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|The proportion of the nationalities among the tourists in New Zealand from around the world
2 - Let me lend you some help to improve your introduction: ... information about the proportion/percentageof the homeland of...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Sep 13, 2016 / zul2805_es - Sep 14, 2016
|The result from a recent survey revealed the lack of geopolitical skills among American youth
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 14, 2016
|The Impact of Divorce on Children
5 - Unfortunately [need comma] it is not always as wonderful as it is shown on the surface. ... tends...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 13, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 13, 2016
|Logging industry has many negative effects on the life in our planet.
2 - Hello Bams, I'm pleased to read your writing since it provides valuable information about illegal logging. some of your...
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|AMERICA DREAM - SUMMARY TED VIDEO
2 - Hi Riandi. Let me help you to finalize this summary. Riandi, based on the grammar, you can handle...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Sep 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 13, 2016
|The interesting Al Gore speech on ecosystem
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 13, 2016 / kiki23 - Sep 13, 2016
|Oil pipelines project has been protested by Native American
Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 13, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 13, 2016
|Have Three Weeks for a Vacation? There Are Trips for You (Summary of article)
3 - Hello classmate I have some suggestions for you I hope it helps first ensure for your source, I...
Writing FeedbackALMAJID14 - Sep 13, 2016 / rian31 - Sep 13, 2016
|Nowadays, felling the trees is used by the industry to complete the material needed.
5 - Hello rosa. This suggest is to make your writing better. Nowadays, felling the trees is used [done] by...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 13, 2016 / Hujjatul19 - Sep 13, 2016
|TED: How Childhood trauma affects health across a lifetime
2 - Hi David, below are my thoughts on your essay. - Heart disease and lung cancer are several of...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 13, 2016
|A 3D-printed jumbo jet? A resume of a talk given by Bastian Schaefer
2 - Hi Eka, below are a few suggestions to enhance your essay. - People cannot know about thewill never...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 13, 2016
|IELTS academic task 1 - Energy consumption & greenhouse gas emission.
Writing FeedbackTest_Taker15 - Sep 12, 2016 / Test_Taker15 - Sep 13, 2016
|The range of nationality of people, who has journeyed to New Zealand
2 - Hi Gian, below are my thoughts on your analysis. The linking verbs are seen as very crucial detail that...
Writing FeedbackGian16 - Sep 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 13, 2016
|Summarize TED video : Taylor Wilson, who built a nuclear fusion reactor
3 - Hello mem77. I've read your writing and I find it that you are understanding the video well. However, this...
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 13, 2016 / Hujjatul19 - Sep 13, 2016
|It is witnessed that the largest proportion of New Zealand's visitors come from Australia
3 - Hi Eva, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope you find this website to be helpful and even...
Writing Feedbackeve01 - Sep 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 13, 2016
|Logging is a series of activities in the field of forestry which damage the environment
Writing FeedbackM Fajerianoor - Sep 13, 2016 / Aris05 - Sep 13, 2016
|Overall, the most travellers come from a place which is near to the visited country.
2 - Hi Almajid, please find a few suggestions for your analysis. - aboutof who where the people -...
Writing FeedbackALMAJID14 - Sep 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 13, 2016
|Just in the last two days there has been a temperature record in January for America.
2 - In the early for this topic explain about climate crisis. => you have no subject in this sentence. ...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 13, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Sep 13, 2016
|A single father from San Diego establishing a close bond with his little daughters
2 - Hii Fitry, your writing already get the structure, but lemme give you some advises. As shown (what information?) by...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 13, 2016 / Gian16 - Sep 13, 2016
|Several different citizenships of New Zealand's guest
3 - Hi Husnul, first of all WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope to provide you with the most...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 13, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 13, 2016
|Oceans Given Boost as Nations Agree to Protect a Third Worldwide - Summary Article
4 - Hello,, these are my suggestion which focus on grammar and structure ... many things that must be protect...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 13, 2016 / ALMAJID14 - Sep 13, 2016
|Dad Sings Disney Song With His Daughters, Your heart explodes with cuteness. Article summary
2 - Hello I think your text will win in value if you apply the following stylistic touches to it:...
Writing FeedbackIedha01 - Sep 13, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 13, 2016
|Logging industry can affect forests by loss of water, nutrients, and shelter for living organisms
3 - Hi Yonathan, it's nice to share some information with you. Unfortunately your writing still leads me into confusion since...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 13, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 13, 2016
|"Big Families May Be The Best Way to Avoid Divorce"
5 - having Happy family is (...), especially for peoplethose who are getting marriagehave married and have a big family. Buthowever...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 13, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 13, 2016
|Logging can damage the environmental life in forests - it brings deforestation
2 - hello lalu, it is nice to see your essay and also i am totally appreciate with your effort to...
Writing FeedbackLalu Aulia Sastr - Sep 13, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 13, 2016
|Tontowi Ahmad, the golden boy alongside Liliyana Natsir
2 - Hi Rian... It is enjoyable to read your writing since it provides some valuable information about the new idols...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Sep 13, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 13, 2016
|The untold harm of logging to the environment by distracting both terrestrial and aquatic life forms
NEW - The logging industry, which supplies the raw materials for a large number of products, potentially has untold harm to...
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|Summary for TED "A warm embrace that saver live" (Jane Chen)
2 - Twenty millions of babies are suffering as premature [or just directly write, ..... are premature], intolerant temperature ... The...
Writing FeedbackIfan21 - Sep 13, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 13, 2016
|International Visitors to New Zealand: Country of Origin
4 - hallo i have few advice for you ... tourists visiting New Zealand and it is measured in percent....
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 13, 2016 / BAMS14 - Sep 13, 2016
|Fulfilling the requirements for raw materials needs sacrifice of the environment
2 - Halloo dili.. here some corrections about your summary.. The logging industry has.. (the logging industries have...) Habitat...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Sep 13, 2016 / Beauty17 - Sep 13, 2016
|Logging industry needs supply from environment to deliver products which leads to the massive damage
2 - Hi Dila. Welcome to Essay Forum. I am delighted to tell you that you have been a right medium...
Writing Feedbackdils - Sep 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 13, 2016
|How to Live Passionately by Isabel Allende-TED.
Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 13, 2016 / rian31 - Sep 13, 2016
|The majority of visitors who come to New Zealand are come from Australia.
2 - hai classmate I have some suggestions for you I hope it works The pie chart shows the precentagepercentage...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 13, 2016 / rian31 - Sep 13, 2016
|Summary Article : The six best places to try modern 'martabak' in Jakarta.
6 - Hallo permata992, here i left comment to your sentences Indonesia that popular with many meal of traditional cuisine...
Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 20, 2016 / Fira28 - Sep 13, 2016
|Summary TED: Parenting In Modern World
2 - you tend to compose very simple sentences. You need to vary your writing skill at least by mixing...
Writing FeedbackIedha01 - Sep 13, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 13, 2016
|The percentage of tourist nationality in New Zealand
2 - The pie charts illustrates (verb agreement) the percentage of tourist nationality (it must be "foreign tourist") in New Zealand....
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 13, 2016 / mdamanhuri77 - Sep 13, 2016
|An information and statistics in regard of international visitors who travel to New Zealand
NEW - International visitors to New Zealand: country of origin The pie chart show an information about where international visitors...
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|Ecotourism is the concept of sustainable tourism management. (Summarizing)
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 25, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 13, 2016
|Highly-invented-sophisticated technology have most important impact on living standards of mankind
Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Aug 29, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 13, 2016
|The ups and downs of 3 kinds of food ingredients in China for last 25 years
3 - Hi Rosa. Please, meet my thoughts.. BETWEEN 1985 AND 2010 You should mention the timeline clearly. Don't...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 13, 2016
|ielts Writing Task 2: Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case?
3 - Hello Mayang7g I am Ifan The essay you've created about the advantages of traveling is good These following some...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Sep 13, 2016 / Ifan21 - Sep 13, 2016
|How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting?
Writing Feedbackdgr8swati - Sep 13, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 13, 2016
|What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and how to minimize the bad effects?
Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Aug 31, 2016 / rian31 - Sep 13, 2016
|IELTS Writing: who is going to be responsible for environmental problems?
Writing FeedbackMayo_baby - Sep 13, 2016 / dgr8swati - Sep 13, 2016
|Deforestation is a synonym of extinction. IELTS academic task 2: solution for deforestation
3 - aloha thphuong1911 , here are my thoughts for your essay: - in writing essay, background is more important...
Writing Feedbackthphuong1911 - Sep 13, 2016 / bung ilham - Sep 13, 2016
|International effort has been taking the lead in guiding the space developments on the right track
3 - aloha Thin Doung, here are my thoughts: These days we(you'd better avoid pronoun we, he, she, on your...
Writing Feedbackshin_crayon - Sep 13, 2016 / bung ilham - Sep 13, 2016
|IELTS Task 2: Politicians are more responsible for protection of the environment
2 - Hi Aravindia.. Welcome to Essay Forum. You have been a right medium to improve your essay. Let me help...
Writing Feedbackaravindia - Sep 13, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 13, 2016
|Japan and Malaysia in 2010 - Average household spendings by major categories; IELTS TASK 1
2 - Hi Fahad, I have read through your essay. The following are some suggestions for you, hope you can follow...
Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Aug 30, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 12, 2016
|IELTS academic task 1 - Destination of UK graduate and postgraduate students.
2 - Your questions: 1. There is some variety in prompts for these questions, but although this is one...
Writing FeedbackTest_Taker15 - Sep 12, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 12, 2016
|In the educational system of Japan, individual work has always had a higher value when learning
2 - Hello Yuya, welcome to the EssayForum. We aim to give constructive feedbacks to all people with their writing. I...
Writing FeedbackYuyahhhh - Sep 10, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Sep 12, 2016
|The best way to improve health is to exercise regularly. To what extent do you agree?
Writing Feedbacksangtt04 - Sep 11, 2016 / heliosmusic - Sep 12, 2016
|A wind turbine component design and it's position on the an area
3 - "A wind turbine component design and it's position on the an area" S/B "... and its position" ...
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Sep 5, 2016 / ProfessorVerb - Sep 12, 2016
|Today urban sprawl is considered to pose serious problems; giving the opinion - IELTS Writing Task 2
Writing FeedbackDmitryB - Sep 11, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Sep 11, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 Reasons Why Land Degradation Happen And 3 Regions Which Are Affected
4 - Hello, Faridadwi18! Over-cultivation IS only 2 per cent lower than THE deforestation. Another ways of describing figures:...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Sep 3, 2016 / DmitryB - Sep 11, 2016
|Summary: Forget shopping. Soon you'll download your new clothes
2 - Hi, Eka. I've paraphrased a few sentences and made some grammatical corrections wherever possible. I hope this helps you....
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 10, 2016 / Test_Taker15 - Sep 10, 2016
|In this modern era, we are unknowingly using products which create a lot of useless material
4 - i would like to focus on your introduction paragraph Today the most serious problem is ... in...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Sep 8, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Sep 10, 2016
|Statistics of coffee and bananas consumption some years ago in Eurrope
Writing FeedbackTest_Taker15 - Sep 9, 2016 / TJLuschen - Sep 9, 2016
|A leader should become an open-minded person rather than having strong opinions
Writing Feedbackchichi - Sep 9, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Sep 9, 2016
|Making decisions without hesitation always bring a better choice - TOEFL Independent Essay
2 - it always make wrong decide because of they usually hesitate and scare their decision is wrong. =>i really sorry...
Writing Feedbacklilylin26262 - Sep 9, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Sep 9, 2016
|Underground railway system along with inception, kilometers covered and passengers traveled per year
2 - Hi Kripke, welcome to EF team! :) I would like to directly point out your weaknesses in order...
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