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ADAPTING OTHER CULTURES IN THE FLAT WORLD TIME


nguyenvannam 5 / 10 1  
Jun 1, 2015   #1
The world has been becoming closer than ever due to the developing of transportation and communication technologies like planes and Internet. As a consequence, culture of each country has been affected by them. The problem is how to protect oneself culture as well as absorb other cultures to adapt with international environment. This essay will examine how to keep private cultural values and also learn from other cultural values.

Firstly, it is necessary to distinguish what are the good or bad values of each culture. If these are good values, they should be absorbed. If these are not ones, they should get rid of. However, who determine for this problem. It should belong to each person as well as government. Each person need to learn cultural knowledge from books and reality. Government need to search some professional studies about cultural area. For example, Vietnamese people need to learn being on time of Western culture and being serious in works of Japanese. However, they should scare off imperialism of Western countries.

Secondly, each country has private cultural strengths, so they need to promote to other countries. They can spread out through entertainment means such as television, CDs or films. Moreover, they can touch with cultural meetings in different levels from regions to continents. For example, Vietnamese culture can promote some traditional values as respecting elders, or traditional meals such as "Pho" or "Banh Chung" to other countries.

To conclude, it is very important when adapting with other cultures in the globalization age. Each country need to learn from cultural beauties as well as throw unsuitable values away. In addition, each country need to protect and promote private cultural strengths to whole the world to enrich each other. With personal responsibility, each person need to self-study to open knowledge and adaptability to other cultures.

(Thank you for your help - Nguyen Van Nam )

Mustafa1991 8 / 373 4  
Jun 1, 2015   #2
I like your essay's vision and message. The grammar errors are there, but it's more important to improve the message through logic.

First two paragraphs are solid. Third paragraph includes mention of a cultural value (respecting elders). The third paragraph should only list cultural-economic modes of exchange such as products or technologies that are culturally unique.

Last paragraph must rehash topics in paragraphs before it. The diction is not right:

Para 1: globalization and cultural proximity
Para 2: values conflict and compromise
Para 2: economic interfacing and trade

Concl: Broad reintro, rehash Para 1, Para 2, and Para 3 topic, Closing emphasis on cultural understanding with mutual benefit and harmony.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Jun 1, 2015   #3
- The problem is how to protect oneselfones culture as well as absorb other cultures to adapt with international environment.

- FirstlyFirst , it is necessary to distinguish what are the good or bad values of each culture.

- If these are not ones , they should get rid of.

-However, who determine for this problem.

- For example, Vietnamese people need to learn being on time ofas this is a practice of Western culture and being serious inat work as forworks of Japanese.

- SecondlyNext , each country has private cultural strengths, so they need to promote this to other countries.

- Moreover, they can touch base with cultural meetings in different levels from regions to continents.

- In addition, each country need to protect and promote private cultural strengths to whole the whole world to enrich each other, with personal responsibility, each person need to self-study to open knowledge and adaptability to other cultures.

Nguyen, overall assessment of your essay, it's good. Your point was made and your message is clearly sent across.
However, I have a few tips you may want to consider;

- word choice, make sure that the words you choose will be understandable so you can send your message across

- your sentence structure is very good

- make sure you proof read and spell check all the time

And, oh, read more, this helps in enhancing your vocabulary.

Keep writing

Cheers!!!
OP nguyenvannam 5 / 10 1  
Jun 2, 2015   #4
Thank you so much for your reply and useful advices. I will try to follow them. Once again, thank you so much!
niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Jun 2, 2015   #5
Firstly, it is necessary to distinguish what are the good or bad values of each culture are.

If these are good values, they should be absorbed, but if these are not ones , they should get rid of.

However, who determine for this problem.

Better delete this sentence or rephrase it in a logical way :)

It should belong to each person as well as government

Are you referring to the good values every person should possess? Try to complete the idea in the sentence so you can put it across to the reader effectively :)


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