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|Proportion of factors why production of farmland decreased in 1990s
6 - Hello Pram! Allow me to give you some suggestion. 1. Be careful with tenses. In task you should...
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|The freedom of dressing gives a different opinion among society.
2 - Today, fashion gives an impact to social culture. ... free expression will give an impact to ... ...
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|A thesis statement on doping in sports for a research paper
2 - Hello, i will give you suggestion, i hope it will help you: For introduction: 1. Explain about what...
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|Business aim, beside of making money, means helping others to get a job and make their life better
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|The picture illustrates the flow of air leaks and heat loss in houses
5 - Hello ifra! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) The picturediagram illustrates the flow ......
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Nov 2, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 3, 2016
|Let Heat lost and Energy Waste by Air Flows
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|The line graph presents how many people have no occupation in two developed countries, US and Japan
2 - overall, this is an adequate paraphrasing of the question, but remember that what you need to write in...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Nov 2, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 3, 2016
|Recognising the heat loss in a house is a way to save much energy
5 - Hello eki! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) The diagram gives the information about...
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|Overall, it can be seen that air leaks by dryer vent and crawl space in the basement
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Nov 2, 2016 / faizunaa17 - Nov 3, 2016
|People need to get as much as possible profits from their business, so the main aim of it is money.
3 - HELLO, ... people want [to ] get some ... ... companies that just contribute [contributed ] to...
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|People should require from their kids to have at least a basic experience in particular working area
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|Nowadays people buy a lot of unnecessary manufactured products. Is it a positive or negative develop
2 - In our highly industrialized era, --- Nowadays, we live in highly industrialized era I think, the sentence sounds better...
Writing FeedbackTANJIN - Nov 2, 2016 / Lola12 - Nov 2, 2016
|Exploring every part of a house in search of a slots through which the air is leaking
3 - Hi Mardian, Overall, your writing is good but here is some suggestions for you. 1)"... about the process...
Writing Feedbackmardian24 - Nov 2, 2016 / Niks30 - Nov 2, 2016
|The picture illustrates some parts of a house where air is absorbed and released.
2 - Hello, Aini :) Here are some additional suggestions for you. Concerning on the first paragraph: It is always...
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Nov 2, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Nov 2, 2016
|The growth of advanced technology has revolutionized the way people live and work
2 - Hi there, Your writing is great but there is a small correction for you.. For instance, internet...
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|Summary: The Homeschool Option - it is chosen by the most of families in United States
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|The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are.
6 - Thanks to all...
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|Crime is an old phenomenon. Its rate has been growing significantly now-a-days.
3 - Thanks to all...
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|Some people argue that businesses have to focus on making money and profit on what they produce.
4 - Hi Nuraini, I decided to continue with the modification of your essay so you will be able to see...
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Nov 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 2, 2016
|Nowadays with advances in technology and translation software people no longer need to learn new lan
4 - Hi Tanjin, below are a few suggestions to enhance your essay and I would like to start from the...
Writing FeedbackTANJIN - Nov 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Nov 2, 2016
|The owner of a company is focused primarily to make his company getting more benefits
2 - Hi Mardian.. Below are my suggestions to finalize your essay IT HAPPENS BECAUSE THE OWNER FOCUS ON...
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|It's not enough for company to provide uniform and to be good looking without workers' competence
5 - Hello, anna, your essay is good, but i will give you some suggestions: 1.Be careful countable and uncountable...
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|People's opinion toward several communication skills that were important to use in working
5 - Hello, i will give you suggestion: 1. Be careful to be(is, am, are, was, were) using, there are some...
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|The main perspective of Businesses is to Make Money - but is it the only priority?
6 - Hello linda i will give you suggestion: Be careful your sentence I have been seen some examples of...
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|Perspective of Electronic Media Effect in People Relationship
4 - Hello indah! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) TodayNowadays, the electronic media ... (2)...
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|The number of student's accommodations (WT 1)
3 - Hello @Fadhilahumar91 I read ur writing . There are some correction that is checked by others ...
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|The information about the main factors of lack productivity of farming land over the world
4 - ....... the main lack productivity factors of agrarian DECREASING PRODUCTIVITY ...... ....... were presented in the percentage includes...
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|The Attic Hatch is a circulation place where the largest amount of heat is lost
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|The popular opinion that the company has to focus only on how to make money
2 - Hello, IvanMS027. i think your essay is really good. it is simple but i can get your idea. but...
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|There are some rooms where the warm air is leaking outside. Air leaks and heat loss in houses
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|There are several goals of business that people want to achieve it.
3 - HELLO, There are several goals of business that people want to achieve it [it >> refers to several...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Nov 2, 2016 / Anna94 - Nov 2, 2016
|Governments should invest more in public services, but arts cannot be neglected
4 - Hellooo! Allow me to give you some suggestion. ... in which most of government investments ... ... not...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Oct 31, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Nov 2, 2016
|People who conduct a business should concentrate only to their aims to make money.
2 - Hi Meireza.. These are my few corrections for your essay. Hopefully, they can help to finalize yours. People...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Nov 2, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 2, 2016
|Extreme Weather is Behind Record Lows in Butterfly Populations
3 - Hello! I will give you some opinions about your summary. (1) ... be under threat from increasingly from...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Nov 1, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 2, 2016
|The air leaking into the house in the first floor passes dryer vent, crawl space and windows
2 - 1st paragraph: - The diagram illustrates the circulation of airair circulation that waft throughentrance and exit from a house...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Nov 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Nov 2, 2016
|Europe had the largest total land degraded with 23% caused by deforestation and over-cultivationd
3 - INTRODUCTION *successfully paraphrased the question *presented an overview, but did not cover all the main trends Thetabel shows...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|The two figures which provide data about the land degradation in 1990s
3 - INTRODUCTION *tenses and sentence form (active-passive), subject+verb agreement errors *appropriately selected information to be presented as overview although...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|It is said, that the main goal of entrepreneurship is to collect money without looking on others
3 - Aloha Faiz, here are my thoughts; (1) ... goal of entrepreneurship is to produceget/earn/collect money ("produce" is not...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Nov 2, 2016 / ibe13 - Nov 2, 2016
|Overeating in wealthy countries - a problem that is greater than hunger to other.
Writing FeedbackJessi0504 - Oct 30, 2016 / ryan31 - Nov 2, 2016
|The air is leaking from every ventilation and going out in the first floor, in the roof.
2 - Hi. here are a few corrections for your writing. ... the process of RELEASING heat lost and energy...
Writing Feedbackfaizunaa17 - Nov 2, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 2, 2016
|People are assisted by sophisticated technology tools, such as body scanner and CCTV
3 - ... that they are assisted with shopisticatedsophisticated technologies. It is consisted body scanner and CCTV ... 'consist' is...
Writing Feedbackdelvis92 - Nov 1, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Nov 2, 2016
|A breakdown of telephone call duration in UK during 1995 to 2002
4 - Hello Niks30! Allow me to give you some suggestion. A breakdown of telephone call duration in UK during...
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|These days, electronic media are commonly used by people in the world
6 - HELLO FRA, i give you some suggestions, here they are... ..., electronic media [is >> because this sentence...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Nov 1, 2016 / Anna94 - Nov 2, 2016
|The charts provides several factors that affected on lower numbers of farm-land productivity
3 - INTRODUCTION *effective and well-developed introductory paragraph *presents a clear overview of main trends, components, and differences on data...
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Oct 30, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|How to produce power energy using wind turbine with its proper location
6 - Hi bada, I want to make some comments 1. ... how producingproduce power energy ... You need a...
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Oct 27, 2016 / mardian24 - Nov 2, 2016
|Electronic devices have brought negative effects on human, especially in personal communication
5 - Hello anna! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) Using of electronic devices is now...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Nov 1, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 2, 2016
|Dealing with client as an external communication skill and listening carefully to colleagues ...
2 - Hi Ifra.. These are my corrections for your writing. ...essential communication skills in A people's job (...) surveys...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Nov 1, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 2, 2016
|In 1990s Europe became the widest area affected by land degradation. Why? Over-grazing.
2 - INTRODUCTION *a few errors in sentence structure *repetitive [ineffective sentencing] *appropriately selected information as overview even though with...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|The survey result about essential soft-skill in communication for daily routines
4 - Hallo ivaan.. i dont know why you did not put any comparation in your essay. I think make essay...
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Nov 1, 2016 / Beauty17 - Nov 2, 2016
|Reasons for the decrease of land production and explanation for soil degradation in the world
3 - INTRODUCTION *flaws in paraphrasing question incompletely *unclear overview [although had selected information to be presented as overview, it...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Oct 29, 2016 / RAY93 - Nov 2, 2016
|Benefits of advanced technologies, such as scanner and CCTV, outweigh their disadvantages.
2 - @amrillahmk Maybe you rephrase -- it will bring many advantages in improving our crime prevention security systems For...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Nov 1, 2016 / Ymun - Nov 1, 2016
|The silkworm cycle life starts with the production of eggs, then the larvae come out
2 - The pictures belowdescribedescribesthe information about the ... in your answer sheet, you do not copy the picture Overall, the...
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|The technology aims to change the way we act and communicate each other
3 - ... for our daily lifelives. ... using technology affects our relation to others. Using of electronic peripheralsuse devices...
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Nov 1, 2016 / amrillahmk - Nov 1, 2016
|IELTS SUMMARY MONTH IS COMPARING BETWEEN TABLE AND PIE CHART
5 - Hi Syukron, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, I hope you find this website to be...
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|Bulgarian citizens who lived outside their country, based on school level
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|Raising a global technology has helped people to work more efficient
2 - Hello Most of your sentences need to be rewritten so that they sound better (stylistically) and make more...
Writing FeedbackJordansimons - Nov 1, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Nov 1, 2016
|In 1990s the land in North America was most affected by over-cultivation factor with 3.3%.
4 - hello, i have some suggestions for your writing. ... number with over-cultivation, which the percentage was 28 which...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 29, 2016 / delvis92 - Nov 1, 2016
|The diagram show a process for producing electricity for home use using biomass source
2 - Hi Thirakorn, Welcome to EssayForum :) This is the right place for you to practice writing, particularly in...
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|Electronic media have a good effect for activities of people between another people.
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|Many opportunities to communicate in plural, multinational communities, using foreign languages
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