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|At times, people who travel to other country bring their original culture which impacts on local one
3 - Hai mbak dil! Let's go to my little feedback, hehee Some people argue that tourists who travel to...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Sep 4, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Sep 4, 2016
|Writing IELTS task 1 : the factors of global land degradation and its influence in three region
3 - Hi Ashela. Please, you review my notes to enhance your score. GOOD LUCK ... land reduction in the...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Sep 3, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 4, 2016
|SUMMARY TASK 8 - WHY ARE WOMEN LEAVING SCIENCE CAREERS ?
6 - Hi rosa, ... who have registered to thea college of science ... ... to leave their careers byin...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 31, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Sep 4, 2016
|TASK 2: visitors must follow local customs since it is the main way to preserve local culture
4 - Hi, Sofi :) The first paragraph: There is no doubt that cultural differenceS become [subject - verb agreement]a...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Sep 4, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Sep 4, 2016
|In many countries of the world few people earn extremely high salary
8 - Furthermore, we should ensure that money doesn't does not lie in hands of ... In academic writing...
Writing Feedbacksinchana - Jul 27, 2016 / Iforsa - Sep 4, 2016
|Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour.
NEW - Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that...
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|TED Summary Al Gore Lecture Task 1: Video Summary
4 - On lecture, he started in general thing that related common life. make your summary clear and avoid use thing...
Writing Feedbackpadi83 - Sep 1, 2016 / Iforsa - Sep 4, 2016
|2000 The water in Bahrain, Kuwait, Qatar, Oman, Saudi Arabia and UAE were mostly used in agriculture
3 - Hi Maulida! ... information about the water useusage in the Gulf countries in 2000. Overall, it can...
Writing Feedbackmaulida07 - Sep 2, 2016 / dinartika19 - Sep 4, 2016
|The three diagrams below illustrates the development of West Park Secondary School Area
NEW - West Park Secondary School map. The building experienced a significant change from 1950 to 2010. The three diagrams...
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|Writing IELTS task 2 : People still can be fashionable without spending much money
4 - Hi neighbor, Your essay is quite good but I think you should to add topic sentences into each...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Sep 2, 2016 / daya93 - Sep 3, 2016
|Dressing smartly. A nice appearance support people' to develop their career in the future.
2 - hi very good writing style just some modifications others convince that those are not guarantee=>others convince that this is...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Sep 3, 2016 / sinahector - Sep 3, 2016
|Task 2 Visitors Should Follow The Customs Of Local People Or The Host Should Welcome Other Cultures.
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Sep 3, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 3, 2016
|Malte Spitz: Your phone company is watching
4 - hi,,, Though Mobile phone makes people ... Malte has an experience which asking his data ... He...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Sep 3, 2016
|Some people think that being fashionable is extremely luxurious. For others it's a reasonable thing.
3 - Hi beautiful classmate miss dhila, - Some people think that being think being fashionable is ... - ......
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Sep 3, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Sep 3, 2016
|Parenting is hard to master. Children should be taught about it at school's formal training.
Writing FeedbackJawa - Sep 3, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Sep 3, 2016
|How does people use water in Gulf Countries? Here is the answer
5 - Hi Yusuf, - ... all countries consumeD water predominantly for agriculture and it iswas followed with (...) water...
Writing FeedbackYusuf05 - Sep 2, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Sep 3, 2016
|Oman and Saudi Arabia spent four-fifths water on agriculture, less on domestic and industrial needs
4 - hi... The bar chart illustrate the water use in Gulf countries in 2000. (you should paraphrase the question...
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Sep 2, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Sep 3, 2016
|Hiking The Inca Trail, Machu Picchu in Peru
5 - hi.... TheThis name comes from Ican language which means "old peak". The structure is madefrom the heavy...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 25, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Sep 3, 2016
|Foreign visitors face a cultural acculturation
2 - Hi Eka.. Cool.. I really like your writing because you have shown positive progress quickly and significantly. Based on...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 3, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 3, 2016
|Visitors should be respectful of the local heritage because it will give them a memorable experience
3 - aloha Ashela, these are my thoughts: ... culture that makes some peope(misspelling) believe that when they travel ......
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Sep 3, 2016 / bung ilham - Sep 3, 2016
|Three main causes which effects on land degradation / areas suffering the land destruction in 1990
NEW - The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these...
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|Is it essential to pay too much cost for fashion?
4 - Hi Hirani, I have to say an introduction you made here has a different meaning from what is conveyed...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Sep 2, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Sep 3, 2016
|Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. apartment or university dormitories?
4 - Just a little correction, hope this helps. ... they prefer living at university dormitories ... ... be...
Writing FeedbackJawa - Sep 2, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Sep 3, 2016
|Water Use in Gulf Countries 2000 - Task 1 IELTS Writing
3 - Hi Sony. These are my thoughts to boost your score in this section. Overall, it is evident that,...
Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Sep 2, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 3, 2016
|Some people have a tendency to spend too much money on purchasing fashion items
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Sep 2, 2016 / RezaAnandatama17 - Sep 3, 2016
|The Influence of smart appearance of employees compared with their quality
2 - ... reflection that the corporation has exciting staff. ... and capacity is the number one of value. Some...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Sep 2, 2016 / spachelord - Sep 2, 2016
|What is more important at a work place? Physical Appearance Or Productivity?
2 - Hello. I'd like to give you some corrections :) I hope it helps. .......so that people are should...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Sep 2, 2016 / maulida07 - Sep 2, 2016
|For over years, people always been paid attention on their look while working.
3 - This does not thoroughly answer the prompt given. As this is a both-view-essay question, your task is to...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Sep 2, 2016 / eddies - Sep 2, 2016
|SUMMARY TED 1, CLIMATE CRISIS - ALGORE; he urges the society to decrease the bad effects of it.
4 - climate crisis or the climate crisis ?? chose or choosing? thx miss ocaaaaaaaaaa.. happy writing...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 26, 2016 / Qara52 - Sep 2, 2016
|Nowadays, most people rely on driving cars for their daily activities.
6 - One of the main issue caused by ... For instance, we cancould make a comparison (...) in big cities...
Writing Feedbackmaulida07 - Aug 31, 2016 / aidafitria18 - Sep 2, 2016
|IELTS TASK 3 (The Advantages and Disadvantages of Small Family)
4 - While a small family has its financial advantages, it ... ... of having a small family comes fromis...
Writing Feedbackmaulida07 - Sep 1, 2016 / aidafitria18 - Sep 2, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 Employee Should Think About Appearance Or Quality Of Work
4 - Appearance holds a pivotal thing when inhabitant work in ... avoid to use thing because it is too general...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Sep 2, 2016 / Iforsa - Sep 2, 2016
|Data regarding water usage in six middle-east countries with three activities in 2000
4 - Hi, the following are several takes on your essay: - It is noticeable that agriculture was dominateddominant in...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Sep 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 2, 2016
|The degree of education of female in Someland divided by seven groups for five decades 1945 to 1995
3 - Hi, Ramzi06 ... women education level starts from no schooling to ... However, this turned drastically since...
Writing Feedbackramzi06 - Sep 2, 2016 / Naoki28 - Sep 2, 2016
|The figures regards the variations in using transport to travel in England between 1985 and 2000
2 - hay, just wanna help you with this The figures regardsthe variations in using transport > (some mode of...
Writing Feedbackyamtrang - Sep 2, 2016 / dimiarA - Sep 2, 2016
|"Employees should dress smartly" - Some companies' rules ask their workers to wear a suit
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 2, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Sep 2, 2016
|AI is calling to battle code gone rogue
3 - Hi ! here are my several suggestions, hope it will help a lot, regards The article was written...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Sep 1, 2016 / jomul01 - Sep 2, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 (Practice) - Rural Education: Sophisticated Technologies or Qualified Apparatus??
3 - Education is still less accessible for kids who live in ... -----------------------------> Most children who live in a...
Writing Feedbackpebzna12 - Sep 2, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Sep 2, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 Fashion Items Cost Much Money
2 - hi Farid, some opinions of mine: ---The first impressiontoof others is the person'sby people outlook ---However, to...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Sep 2, 2016 / choyhar2002 - Sep 2, 2016
|Is fashion an important part of life?
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 2, 2016 / yamtrang - Sep 2, 2016
|The new trend about having a small family are currently increasing, in contrast to a large one
4 - Hi Aida. Let me help you with sharing my insight about this. Actually, there were a large number pf...
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Sep 1, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 2, 2016
|'Education is priceless asset.' People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons
2 - Hi Reza! Education is the priceless asset. This is because governments or factories ... This is...
Writing FeedbackRezaAnandatama17 - Aug 29, 2016 / dinartika19 - Sep 2, 2016
|Writing Task 2 "Some kind of paid work work children in many countries"
4 - hi ziad, i would like to focus on your introduction paragraph ... involve their children forin some...
Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Sep 2, 2016
|Letter to a friend, asking for help - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 GENERAL TRAINING
Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Sep 1, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Sep 2, 2016
|CAMBRIDGE IELTS 9 TASK 1 / page 53: THE TOTAL NUMBER OF MINUTES OF TELEPHONE CALLS IN UK
4 - Hi Faridadwi, thank you very much for you correction. However, i am confused at some points you suggested like:...
Writing Feedbackyamtrang - Sep 2, 2016 / yamtrang - Sep 2, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : Being an Business Owner or Working for a Company?
2 - Hi Dinarti, It is good to read your writing. Well, you have had some valuable suggestions here. Please allow...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Sep 2, 2016 / Maya29 - Sep 2, 2016
|A breakdown of the average temperatures per month and the length of sunshine in hours per annum
3 - it is such a good introduction paragraph, but i suggest you to notice the data from the graph. I...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Sep 2, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Sep 2, 2016
|The happiness ratings for both: single people and those in relationsip, and the effect of children
2 - Greetings Mrs Atika Dinartika I am pleased reading your writing IELTS Task 1. but still some errors have been...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Sep 2, 2016 / ramzi06 - Sep 2, 2016
|WHEELCHAIR - ACCESSIBILITY ISSUES (SUMMARY TASK 9)
3 - Hi Rosa! A rapid growth of older inhabitants ... => The older inhabitants grow rapidly in the developed...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 1, 2016 / dinartika19 - Sep 2, 2016
|Most people tend to be self-employed rather than becoming an employee
Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Sep 1, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 2, 2016
|Being an entrepreneur has some risks and advantages, however it has more benefits than drawbacks
4 - Hai mbak dil! Here is a little correction for you.. Some people think that choose to start starting...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Sep 1, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Sep 1, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Problem and solution of children who playing computer games
2 - Hi there..., thank you for sending your writing here. Without further ado, Let me give you some valuable insights....
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 1, 2016 / eddies - Sep 1, 2016
|There has been a significant rise in the number of private cars since the past three decades
4 - Hi again, Mi! Be careful with minor errors as follows: It is different withfrom few years before,...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016 / pebzna12 - Sep 1, 2016
|IELTS - Writing Task 2 Foreign language at elementary school
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 31, 2016 / pebzna12 - Sep 1, 2016
|Writing IELTS task 2 : starting a business instead of working for a company
2 - Ashela, For others,[need comma] it is too risky because an enterprise ... StillHowever , I think the risk...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Sep 1, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Sep 1, 2016
|TASK 2 : Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages
2 - Hi Sofi! I think the idea is well delivered since you give relevant illustrations and or examples to support...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Sep 1, 2016 / pebzna12 - Sep 1, 2016
|At the present time, car become one of the most important goods (instruments) in human life
3 - hai aida, this is my feedbacks Nowadays, the car becomes one of the itmportant goodsvehicles in the human...
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Aug 31, 2016 / Aris05 - Sep 1, 2016
|It Is Better to be An Entrepreneur than a worker of company.
3 - Here are my vantage points about your essay. Chech them. ^_^ ONE OF HUMAN NECESSITIES. Please, you...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Sep 1, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 1, 2016
|Many individuals believe that having independent companies gives them more advantages
3 - Hello, Eka. Your writing is good and you can present your ideas clearly. But I'd like to give you...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 1, 2016 / maulida07 - Sep 1, 2016
|Happiness Percentages for Married and Unmarried, and How Happy Having Children in US
2 - Hello Hirani. To ease the other members in commenting your essay, please give 1-enter to separate each paragraph. Now,...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Sep 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 1, 2016
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