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IELTS Task 2: Advantages and Disadvantages of consuming organic food


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Nov 6, 2021   #1

are organic products beneficial as advertised?



Nowadays, since consumers are increasingly aware of what they are purchasing and eating, organic food products have gained in popularity over the past few years. This essay will highlight both the benefits and the drawbacks which result from such a switch from unclean food goods to safe and hygienic ones.

Looking firstly at the positives, one major upside is that the production of organic products involves eco-friendly farming methods. Therefore, not only will farmers be able to save a certain amount of money, but the serious soil and water pollution will be mitigated and bettered. What is more, because of the reduced quantity of chemical substances used in the manufacturing process of organic food, such products are cleaner and safer to consume.

However, apart from the advantages which this kind of goods has to offer, it is worth taking into account that organic food does present some issues. The main justification for this view is its higher prices compared to non-organic food. This is due to the fact that the requirements for organic farming are much more challenging and difficult to meet. Because when little or no synthetic pesticides and chemicals are used, more manual labor, physical work, and time will be needed. Lastly, with the absence of chemical substances, organic goods suffer from short durability despite being clean as well as healthy. Hence, were not to be consumed in time, a great deal of organic food will be wasted.

To conclude, although organic products are beneficial in terms of the environment's and our well-being, they still post certain problems.
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Nov 7, 2021   #2
There is a time reference confusion in the first paragraph.

Nowadays

refers to most recent events over the past week.

past few years

refers to the past 2 or 3 years. The writer should use a definite reference to time only once. It will be better to use the reference "nowadays" then end the definite statement with a period after "popularity". It creates a more confident statement.

However, that paragraph still suffers from an over- generalization as it claims that "all consumers" have started buying organic food. Since not all food shoppers have done so, the statement must indicate such a seperation through the use of hedging words such as "some people" or" a number of consumers". Over - generalization has the same meaning altering effect as an exaggeration.

The first reason is good in terms of reasoning but does not do well in terms of supporting examples. The positive effects of organic farming need to be seen through publicly known beneficial examples. Offer evidence that your claims have a real world basis. The second reasoning paragraph is a bit better explained with commonly known evidence. The last part of that paragraph though, it suffers from clarity issues due to improper sentence development. The subject is missing from the result.

An advantage v. disadvantage essay does not require a personal opinion.Therefore the concluding summary presentation is improper as it offers an unsolicited opinion. This will be the source of a heavy final score deduction. By the way, always write more than 40 words for this portion for it to qualify for a score.


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