hi bro
these are my corrections
The charts compares the education level divided into ...
THIS SENTENCE CONTAINS FEW MISTAKES
1. PAY ATTENTION TO THE S+V AGREEMENT >>>> CHARTS COMPARES >> CHARTS COMPARE ( S PLURAL NEED PLURAL)
2. PASSIVE VOICE S+ TO BE+ V3 >>> LEVEL DIVIDED INTO >>> LEVEL IS DIVIDED
Overall, the majority of young people and adults ...
1. adults in Glasgow are educated >> it is passive voice >>>>adults in Glasgow educated
2. significant number of old people are not >>>> significant number of old people are opposite
Abdik i regard that your essay is inaccurate, it will better if you see more examples of writing task one to enhance your writing ability. In this part i cannot give correction until end of your essay because I reckon that you should deal with several mistakes which I mark above.
BREAK A LEG BRO.