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Advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont Island - chart summary

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Apr 22, 2017   #1
The pie charts show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont Island, according to a survey of visitors.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

tourists' survey

The given pie charts provide the results of a survey of tourists in regard with the benefits and the drawbacks of Fairmont Island.

First and foremost, as for the positive aspects, it is showed that a high proportion of visitors consider the resident people (at 40%) and the scenery (at 37%) the most important advantages of this tourist destination. Whereas, an almost equal number of sightseers are pleased with the accommodation and the culture (12% and 11% respectively).

On the other hand, considering the downsides, it is illustrated that a frequent criticism is for the high cost of living in Fairmont Island (comprising of just under half of tourists). Moreover, a third and a fifth of visitors judge as negative aspects the entertainment and the weather, while the remaining 5% is disappointed with the local food.

Overall, it is clearly indicated that the main factors influencing the tourist attraction in Fairmont Island are the local population and the scenery, conversely, a considerable percentage of travelers consider the high cost of living the main disadvantage.

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Apr 22, 2017   #2
Micol, for consistency, please always indicate the percentage throughout your presentation rather than saying "half, a third, a fifth". The actual mention of the percentage shows a clearer analytical practice on your part when compared to the ballpark figure type of presentation as this indicates you are guessing the figures of the data when the pie charts show otherwise. Remember, you are judged greatly on your analytical abilities in the Task 1 essay so you need to develop that work further. Additionally, you need to improve your overview statement at the start of the essay. Make sure to present a clear overview and outline of the upcoming discussion by indicating the topics rather than offering actual information based on the data provided. Overall, this is a pretty good writing job that will probably score a 6 at the most in an actual setting.

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