You are being asked to
Give your opinion on these views and include your own experiences and examples.
It is always good if you expressed your point before ending your introduction although this essay is not Agree/ Disagree type.
The benefit of this are that the assessor will know upfront exactly what your position is. This will then avoid any confusion when your essay is read.
It is felt by many that
It's better to avoid use of self-contradictory phrases like many
. Write it more precisely.
I am not sure if all of these are clear to you, but this is what I know.