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Addiction of computer leads to ignorence of family


yunus 1 / 1  
Nov 6, 2011   #1
The cartoon says that the addiction of computer leads to ignorence of family.I agree with this idea that people who use computer excessively spend less time with their family because of family gathering and family relationships.First, people using computer too much get in trouble with their family.That is,their family can't be gathered.For example,when they have dinner ,one of them whom is an addiction to computer be always late or he/she don't come to dinner .Moreover,people using computer excessively don't go out with their family.Apart from family gathering,family relationships are also not good,which means that they don't spend too much time with their family so their relationships are not good.For instance,they don't share their feelings with their family because they share their feelings with their online friends.Also,they don't share their money.In conclusion,the cartoon is right in terms of addiction of computer.

alexmb 2 / 3  
Nov 6, 2011   #2
The cartoon says that the addiction of computer leads to ignorence of family. I agree with the idea that people whom use the computer excessively spend less time with their family because of family gathering and family relationships. First, people using computer too much get in trouble with their family. That is their family can't be gathered. For example, when they have dinner one of them whom is an addiction to computer will always be late or won't come to dinner at all. However, people whom use the computer excessively won't go out with their family. Apart from family gathering, family relationships are also not good, which means that they won't spend too much time with their family so their relationships aren't good. For instance, they don't share their feelings with their family because they share their feelings with their online friends. Also, they don't share their money. In conclusion, the cartoon is right in terms of addiction of computer.

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Nov 12, 2011   #3
alexmb
thank you very much .I will be careful


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