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IELTS WRITING TASK 1: UK Acid rain emissions (GRAPH)


hahong 6 / 11 5  
May 15, 2013   #1
The line graph describes the amount of UK acid rain emissions produced by four sectors from 1990 to 2007

In general, most sectors showed an drop in the quantity of acid rain emissions with domestic sector being surpassed by others

To specific, after a dramatic fall for the first five years, the amount of acid rain emissions released by electricity,gas and water supply underwent a slight increase in 1999, ending the period with a decrease to 0,5 million tones. By comparison, other industries went down gradually in the quantity of acid rain emissions from the highest point of above 2 million tones to a bottom of around 1,3 million tones, while the figure for transport and communication sector experienced a climb to 1 million tones, followed by a drop. Interestingly, Only in domestic sector was there a steadily decrease seen in the quantity of acid rain emissions.

In brief, while transport and communication sector increased over years, the opposite true of other sectors.

(163 words)

PS: Could I post 2 writing task 1 in one time ? I think Task 1 is much shorter than task 2




dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 16, 2013   #2
The line graph describes the amount of UK acid rain emissions produced by four sectors from 1990 to 2007

.... Good start

ana drop

.... you use "an" when the following word starts with a vowel

To specificMore specifically, , after a dramatic fall for the first five years, the amount of acid rain emissions released by electricity,gas and water supply underwent a slight increase in 1999, ending the period with a decrease to 0,5 million tones.

... You can also say "in detail"

In brief, while transport and communication sectors increased (what?) over years, the opposite true of other sectors.

... this line is not well presented. It is not clear too :( ... Also, you need to state the overall trend here;
In brief, the contribution of all sectors to acid rain emissions have dropped over the years.
I think this website provide a good framework for tackle this task' - hope this is helpful :)


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