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Advantages and disadvantages of being famous


SleepingBeauty 1 / -  
Nov 4, 2013   #1
Nowadays, being famous is something that most of people wish. When I was a child, I dreamed with being a person who everybody can recognise and feel excited to see, such as a model or actress. But the famous lifestyle has as many advantages as disadvantages.

On the one hand, if you are a celebrity, you travel around the world knowing an assortment of cultures and societies. In addition, everywhere you go, i'm sure that you will receive a better attention than an ordinary person. Moreover, celebrities earn a lot of money can buying whatever they want.

On the other hand, there are several disadvantages, you can't go peaceful anywhere because paparazzis are waiting for take hundreds of photos, so you should be protected by bodyguards. Another disadvantage is that you have no time to spend with loved persons, you lack of private life owing to people are constantly judging everything you do. Sometimes newspapers, magazines and other kind of medias invent gossips about you.

In my view, being famous might be awesome but it is difficult to live with,and it doesn't compensate all those disadvantages. Although, there are persons who are famous and take all with calm.
awesome_chicka 1 / 1  
Nov 4, 2013   #2
CORRECTION: On the one hand, if you are a celebrity, you travel around the world knowing an assortment of cultures and societies. In addition, everywhere you go, I AM sure that you will receive a better attention than an ordinary person. Moreover, celebrities earn a lot of money can BUY whatever they want.

Also, try not to use contractions such as "can't" and "don't", instead write out the whole world: "cannot" and "do not"
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Nov 4, 2013   #3
What is the prompt? Are you preparing for TOEFL or IELTS? It's good if you mentioned them because then we can have our comments more aligned with your prompt.

.... you can't go peacefully anywhere because paparazzis are waiting for take hundreds of photos because you are famous.

On the other hand, there are several disadvantages, you can't go peaceful anywhere because paparazzis are waiting for take hundreds of photos, so you should be protected by bodyguards

.... what is the actual reason here? It is that your privacy is disturbed and you've got to mention that in this sentence because it should be the focus in your sentence.

On the other hand, there are several disadvantages attached to being a celebrity. The most important disadvantage is that celebrities have very little privacy as they are often chased by paparazzi.


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