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|Happiness is not only related to economic success, yet the social and psychology aspect is important
2 - hiii @PHA2016 , it seems that you have some errors on how to use passive voice and s-v agreement....
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Sep 20, 2016 / Jnur - Sep 21, 2016
|TED Talk Summary 1: Grit - The Power of Passion and Perseverance - Angela Lee Duckworth
3 - here are my thoughts: Intelligence Quotient (IQ) was not the onlyusually followed by "but also" difference between the...
Writing Feedbackerwiin - Sep 20, 2016 / ibe13 - Sep 20, 2016
|Environment challenges: water pollution, air pollution, hazardous waste dumps and acid rain
3 - have become an environmental problems ..... but, the most crucial problem, among others, on the earth is the...
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 20, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 20, 2016
|Hunting and moving from one place to another for meal - the first phase of human civilization
2 - hallo there are several advice for you Hunting and movingtraveling from one place to other places to search for...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 20, 2016 / BAMS14 - Sep 20, 2016
|TEDxWoman Summary: Warrior's Cry Against Child Marriage
2 - Hello Alfa, she createscreated Warrior's Cry for the hope ... in respect thatof her effort, early marriage...
Writing Feedbackalfa7 - Sep 20, 2016 / PHA2016 - Sep 20, 2016
|Where Writing System Come From?
Writing Feedbackalfa7 - Sep 20, 2016 / PHA2016 - Sep 20, 2016
|Internet brings us the ease access to the world and provides many benefits to users
2 - Hello, your essay is good. However, I would like to give some suggestions for it. 1. For example,...
Writing FeedbackAjid1406 - Sep 20, 2016 / erwiin - Sep 20, 2016
|The writing was the only way of communication with gods for the ancient people
3 - aloha alfatir, here are my thoughts for your summary: Paragraph 1: - specify your main idea to make...
Writing FeedbackFatirtalent - Sep 20, 2016 / bung ilham - Sep 20, 2016
|Current development is signed by the advancement in technology. Internet is one of its invention.
2 - Hello, your essay is good. However, I would like to give some suggestions for it. Internet (The internet...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 20, 2016 / erwiin - Sep 20, 2016
|All of life activities have been covered in internet, which should be used wisely to avoid addiction
3 - Hello, your essay is good. However, I would like to give some suggestions for it. ... advanced invention...
Writing Feedbackeve01 - Sep 20, 2016 / erwiin - Sep 20, 2016
|Summary Article - Indegenous 'Chola' Clothing Comes to Fashion Week
3 - Hi Fadhil, I have read your summary and I thought some corrections will be essential for improving your ability...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 20, 2016 / Anaguna - Sep 20, 2016
|Article Summary: If You're Trying to Get Pregnant, Here's What You Need to Know about Stress
2 - Hey!! I'm making just a few changes. Hope it helps. In this technological era, humans have made...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 20, 2016 / DoctorWho - Sep 20, 2016
|Cars lead a sprawl of some areas, not only in urban places but also in rural and suburban range.
2 - Hi Ros, here I give corrections on your summary, hopefully it can be useful for making a betterment in...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 20, 2016 / Anaguna - Sep 20, 2016
|A growing number of people believe that money is an intrinsic factor to be happy
2 - Dear rosadesiana. well, i see that your essay is well-organized despite some attention you should put on the grammatical...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 20, 2016 / Clark Kent - Sep 20, 2016
|SUMMARY Article : 5 Ways To Listen Better
3 - Hello fira Such a great writing These following correcrions are addresed in order to make your essay even better...
Writing FeedbackFira28 - Sep 20, 2016 / Ifan21 - Sep 20, 2016
|TED Summary Peter Singer: The Why and How of Effective Altruism
4 - hi nathan. thanks for your feedback for me before. here I want to give some advice.. 6.9 million...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 20, 2016 / rizaldohabibie - Sep 20, 2016
|Writing Task 2 - Internet invention over the last 30 years
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 20, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 20, 2016
|Nowadays, an individual can access information easy, because there is the Internet.
2 - hi.. good effort of yours.. I've got some advice.. > idea: you have not clearly given your statement...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 20, 2016 / rizaldohabibie - Sep 20, 2016
|The types of communication skills which are pivotal for a worker, based on the result of surveys
4 - Hallo fadhilahumar81, here i left comment for you (The) table illustrates ==> you can change the word...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Sep 4, 2016 / Fira28 - Sep 20, 2016
|TED SUMMARY: LIDIA YUKNAVITCH TALK ABOUT HER MISFIT STORY
5 - Hi VKWSSH89. Here I left the comment for you. Lidia Yuknavitch is a card - carrying misfit. According...
Writing FeedbackVKWSSH89 - Sep 20, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 20, 2016
|TED Talk Summary; David Cameron : The Next Age of Government
2 - hi friend i have some advices to you regarding on your grammatical error such as How we can make...
Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 20, 2016 / bismillah - Sep 20, 2016
|Ancient civilization attributed the original of writing to the gods.
4 - Hallo there, I want you obtain some suggestion from me, here we go: Ancient Mayans, Sumerians,(you should use...
Writing FeedbackMJT - Sep 20, 2016 / alfa7 - Sep 20, 2016
|IELTS Summary 10: Origins of Writing
3 - Hi ka, you've done it well. nevertheless, here are my some comments ... media to God, ancient peoples...
Writing Feedbackdils - Sep 20, 2016 / Fatirtalent - Sep 20, 2016
|Summary article: The questions remain after a bomb explosion in new york
3 - Hi eve01, Let me try to give you some suggestions -In this accident Twenty-nine people ... I confuse...
Writing Feedbackeve01 - Sep 20, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 20, 2016
|From long time ago the ancient society strived to find out something to communicate with one another
4 - Hi there, I appriciate your effort in making your essay, however, I think you must concern more in some...
Writing Feedbackbismillah - Sep 20, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 20, 2016
|Quantum Teleportation over 7 kilometres of cables smashes record.
2 - Hi, daman, i have read your summary, overall, you have stated your idea related to the topic of the...
Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 20, 2016 / hasbi - Sep 20, 2016
|Article Summary: Nearly Half of US Deaths can be Prevented with Lifestyle Changes
2 - ... Centers for Disease Control (CDC) [comma ] that those diseasesailments actually can be avoided ... Supportive statement...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 19, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 20, 2016
|Tourism as a remedium for peace between people?
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 19, 2016 / Jawa - Sep 20, 2016
|The Disabilities People With The Great Achievements
Writing Feedbackpokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016 / dils - Sep 20, 2016
|Unfortunately the speed in electric cars is slower than on gas-powered vehicles.
2 - Hi, Dioba, i have read your summary, overall, it is great. but, here some advice for you in order...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Sep 20, 2016 / hasbi - Sep 20, 2016
|Invented at 1934 by Leonard Kleinrock, the Internet has become a global system
3 - Hello, alrisky! I think there is nothing to be concerned regarding how you link the ideas in the above...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 20, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 20, 2016
|The Effects of Technology for Working
5 - Hi pokpok16,after reading your TED summary, i have some suggestions, perhaps usefull for you. 1. to many using...
Writing Feedbackpokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016 / Dioba - Sep 20, 2016
|Positives and Negatives of Zoos
NEW - Have you ever gone to the zoos? Usually, zoos are used for the parents to take their children for...
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|The popularity of electric cars did not last long due to the limited power and mediocre speed.
3 - Hi there. I made several revisions on your essay. Hope you can follow it through. - ... electric...
Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 20, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 20, 2016
|Cars have been used as public transportation since early twentieth century
4 - Hi Yonathan, this isn't a bad practice summarize essay. However, we need to improve upon certain points. I'll point...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 20, 2016 / hasbi - Sep 20, 2016
|The importance of teaching children how to distinguish right and wrong is undeniable
5 - hi..let me see your essay.. The importanceimportant of teaching children how to distinguish (...) punishment has been seen...
Writing Feedbackamandaliang - Sep 20, 2016 / mdamanhuri77 - Sep 20, 2016
|The Conditions of Water Supply In Indonesia
5 - i have some advices for you about using "the" THE is used to use known word, sentence official names...
Writing Feedbackpokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016 / bismillah - Sep 20, 2016
|3 steps how to hack our brain to make our dreams come true
3 - Hello agungdanprakoso i have some advice to you question of people is how to come true their dream...
Writing Feedbackagungdanprakoso - Sep 20, 2016 / Alamsyah Ismail - Sep 20, 2016
|Conventional cars, which use gasoline, are highly polluted, they are now less desirable
3 - Hi Erwin Let me give you some advice... The oil price rises, the(and) reserves of irreplaceable oil ......
Writing Feedbackerwiin - Sep 20, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 20, 2016
|Bastian Schaefer: What do we know about future? Difficult question, simple answer: nothing.
4 - hi friend ,i have a bit corrections for you regarding on that please put the colocation of words correctly...
Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 19, 2016 / bismillah - Sep 20, 2016
|Summary From TED "Tiny Satellites Show Us The Earth as It Changes in near-real-time " (W.Marsal)
4 - In this Cutting-edge [adjective, need noun ], There [capitalization issue ] are great number of capricious advanceD inventions that...
Writing FeedbackIfan21 - Sep 19, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 20, 2016
|The public transportation is very important for people in metropolis. Major Subways of Europe
3 - Rapid population growth Growing population rapidly has (...) which can cause very serious problems problems like what?. ... busiest...
Writing Feedbackerwiin - Sep 19, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 20, 2016
|Iconic dishes set the scene for RI culinary tourism (Summarize)
3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections Therefore, it leads to numerous of traditional diets....
Writing Feedbackzul2805_es - Sep 20, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 20, 2016
|Service Helps International Students Bridge Cultures
2 - Hi @agungdanprakoso Your composition is good. It is organized however, there are some things that you have to...
Writing Feedbackagungdanprakoso - Sep 20, 2016 / wew018 - Sep 20, 2016
|(TED) What Makes A Good Life? Lesson from the Longest Study on Happiness (Robert Waldinger)
2 - Hi MJT here are my suggestions, Everyone has their own definition aboutof a good life. From this...
Writing Feedbackabdasyari93 - Sep 20, 2016 / MJT - Sep 20, 2016
|Am I hero? The Epic Ed Snowden
2 - Hi Giansy, here some corrections are added regarding on your summary in order to improve your capacity in writing....
Writing FeedbackGiansy11 - Sep 19, 2016 / Anaguna - Sep 20, 2016
|There are several factors for people to move around and it have advantages and also disadvantages.
3 - Greetings mem77. You should include the task in your post and add space between paragraphs. 1. people have...
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 19, 2016 / angga93 - Sep 20, 2016
|22 Things You Didn't Know About the Olympic Village in Rio
4 - Hi Fira,the followings are my humble suggestions regarding your essay: - When olympic 2016 in Rio De Janeiro...
Writing FeedbackFira28 - Sep 20, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 20, 2016
|Be Careful for Your Bike, The Thief Will Grab It
2 - hello abdasyari, i have checked your essay, your essay was interesting, but i would like to give a correction...
Writing Feedbackabdasyari93 - Sep 20, 2016 / pokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016
|A death in the family inspires two works of art - Summary Article
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 17, 2016 / pokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016
|A SMART BIRD - how he manages to fly without rotating parts - just by flapping his wings?
Writing Feedbackbismillah - Sep 19, 2016 / eve01 - Sep 20, 2016
|Aziz Abu Sarah: For more tolerance, we need more ... tourism? (Summarize)
2 - hallo zul2805_es, i have checked your essay, and i would like to give some corrections. 1. In...
Writing Feedbackzul2805_es - Sep 20, 2016 / pokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016
|The Relation Between Transportation and Traffic Congestions
NEW - The Relation Between Transportation and Traffic Congestions Cities as Jakarta, Bandung, and Surabaya have all had to deal...
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|Ted Summary - Edward Snowden - How we take back the internet
2 - Hello Your text is understandable but a bit coarse. You should spend more time speaking/reading in English to...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 19, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 20, 2016
|The Causes and The Consequences Of Child Labour
2 - Child Labour is no longer an invisible crisis. deprives children of their childhood and their access...
Writing Feedbackpokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016 / MisterWandering - Sep 20, 2016
|Writing Task 2 - People live in one place and live in many places - which is better?
3 - Halo fadhilmd25, your essay is so interesting, let me to correct yours. 1. at the second paragraph, at...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 19, 2016 / pokpok16 - Sep 20, 2016
|Summary Article: Travelers Are Embracing Human Travel Agents Again
2 - online travel agencies have become more popular than any other kind of tourism organization ever Travelers...
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 20, 2016 / MisterWandering - Sep 20, 2016
|Summary of article Stories Hide in the Design of DC's Newest Museum (Samuel Lube)
2 - Hi Ifan21, I am pleased to read your essay, it' s interesting, however, I found some mistakes and I...
Writing FeedbackIfan21 - Sep 19, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 20, 2016
|Ways of Bird Migration - it has fascinated many observers for centuries.
4 - Hi Qaranewlagi52. Here I left a comment for you. Hope it can help you. Many tipestypes and ways...
Writing FeedbackQaranewlagi52 - Sep 19, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 20, 2016
|EILTS Writing Taks 1 Summary Ted The New Direction of Indonesia's Creative Culture
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