 - INTRODUCTION *a few errors in sentence structure *repetitive [ineffective sentencing] *appropriately selected information as overview even though with...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|The survey result about essential soft-skill in communication for daily routines
4 - Hallo ivaan.. i dont know why you did not put any comparation in your essay. I think make essay...
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Nov 1, 2016 / Beauty17 - Nov 2, 2016
|Reasons for the decrease of land production and explanation for soil degradation in the world
3 - INTRODUCTION *flaws in paraphrasing question incompletely *unclear overview [although had selected information to be presented as overview, it...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|Benefits of advanced technologies, such as scanner and CCTV, outweigh their disadvantages.
2 - @amrillahmk Maybe you rephrase -- it will bring many advantages in improving our crime prevention security systems For...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Nov 1, 2016 / Ymun - Nov 1, 2016
|The silkworm cycle life starts with the production of eggs, then the larvae come out
2 - The pictures belowdescribedescribesthe information about the ... in your answer sheet, you do not copy the picture Overall, the...
Writing Feedbackeve01 - Nov 1, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Nov 1, 2016
|The technology aims to change the way we act and communicate each other
3 - ... for our daily lifelives. ... using technology affects our relation to others. Using of electronic peripheralsuse devices...
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Nov 1, 2016 / amrillahmk - Nov 1, 2016
|IELTS SUMMARY MONTH IS COMPARING BETWEEN TABLE AND PIE CHART
5 - Hi Syukron, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, I hope you find this website to be...
Writing Feedbackbismillah - Oct 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 1, 2016
|Bulgarian citizens who lived outside their country, based on school level
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 31, 2016 / eve01 - Nov 1, 2016
|Raising a global technology has helped people to work more efficient
2 - Hello Most of your sentences need to be rewritten so that they sound better (stylistically) and make more...
Writing FeedbackJordansimons - Nov 1, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Nov 1, 2016
|In 1990s the land in North America was most affected by over-cultivation factor with 3.3%.
4 - hello, i have some suggestions for your writing. ... number with over-cultivation, which the percentage was 28 which...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 29, 2016 / delvis92 - Nov 1, 2016
|The diagram show a process for producing electricity for home use using biomass source
2 - Hi Thirakorn, Welcome to EssayForum :) This is the right place for you to practice writing, particularly in...
Writing FeedbackThirakorn - Nov 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 1, 2016
|Electronic media have a good effect for activities of people between another people.
Writing FeedbackReskiRamadani88 - Nov 1, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 1, 2016
|Many opportunities to communicate in plural, multinational communities, using foreign languages
Writing Feedbacksydneynguyen - Oct 30, 2016 / sydneynguyen - Nov 1, 2016
|Getting promotion is the biggest chance for people.
Writing Feedbacksydneynguyen - Oct 29, 2016 / sydneynguyen - Nov 1, 2016
|The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents, and crime
Writing Feedbacksydneynguyen - Oct 28, 2016 / sydneynguyen - Nov 1, 2016
|People argue on the fundamental external and internal communication skills, which is better in a job
2 - Hi Reski, Kindly find my remarks below to help you compose a better essay later on. 1st paragraph:...
Writing FeedbackReskiRamadani88 - Nov 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 1, 2016
|There are other elements (than air travel) which contribute most to the atmosphere pollution
3 - Hello, your essay is good enough. You explained you reason and the reasons about this problem in the paragraph...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Oct 31, 2016 / ReskiRamadani88 - Nov 1, 2016
|Advanced technology comes to make everything easier to be finished. Writing Task 2: Working at Home
2 - Hello, I will give you suggestion: Actually your essay is good, your introduction was explain your opinion related...
Writing Feedbackabangabul93 - Nov 1, 2016 / ReskiRamadani88 - Nov 1, 2016
|Over the time, the emergence of sophisticated electronic media brought many advantages for people
3 - Hello @septiadara, I got some suggestions for your writing: 1. ... electronic media has bring(BROUGHT) many advantages ......
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 1, 2016 / abangabul93 - Nov 1, 2016
|A questionnaire for people that related to communication capacities important in their jobs
2 - Hallo @badafebriani17, I got some advice for your writing: Based on the table (, IT) can be seen...
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Nov 1, 2016 / abangabul93 - Nov 1, 2016
|Summary: Various Learning Style in School
2 - Hi Sisha, You are suggested to post on the appropriate category. (Writing Feedback) Student talk is not appropriate if...
Writing FeedbackWasishaSisha - Nov 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 1, 2016
|Result of survey in 1997 and 2006 based on the communication skills which are important in a work
2 - Hi Pramudia, Here's my inputs and remarks on your writing. Hopefully, it can be used as a guidance for...
Writing FeedbackPramudia27 - Nov 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 1, 2016
|Burnaby Public Library is portrayed in the line graph
3 - Hi Amril, My feedback towards this essay would be quite similar to the previous feedback. Some redundancies in...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Nov 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 1, 2016
|Without action to solve this problem, electronics may destroy a relationship between loved people
2 - Hi bada, I'm trying to make some comments Introduction In introduction, you have told about general statement,paraphrase...
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Nov 1, 2016 / mardian24 - Nov 1, 2016
|100 out of 650 million of people having a physical disability in the world need wheelchairs.
2 - Hi Wasisha.. These are my a few corrections for your summary. ... of people having A physical disability...
Writing FeedbackWasishaSisha - Nov 1, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 1, 2016
|The external and internal communication, essential in work, in 1997 and 2002.
3 - Hi nurainiyusuf16, I want to give some comments 1. ... internal communication skills were more essential by .....
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Nov 1, 2016 / mardian24 - Nov 1, 2016
|The favourite social media channel between 2011 and 2013
2 - Hi Amril, I can see that your writing is getting better. Keep up the good work! Yet, there is...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Nov 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 1, 2016
|There are four natural circle stages. Process of Silkworm's Life and Silk Cloth
2 - Hi Mujadiddah, Here's my analysis towards your report summary of IELTS task 1. I hope you can follow through....
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Nov 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 1, 2016
|Several kinds of communication skills which were significant in a vacancy; the results of two survey
4 - Hi wilyaftika23, the word is too common, you should utilize another advance vocabulary - "regarding" - The table...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Nov 1, 2016 / WasishaSisha - Nov 1, 2016
|Devouring of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030
2 - Hi Pujiati, I have some suggestions for you. 1. The words "units", "petroleum", "oil", "natural gas" etc. are...
Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Nov 1, 2016 / nyanpasu - Nov 1, 2016
|The electronic media make access to communicate with other people. It's good for mutual relations
2 - Hello Your text could use being refined stylistically so that it sounds better: advancecommunication technology [...] appears...
Writing FeedbackPramudia27 - Nov 1, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Nov 1, 2016
|Researching particular contacting skills in business.
2 - Aloha Septiadara, Here are my thoughts; (1) ... the proportion forof people who were(you can reduce this) asked...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 1, 2016 / ibe13 - Nov 1, 2016
|Good attitude is a must for everybody to show that we need someone else. Parents, school and society
3 - Why don't you delve towards the psychological side of parents at home and teachers at school on the behavior...
Writing Feedbackmardian24 - Oct 29, 2016 / shadow7 - Nov 1, 2016
|Various principal communication skills of an employee in a workplace
2 - Hello indah! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) ... common communication skills werewhich the...
Writing FeedbackSarlindaDS_27 - Nov 1, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 1, 2016
|Personal relationship between people has come withering away, since they using electronic media
3 - Hello willy! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) Nowadays, technologies are becoming more developeddeveloping...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Nov 1, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 1, 2016
|Electronic media has stronger good impact than a negative - it's best for regular communication
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Nov 1, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Nov 1, 2016
|I totally disagree that banning air travel is the only strategy to stop air pollution.
7 - Thanks for all the corrections and suggestions from you all guys, I really appreciate the comments. I will try...
Writing Feedbackmisskitty22 - Oct 31, 2016 / misskitty22 - Nov 1, 2016
|Article Summary : The Causes of Acne
3 - Hello. inda18. this is my suggestion. (...) form new structure called bio films making the ... 3....
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Oct 31, 2016 / badafebriani17 - Nov 1, 2016
|According to cyclical chart, the life of silkworm is started with the moth producing the moth's egg
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Nov 1, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Nov 1, 2016
|Silkworm and Silk cloth diagrams (Writing Task I)
3 - Hello! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) Then there are fivethe steps ofin producing...
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