In some countries , young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finish highschool and starting University.
Discuss both advantages and disadvantages.
In some countries , nowadays , young people tend to go travelling or go for a part-time job for one year instead of attending University immediately after finishing high school. I belive that it will pay divedents for them . However , it still has some drawbacks.
Firstly , people who have a part time job before studying in University will have more experience than who don't. It is believed that people who has experience will perfome better in University because , in some cases , they can use their experience to prepare for subjects which they are going to take next year. For example , working at the restaurant or a hotel can give you useful practical knowledge in Hospitality subject.
Moreover , some students decide to go travelling after completing their studies in highschool. They believe that going travel is the best way to relax after a long , stressful time preparing for final exam in highschool. They will feel more comfortable and less stressful. And the more you feel comfortable , the better your perfomance in University will be. They can choose to visit their relatives who live apart from them for a year. After that , they will spend a hundred percent of their mind as well as time on studying.
Nevertheless, stop studying for a year can be a disadvantage and slowdonwn your studying process which will lead to late graduation. This means that students can graduate and have a full time job one year later than standard.Therefore , your goals in the future will be effected . For instance , they can waste a lot of opportunities in one year. Meanwhile , their friends are doing a good job , having more relationships and you are studying at University.
In conclusion, although going travelling and having a part time job can help you to relax and earn more experience in order to prepare for your next step of studying , it will cause some disadvantages such as late graduation.
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In this essay you should try to follow the following format for the 2 reasoning paragraphs:
Sentence 1: Dis/Advantage topic
Sentence 2: Explanation
Sentence 3: Transition sentence
Sentence 4: Connected Dis/Advantage topic
Sentence 5: Supporting explanation that strengthens the 2 Dis/Advantages presented
One paragraph for the advantage, one paragraph for the disadvantage, following the above discussion format will surely get you a better score than this presentation which does not follow the required discussion format.
Hi , i really appreciate it . Thank you very much . But in my writing , i am trying to show that i am discussing about disadvantages and advantages , as you can see the 1st paragrah is the first advantage , the 2nd one is the next advantage , the 3rd one is the disadvantage . Is it not okay to write like that ? Thank you very much and i hope that you will comment to my writing next time . Thank you!