IELTS Academic essay: Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want.

Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think that fresh water supply should be controlled strictly by governments as the sources are limited. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Water is the essential source of life in our universe. All living creatures including human beings, plants and animals are impossible to live without water. This colorless, flavorless liquid is the natural gift giving to all the living things in the earth. Throughout the centuries since the first creation of life in universe, human beings have been using fresh water for their's daily life without any limits and restrictions. In recent years, there are arising an alarm that the resource of fresh water are decreasing. Some individuals think that governments should control the fresh water consumption in order to conserve its resource. Others argue that humans should use fresh water how much they want to use. All of these views have both of advantages and disadvantages.

The governments can control water consumption by lawmaking. In my opinion, the one way to control the fresh water consumption is to make it costly high. In this case, people cannot use fresh water wastefully and in the consequence, there will be significant benefit for conservation of fresh water. However, poor people will struggle with fresh water consumption because of their financial situation. The high cost of water makes them hardly to survive without enough usage of fresh water.

On the other side, water consumption without any restrictions leads many people to use fresh water inefficient way. For example, some people use fresh water for washing their cars. In the consequence of limitless usage of fresh water, there is an alarm on decreasing fresh water resource.

In conclusion, we all should have to conserve the fresh water because it's the vital part of our life. Governments should pay attention on fresh water consumption by restricting its inefficient usage. The most important step to keep the resource of fresh water is to keep the natural resources which are the essential for water resource . By conserving our planet's fresh water resource, we can save our life in planet.

... universe include other solar system too and we still don't know whether there can be living beings who could survive without water. I guess you meant the "world" we live in.

Water is essential for the existence of all living beings in our planet.


When you say all living creatures, it refers to everybody and therefore this specification, (plant, animals, human beings) sounds a bit redundant.


... first part is fine because you are telling the reader something that you haven't told before. But the latter part is a repetition of the same idea you've been telling in first few sentence. Repetition, be it the words or ideas, makes the reader bored.

I will keep in mind the feedback you gave me for my further writing. Can you evaluate my essay in scale between 0-9 ?

The governments can control water consumption by introducing laws that prohibit people misusing water.... Actually your prompt , does not require you to discuss how governments can control water supply. Instead, it asks you to discuss the two sides of the argument that should water be free or should it be controlled by the government. So, in your body paras, you need to discuss these views by giving reasons. Then support those reasons with examples. This sentence takes you on a different direction which your prompt really does not require.


.... This paragraph is in the right track. You give a reason why the water consumption needs to be controlled and then support it with an example. :)

Remember,the reason for 'why govt wants to control it' will not be the same as ' why we want to control it'.

A cogent reason : waste of money
1, limited supply so govt has to pay--expensive-- waste of govt budget-- > can be used other purpose or priority-->but/we need water at the same time-- can't ban it--- can only control it (strict rules).

Your body --> mentions HOW to control but it doesn't answer the question ( why govt should control it as it is limited).

Please learn how to analyse the question and draft it.Once your analysis and drafting are correct, then focus on how to write it ( such as error free sentences and complex sentence structures).