IELTS TASK 2: The advantages and disadvantages of such flights and the taxed more in the flights

The world has been an enormous increase in flight for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights?. Do you think flights should be taxed more?

The alternative trip shows that air transportation rose gradually to use in the myriad destination of the world. While, the type of transportation airplane more faster to arrive in another place so the rule can change to enhance the tax, the another situation that the facilities not enough good for customer and contrast if the tax expensive. I believe the best situation when the system can improve tax with the great responsibility.

The technology of transportation renders easy way for making an excursion. There is an important part to help the myriad people with their purpose for meet someone or another purpose for working in there with faster. It is the real fact since the airplane flights in the air without traffic jam. In my experience, one year ago that I just need 30 minutes from my city to move to another city to meet my family in there. I prefer to choose this transportation since efficient of time. The best condition if the rule appropriates in the flexibility this transportation

The circumstance that the several stuff air transportation has problem. It has since technology still developed so that the aircraft some time ever crash in the road. In my country ever one of the accident airplane in Makasar city. The airplane lost contact so that the whole people died with destroyed the aircraft. The drawback air transportation needs to concern so that the part of tax more will be good choice for myriad people

The journey is the best to use air transportation when myriad people tend to fast destination so that airplane has many flights in all of the time schedule. I believe that the tax must be cheap for helping many people choose this transportation than the other choice

While, the type of transportation airplane more faster to arrive in another place so the rule can change to enhance the tax, the another situation that the facilities not enough good for customer and contrast if the tax expensive.I believe the best situation when the system can improve tax with the great responsibility.

It would be better if you write it like this.

faster
place, so
can be changed
the other reason is low quality product, and it is not suitable for the expensive tax
I believe that...

While, the type of transportation airplane more faster to arrive in another place so the rule can change ...

Change word "while" to be "Meanwhile"
it is much better if you put Meanwhile in the beginning of sentence

more faster,,
there is no more faster in English ...
you my use



that confusing sentence


there is not verb in this sentence... make sure you put Verb each sentence ,, since this play pivotal role for sentence