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|IELTS TASK 2. It is generally agreed today that when a country develop its technologies, the long-es
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - Oct 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 12, 2016
|Give me some advice about How to introduce yourself?
4 - Hi Bambang, below are additional thoughts for your revision. - Speaker TED-xTED speaker X talked about - how...
Writing FeedbackBams17 - Oct 12, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 12, 2016
|Bringing enjoyment. Movies take us to the world of imagination.
4 - By providing the context when language is used, movies support us so that we can study the language faster...
Writing Feedbackwaterforce1205 - Oct 8, 2016 / Huynh Anh - Oct 12, 2016
|Almost all families at present are small - not as the same as in the past, when families were larger
2 - Hello Your text is understandable, but some of the sentences sound little awkward. Check the applied corrections below:...
Writing Feedbackltduc97 - Oct 12, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Oct 12, 2016
|John McWhorter described why we -as human- have to learn different languages
2 - English is taking over the world, everybody is speaking English, the language of internet, language ... >>this is spoken...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Oct 12, 2016 / angga93 - Oct 12, 2016
|Paraphrising Writing: Uses of Leisure Time
Writing FeedbackAfdhel - Oct 12, 2016 / oktoberlin12 - Oct 12, 2016
|Hundreds of crisscrossing tracks offer a glimpse of life in Africa around 19,000 years ago
2 - Hello PHA, Here some inputs for you. A hundred mile away from the volcano (...) scientist have cataloged...
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Oct 12, 2016 / fauzankrn - Oct 12, 2016
|Young people have to move to cities to get a good job.
4 - You should give an example at least once for each paragraph. Spend more time on reading. Keep writting!...
Writing Feedbackrecycle0509 - Oct 10, 2016 / clone0509 - Oct 12, 2016
|Taklimakan Desert is one of the famous wilderness in Asia
3 - Hello mr. Afdhel, thank you for your comment before..here is my advices: ... in Asia, located atin Xinjiang,...
Writing FeedbackAfdhel - Oct 11, 2016 / Gigih12 - Oct 12, 2016
|It attained 200.000 spectators? History of Circus as The Amusement Show
2 - Hello Afdhel, In the history,in the last century , Circus was watched by ... Commonly, Circusthese was held...
Writing FeedbackAfdhel - Oct 12, 2016 / PHA2016 - Oct 12, 2016
|How Build Creativeness and Confidence
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Oct 12, 2016 / Afdhel - Oct 12, 2016
|The majority of people moved to some big cities from their hometown to have a good condition to live
4 - Hi samsons, here my thoughts the majority of people moved to athe big cities from their hometown to...
Writing Feedbacksamson - Oct 10, 2016 / Aris05 - Oct 12, 2016
|Resume From Nat Geo Article "Hurricane Matthew's Destructive Storm Surges Hint at New Normal"
Writing FeedbackGigih12 - Oct 12, 2016 / Afdhel - Oct 12, 2016
|How To Balances Between Life and Work?
6 - Hi pokpok16, Your Essay is good enough...however you should pay more attention to your flow and its sense...
Writing Feedbackpokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016 / Fitri12 - Oct 12, 2016
|From the bar chart we can see the amount spent on consumer goods in thousand pounds sterling
2 - From the bar chart we can seethe bar chart shows informationthe amount OFspentSPEND ( OVER VIEW SHOULD BE USE...
Writing FeedbackMaximKlopunov99 - Oct 10, 2016 / Bams17 - Oct 12, 2016
|TOEFL Integrated Essay (Q: Summarize the points made in the lecture, ...)
2 - Hey There ..... These following correction are suggested to you : ... lecture offer two opposing viewsopposed views on...
Writing FeedbackShahab_A - Oct 11, 2016 / Ifan21 - Oct 12, 2016
|Choosing between living in a small village and a larger city.
3 - Hi Vjnhnguyen, your essay is pretty good, only slightly mistakes I found: I think (for formal writing, it...
Writing FeedbackVjnhnguyen - Oct 11, 2016 / Fitri12 - Oct 12, 2016
|Congestion and air pollution problems will not be over until the government applies the high tax
2 - Hi Ashela, as I go through your essay, I must say it is pretty comprehensive, you have all the...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Oct 10, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 11, 2016
|A government has to decide about increasing the cost of gasoline as a problem solving
3 - with increasing the cost of gasoline as a problem solving . => as a solution. I disagree with...
Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Oct 10, 2016 / zzzfly - Oct 11, 2016
|Draw your future and control your life - TEDx
2 - Bambang, the way you express your idea in the above writing is good and well-written. The flow of the...
Writing FeedbackBams17 - Oct 11, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Oct 11, 2016
|There are five stages to process the raw materials into the commercial cement
2 - Hello Risa, in general i like your essay, BUT here are some corrections: -... materials using inan...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Oct 10, 2016 / MaximKlopunov99 - Oct 11, 2016
|How to Manufacture Cement and Make Concrete ?
2 - Hello Llmi, i liked your essay, you interpreted diagrams using appropriate linking words, BUT if you use the word...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Oct 10, 2016 / MaximKlopunov99 - Oct 11, 2016
|Some of countries have a strict regulation about petroleum by adding the price into the maximum
2 - Hi,dinartika19,here are my thoughts.Hope that wil help you. ==>Some of countries have a strict ... For example, some...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Oct 10, 2016 / Killua - Oct 11, 2016
|The Taklimakan Desert is one of the most extreme environments on Earth
2 - Hi there, Fauziyah! The Taklimakan Desert is one of the place with the most extreme environment(s) on Earth,...
Writing Feedbackfauziyahtami - Oct 11, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Oct 11, 2016
|Programming bacteria to detect cancer (and maybe treat it)
2 - Hello Hope you doing well, lemme give you some suggestion ==> ... to detect cancer inside (a) human...
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Oct 11, 2016 / fauziyahtami - Oct 11, 2016
|Can Spicy Foods Really Cool You Down? (Article Summary)
2 - Hello Fauzan, Hope you doing well, lemme give you some suggestion ==> This summary is extracted from wired.com...
Writing Feedbackfauzankrn - Oct 11, 2016 / fauziyahtami - Oct 11, 2016
|The Surprising History Behind the Scary Clown Phenomenon
2 - Hello Bams, Hope you enjoy your time, lemme give you some suggestion ==> (a)(or you can mention Years...
Writing FeedbackBams17 - Oct 11, 2016 / fauziyahtami - Oct 11, 2016
|The Taklimakan Desert, covered with eighty-five sand dunes, has remarkable plant life
2 - Hi Asma! nice to see your writing there... The Taklimakan desert is covered with eighty- five percent...
Writing FeedbackAsma Raj - Oct 11, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Oct 11, 2016
|Some scientists from University of Oxford released result of study about the future of work
3 - Hello Fauzan Hope you doing well, lemme give you some advice. ==> Some scientists from (the) University of...
Writing Feedbackfauzankrn - Oct 11, 2016 / fauziyahtami - Oct 11, 2016
|Tax dodgers in India and Indonesia have been given a chance to come clean
2 - Hello PHA2016, I would like to give some corrections on your essay. ... dollar from the 64,275 taxpayers,...
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Oct 11, 2016 / Asma Raj - Oct 11, 2016
|Finding the best method to tackle traffic and pollution problems has been a debatable issue recently
2 - Hi llmi_03, Your essay is very good. However, I think there are some minor mistakes: ... in deciding...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Oct 10, 2016 / nguyendo - Oct 11, 2016
|If a contractor wants to build an apartment or housing area, the first he needs is cement
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Oct 10, 2016 / Afdhel - Oct 11, 2016
|The government tries to increase the cost of the petrol to reduce congestion and high gas emission.
2 - Hi there, I want to give you some advices The government tries to increase the problems which...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Oct 10, 2016 / Afdhel - Oct 11, 2016
|How the cement is produced and how to create concrete, based on the combination of cement
2 - The process to create the cement is begunTHE PROCCESS OF CREATING CEMENT IS BEGUN from the limestone and the...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Oct 10, 2016 / Bams17 - Oct 11, 2016
|First farm to grow veg in a desert using only sun and seawater by Alice Klein
2 - Hello Ifan, ... and officially launched yesterday which was seawater greenhouse. situated in Port Augusta region [your...
Writing FeedbackIfan21 - Oct 10, 2016 / PHA2016 - Oct 11, 2016
|The logging industry affects the environment in a number of negative ways.
2 - Hello herlysa, The logging industry gives gave many negative ... Those are were the wild broken, ......
Writing FeedbackHerlysa - Oct 11, 2016 / PHA2016 - Oct 11, 2016
|TED Summary: HOW TO GROW A FOREST IN YOUR BACKYARD
Writing FeedbackAbu_Gosok - Sep 22, 2016 / PHA2016 - Oct 11, 2016
|The stages to produce cement including the equipment needed and the composition of the cement
2 - Hi, I think you did a good job in describing the diagrams - here are some specific suggestions: ...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Oct 10, 2016 / TJLuschen - Oct 10, 2016
|Process of making cement and a visual explanation to concrete production as for building purpose
NEW - TASK 1 The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement...
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|The negative effect of illegal logging
3 - hello Saolo ... industry can cause the negative impact oftowards environment. The impact ofbut this situation is able...
Writing FeedbackMonkeyD_Saolo - Oct 10, 2016 / hailun11 - Oct 10, 2016
|Logging industry has had a great impact to the environment as well as terrestrial and aquatic.
3 - Hiii @dinartika19, Thank you so much for your corrections. I really appreciate it. Yes, for sure, I will try...
Writing FeedbackAbu_Gosok - Oct 10, 2016 / Abu_Gosok - Oct 10, 2016
|Studying the past and reasons requiring us to know about history
3 - Hai Halin! ... two main reasons requiringwhich are requiring us to know about history. First of all, when...
Writing Feedbackhalinhtrang - Oct 10, 2016 / oktoberlin12 - Oct 10, 2016
|The best solution for traffic congestion and pollution is raising the tax of the private car
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Oct 10, 2016 / elonbrahm - Oct 10, 2016
|Birds regularly do a movement to their breeding places and the areas that they inhabit
2 - Hi Ucha! This kind of activity is thea great samplesexamples of how nature affects (...) for breeding and...
Writing FeedbackUcha MSN - Oct 10, 2016 / dinartika19 - Oct 10, 2016
|Logging brings harm to the ecosystem. The damage causes habit loss, pollution and climate change.
4 - It brings harm effects to the ecosystem. The damage causes habitat loss, (...) change that hashave been spreadingspread from...
Writing Feedbackfauziyahtami - Oct 10, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Oct 10, 2016
|In the making-cement process materials which consisted of limestone and clay are crushed
NEW - The Steps of Making-Cement Process and The Concrete Production The diagrams reveal the steps of cement-making process and...
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|Bird Migration to Another place - they manage to accurately travel connecting distant locations
2 - Hi, Naelendra :) Relocation is the accustomed weight bunch of ... It is better to pay more attention...
Writing Feedbacknaelendra - Oct 10, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Oct 10, 2016
|TED Summary : Let's Teach for Mastery by Sal Khan
11 - Salman Khan criticizescriticized the traditional academic model when the teacher givesgave many homework to students(full stop .)and teacher judgejudged...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 27, 2016 / hirani03 - Oct 10, 2016
|A policy to raise the price of petrol to solve congestion and emission problems
2 - Alternatively, government can builtRAISE THE NUMBER OF public transportationTRANSPORTATIONS in which have lower ... ... the price of train...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Oct 10, 2016 / Ucha MSN - Oct 10, 2016
|How Much Water should you drink a day? Your Throat will Tell You
3 - Hi Yonathan ! According to a study conducted by Michael Farrell and his team atin Monash (...), our...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Oct 10, 2016 / dinartika19 - Oct 10, 2016
|Devastating Consequences of Logging
3 - Hai asma it is a great essay I have several suggestions for you hope it helps Logging industry...
Writing FeedbackWasishaSisha - Oct 10, 2016 / ryan31 - Oct 10, 2016
|The steps and all materials, which involved in the process of manufacturing cement
NEW - The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to...
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|Cutting Edge Observation: Migration of Bird
2 - hi @WasishaSisha i have little bit suggestion to make better your essay. is it ok right ? This...
Writing FeedbackWasishaSisha - Oct 10, 2016 / MonkeyD_Saolo - Oct 10, 2016
|AN ARTIST'S UNFLICHING LOOK AT RACIAL VIOLENCE
3 - hi i enjoy reading your essay.keep spirit In 2005, one of the black race arts's created six (...),...
Writing FeedbackBams17 - Oct 10, 2016 / ondemande20 - Oct 10, 2016
|Birds fly hundreds and thousands of kilometers to find the best conditions and habitats
3 - Hello, Asma :) Migration is a usual mobility (need an article) of animals, especially birds, and ... ...
Writing FeedbackAsma Raj - Oct 10, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Oct 10, 2016
|TED Reviews: The simple Cure for Loneliness by Baya Voce
4 - Hello Yonathan :) Baya said once that loneliness is (...) feel disconnected,(full stop).L oneliness is a public health...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Oct 10, 2016 / hirani03 - Oct 10, 2016
|The immense phenomena regarding migration of birds
2 - Hi, Afdhel :) The migrationno capitalization of birds has attracted attention ... The migratory bird's pattern is...
Writing FeedbackAfdhel - Oct 10, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Oct 10, 2016
|The core solution on traffic and pollution are raising the gasoline prices
NEW - Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent...
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|Selection (out of 5) for Summative Essay (1)
Writing FeedbackJustin13601 - Oct 9, 2016 / elonbrahm - Oct 10, 2016
|8 secrets of success (TED Summary)
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