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|Nile River Civilization influences on the Modern World
2 - Some suggestions to help clean it up and bring more clarity: "it is undoubted that all early civilizations"...
Writing Feedbackjamiewach - Dec 7, 2016 / rousua - Dec 9, 2016
|Listening Summary : Chaos Theory - the alteration of dynamic variables
2 - #... and mathematics that focuses on the alteration of dynamic variables. #changes in environment. However, this theory > changes...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 9, 2016 / sus_007 - Dec 9, 2016
|People can freely choose clothes they like, while they cannot be assessed from their appearance
3 - Aloha Kurnia, here are my thoughts for you; (1) word choices basically, it is absolutely crucial that you...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 8, 2016 / ibe13 - Dec 9, 2016
|The appearance of people as one of the essential indications of what characteristics they possess
Writing FeedbackDioba - Dec 8, 2016 / nda18 - Dec 9, 2016
|Writing Task I about the relationship between worker with their supervisor and partners.
3 - Dear Dioba, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too! ...iswere the highest...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Dec 8, 2016 / mem77 - Dec 8, 2016
|Where is the best place for children to learn how to be a good member of society?
2 - First of all, I do not think your introduction is appropriate for the exam. I will suggest to use...
Writing Feedbackimagenius - Dec 8, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 8, 2016
|Article Summary - New Investigation from Malaysia Airlines
2 - Lincoln, I am sure that this is too short for an article summary. You are suggested to write more...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|The average distance in miles which people drove to somewhere else in England from 1985 to 2000
2 - Mardian, apart from the above-mentioned feedback from one of EF contributors, I would like to focus on your content....
Writing Feedbackmardian24 - Dec 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|Some people argue that judging from the clothes that they wear is not appropriate. Others disagree.
3 - Do not create a 'hung' introduction paragraph if you want to reach band 6 or above. It should be...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|The education fee should not be charged for every student with different household budget
3 - There are many IELTS candidates that have the same mistake in deciding their position towards the essay. I believe...
Writing Feedbackleeminhee - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|"The Aesthetics of Silence" My personal essay on remaining silent
4 - Is Aaron still your best friend at this point? After this falling out, did the two of you become...
Writing FeedbackRahulkb - Dec 8, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|The pie charts reveal about the outcome of study which was conducted in 2005 and 2009
3 - Apart from grammatical errors in the first paragraph, I can see you misinterpreted the word "pattern" and "trend". These...
Writing FeedbackUQ17 - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|Supervisor vs co-employees - the graph show about result of survey to employee
5 - There are several mistakes in your summary. 1.The graph( it only singular, but i get the picture from other...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 8, 2016 / Dioba - Dec 8, 2016
|An appearance of Internet has made significant changes in the way people live
Writing FeedbackPhuong_Loan - Dec 7, 2016 / Phuong_Loan - Dec 8, 2016
|The relationship between supervisors and co-employs in the working life
3 - Dear yuri these are my corrections firstly, you should attach the graph picture although it is simple thing...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 8, 2016 / UQ17 - Dec 8, 2016
|Learning foreign languages at childhood will maximize language skills in the future
4 - Hello, this is my suggestion and correction for you 1. you must recheck your sentence formation. you able...
Writing Feedbackabdik - Nov 26, 2016 / yika - Dec 8, 2016
|Jamie Oliver has started a social project, called food revolution.
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / kurnia - Dec 8, 2016
|Fashion is one of essential aspects on people characteristic.
2 - Hi,there are several mistakes in your summary. 1.It indicates that fashion is one of essential aspects on people...
Writing FeedbackUQ17 - Dec 8, 2016 / Dioba - Dec 8, 2016
|The behavior of people gives more accurate data about what people like, than their clothes
3 - ,most people know what their friends are like from their behaviour... Behavioral analysis... I think the essay needs more...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / chadnium000 - Dec 8, 2016
|According to a study, 72 percent of old people in Glasgow (aged 75 years and more), were illiterate
4 - Here, Abdik Here, my corrections toward your writing 1. Abdik, You have to use past time consistently in...
Writing Feedbackabdik - Dec 7, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016
|Music connects people and is also used as a therapy. Which type of music is the most important?
3 - Thanks for the response, I saw that too after when I posted but couldn't edit Some people though...
Writing Feedbackrajat2108 - Dec 7, 2016 / rajat2108 - Dec 8, 2016
|Writing 2: Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke
5 - Arlen cohesiveness and cohesion are terms that are used to describe how effectively you present the information that you...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|Businesses have many essential purposes, such as profits and decreasing the unemployment
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 7, 2016 / kurnia - Dec 8, 2016
|The occurrence of heat loss and energy waste in the house comes from many household appliances
5 - The process of air leaks out and into the house which affects in the heat losing and energy wasting...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 7, 2016 / yika - Dec 8, 2016
|The aim of the firm is to be profitable and companies should only focus on this.
Writing FeedbackUQ17 - Dec 7, 2016 / abdik - Dec 7, 2016
|A simple profound accomplishment; the pride of winning a competition
2 - Aimee, are you writing this essay as a part of an English exercise or are you writing this as...
Writing FeedbackAmatis250 - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|Writing task 1 (The graph shows information about kinds of important communication ability)
5 - Even though people is plural, I think the correct version is: "dealing with people WAS" - not "WERE."...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 7, 2016
|The electronic media impacts on the alteration of human behavior which tends to be more individual
3 - I can see the reason why did your essay cannot go beyond 6.0. This is because your conclusion is...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 7, 2016
|TED Summary - If superpowers were real: Super speed - Joy Lin
2 - Lincoln, The Flash was never mentioned in the video presentation. This is an assumption that you are making because...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|Regulating Advertising - let the Ministry of Truth decide
2 - Ha, it is extremely difficult for me to review your essay for a number of reasons. The first one,...
Writing Feedbackhale - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|The only objective of an enterprise is to generate profit, however, I disagree with that idea
2 - Lincoln, your essay started out on a strong note, the paraphrased paragraph doesn't really fall under the required number...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|(Summary Article) This Is the World's Most Expensive City for Expatriates
Writing FeedbackAK354 - Dec 2, 2016 / UQ17 - Dec 7, 2016
|Article Summary : Bees of the sea : Tiny crustaceans pollinate underwater plants
2 - Nda, your topic sentence at the start of the summary should have immediately indicated that the tiny crustaceans help...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|Using media gives many cons on individual relationship between citizens.
Writing FeedbackCastro - Dec 6, 2016 / yika - Dec 7, 2016
|(TED Summary) We are worried about local warming in your laptop
3 - Hello, this is my correction for you Yossi Vardi as aan investor (remember that using of a or...
Writing FeedbackAK354 - Dec 2, 2016 / yika - Dec 7, 2016
|A research in which people were interviewed about communication abilities critical in their jobs
4 - Hello, this is my correction for you but in previous it deceaseddecreased slightly at 60% it was...
Writing FeedbackCastro - Dec 6, 2016 / yika - Dec 7, 2016
|Reduced number of people who keep in touch with others and disrupted personal relationship
6 - Hello, I will give my correction for you personal relationship direct communication In the past we usually...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 6, 2016 / yika - Dec 6, 2016
|IELTS writing task 2: too much exercises is bad for one's health, do u agree or disagree?
5 - Hello, here are my suggestions, 1. You have to state your view- agree or disagree in the first...
Writing Feedbackmimemeow - Dec 5, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 6, 2016
|The Truth of Turkey and Tryptophan
Writing Feedbackyurikeyuri - Nov 28, 2016 / Castro - Dec 6, 2016
|Artificial gills enabling human to breath under the water.
2 - Nina, once again you seemingly present a personal opinion in what should be an objective summation of an article...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 6, 2016 / Holt - Dec 6, 2016
|Integration Problems for People Living Aboard
5 - Dear Yuri Here, my revision toward your writing. I hope it will help in your next writing. Please focus...
Writing Feedbackyurikeyuri - Nov 28, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Dec 6, 2016
|The finding of two studies that aims to ask workers which the varied skills should they have.
2 - Lincoln, there was only one study covering 2 questions presented in the chart. So you made a mistake in...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 6, 2016 / Holt - Dec 6, 2016
|Scientists effort to invent a device which enable human to breathe under the water for a long time
6 - Dear Nda Here, my corrections toward your writing For that reason, several scientists is in an effort to...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 6, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Dec 6, 2016
|Popularity of the specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled schools on three periods
3 - icha, an exact data about the year or even percentage should not be appeared in the introduction paragraph of...
Writing Feedbackichaa - Dec 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 6, 2016
|The majority of companies regard that they should create regulation about their employee dress
4 - Lincoln, in terms of task response, you are more likely to get only 5.0. due to partially answer the...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 6, 2016
|iPhone 8 Dreaming in Full Swing; ten years' anniversary
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Dec 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 6, 2016
|(summary)Strong Personalities Skew Study Samples
5 - Hellooo Vicky! Allow me to give you some suggestion through your summary. Look at mine below: In truth,...
Writing Feedbackvicky17 - Dec 5, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Dec 6, 2016
|The alteration of annually distance dealt by person in various vehicles in two disparate years in UK
4 - Aloha Willy, here are my thoughts; - Overall, it can be seen that in general, (this phrase is...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Dec 2, 2016 / ibe13 - Dec 6, 2016
|According to many, women are much better in taking care of children, than men
2 - @krempetkov I do not see any flaws in your ideas, I'd suggest adding your position to your first...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 5, 2016 / roseochoa - Dec 5, 2016
|The populations of India and China from 2000 to 2050.
3 - prediction of population growth in fifty years later ... - this particular part sounds extremely strange. -- a forecast...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 13, 2015 / krempetkov - Dec 5, 2016
|Children's access to computer games - improve my writing skill
Writing FeedbackJohn Nguyen - Oct 29, 2016 / abdik - Dec 5, 2016
|Snowman Revenge - it was built on a hydrant.
5 - Mary was 10 yersyears old, (...), he makes the snowman in front ... While the snow falls maryMary(the name...
Writing Feedbackikhlasul01 - Dec 5, 2016 / ded15 - Dec 5, 2016
|BE KIND TO OTHER PEOPLE
2 - Ahmad, do you have a prompt that you are responding to with this statement? I am not sure about...
Writing Feedbackanonym28 - Dec 5, 2016 / Holt - Dec 5, 2016
|(Summary Article) Illegal Miners in Ghana Moving into Ristricted Forest Areas
2 - Dedy, your grammar accuracy problems in the sentence development and confusing use of lexical resources have made an otherwise...
Writing Feedbackded15 - Dec 5, 2016 / Holt - Dec 5, 2016
|People can keep in touch easily by using modern technology, even though it may lead to conflicts
2 - Mardian, even though you have tried to write an acceptable writing pattern, some essential parts are missing and this...
Writing Feedbackmardian24 - Dec 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 5, 2016
|There are some conflicting theories on the subject - Who did discover America?
2 - Septia, your information presentation is confusing and does not allow the reader to accurately follow your flow of discussion....
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Dec 1, 2016 / Holt - Dec 5, 2016
|You can't Hide from Government Hacking
2 - Mushon, please remember to refer to the country that is being reported about in the summary. When summarizing a...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Dec 1, 2016 / Holt - Dec 5, 2016
|In my country-Taiwan, many high schools encourage students to be a volunteer.
2 - Arlen, in terms of task accuracy, the essay would possibly score a 5 for a number of reasons. With...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 4, 2016 / Holt - Dec 5, 2016
|Many people have an unhealthy diet and do not take enough exercise. What do you think are the reason
4 - hi, here are my suggestions, 1. not anyone knows what is the "fifth standard", you should explain it....
Writing Feedbacksfahad284 - Dec 2, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 4, 2016
|I strongly argue that learning a new language is very important for kids in their earliest stages
Writing FeedbackBiburLicek - Dec 4, 2016 / Holt - Dec 4, 2016
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