If we were to admit one more student to the class of 2012, why that student should be

Having a B.E Comp degree with versatile experience of 5 years. As after completeing my degree I was a computer teacher in a institute simutaneously I was taking the knowledge of computer hardware, then I started developing interest in technical field, later on I upgraded myself to higher technology I started dealing with servers & did the SUN Solaris certification and cleared the same with good marks . After working in the technical field for longer period & dealing with many senior persons & & higher authorities, I realized that if being a married female I can work in a men oriented field & take the challenging jobs/task & complete it with in the time frame then why not I also should be at a high position or at senior position if I have the caliber then why should I not explore myself. All my dreams & hardwork will be completed through a good B school & I know it is none other than ISB. As ISB dont look only for the candidates who are book worm but the candidates who can prove themself & who has positive attitude & confidence in themself.

Hi. There are many run-on sentences in your essay. Try to use shorter sentences and watch your punctuation. Now its very hard to follow your thoughts.

Also, do not use "&" as a substitute for "and"- this is not appropriate in essays.

I agree with muroslav. I'll help to edit your writing, hopefully I have not misinterpreted what you meant so as to change the meaning..

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This portion is way too long and confusing. You should break it down into shorter sentences. Maybe something like this:
After working in the technical field for a long period of time, and having dealt with many senior person of high authorities, I realized that I can challenge myself to greater heights. If I, a married woman, can work in a men-oriented field; taking up the challenging tasks and completing them within the requested timeframe, then I should be able to accomplish even more. I should try to get a higher position since I have the caliber.

All my dreamswill be achieved&and my hardwork will be completed through a good B school & I know it is none other than ISB. As ISB dont look only for the candidates who are book worm but the candidates who can prove themself & who has positive attitude & confidence in themself. My hardwork would be worthwhile if only I get admitted to ISB.

Hope it helped :]
All the best to you

Let's look at this first sentence:
Having a B.E Comp degree with versatile experience of 5 years.
It should begin with "I"... I have a ...

Check spelling:
completeingcompleting

my degree I was a computer teacher in a institute, and simultaneously I was taking the knowledge of studying computer hardware. Then, I s tarted developing interest in technical fields. later on I upgraded myself to higher technology and started dealing with ...

Do not use &. write the word "and" instead.

Okay, good luck with this! Your English still needs a lot of work. Do you have questions about any corrections made in this thread? I think you should read sentences aloud 10 times each to practice and develop good habits.