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IELTS - ACADEMIC - INTERNET vs CLASSROOM FOR LEARNING LANGUAGES


candy07 9 / 33 6  
May 31, 2014   #1
QUESTION-
Some people say language courses using the internet and allowing you to talk to somebody is a good way to learn. Others, however, believe that study in classrooms is still the best way of learning. Give your opinion on these views and include your own experiences and examples.

RESPONSE-
Nowadays many people try to learn new languages for the purposes of higher studies as well as for immigration to foreign countries. Some people feel that learning a language using internet and talking to someone online is a good way to learn whereas others believe that conventional methods of studying in classrooms is the best way .Both the opinions will be critiqued before a reasoned conclusion is reached.

It is felt by many that learning a language using internet offers a wide range of data pertaining to vocabulary and accuracy of the language. Further, an individual may learn a new language without an extra effort of going to classes. For instance, many Asian students who aspire to pursue their higher education in English speaking countries such as Canada, Australia and England choose distant online courses for learning English. This saves their time as they can learn new words and their meanings just on the click of a button. Thus, it is clear why this argument has garnered a lot of support.

However, learning a language in classroom offers different benefits. Students can do group discussions and further discuss their own problems with the teachers. Moreover, teachers can cater to the needs of individual student. It is reported by many students that even if they choose online courses for learning, eventually they join classes for better understanding of the language and its practice. Thus, it is seen clearly why classrooms are still the best way of learning.

Therefore, to conclude it can be said that although learning online offers comfort and access to wide range of data but learning in a classroom has advantages such as group discussions and motivation by teachers. So, it is opined that classroom learning has greater benefits than learning online.
AngelaB 7 / 14  
May 31, 2014   #2
"although learning online offers comfort and access to wide range of data, but learning in a classroom has ..."
In my opinion, if you say "although" you shouldn't add but.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
May 31, 2014   #3
You are being asked to

Give your opinion on these views and include your own experiences and examples.

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It is always good if you expressed your point before ending your introduction although this essay is not Agree/ Disagree type.
The benefit of this are that the assessor will know upfront exactly what your position is. This will then avoid any confusion when your essay is read.

It is felt by many that

It's better to avoid use of self-contradictory phrases like many. Write it more precisely.

I am not sure if all of these are clear to you, but this is what I know.
SalMon 27 / 113 10  
Jun 1, 2014   #4
Your essay is pretty good to me :)
The idea is well organized and it helps me with my essay :)
I love your vocabulary :)
OP candy07 9 / 33 6  
Jun 1, 2014   #5
Hi Eddies
Many thanks for your comments

I wanted to write it is felt by many meaning that many people have this opinion since I have given my opinion at the end. Can you please tell this phrase and essay does not gives clear meaning to the reader ? How should I rephrase it.

I highly appreciate your time.
Thanks
harry137181143 2 / 4  
Jun 1, 2014   #6
It is good that you organize your ideas very clearly. But I think it can be better if you add some example, i.e. some real stories, to support your arguments.


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