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Advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world? (ielts writing)


Sonny Tran 2 / 3  
Dec 8, 2021   #1

The global language



One can subscribe to the notion that people will use English as the only language in the world because of its ubiquitous usage. To a certain extent, although I agree that this will promote economy and understanding, I also think that there will be some drawbacks.

On the one hand, there are several shreds of evidence why having one global language is beneficial. One of the primary ones is a good economy. In other words, when everybody all uses one language, trading and doing business will be easier since numerous barriers will be taken down. Another reason that a single linguistic will be advantageous is that it will help people understand each other. To be specific, communicating and understanding information will no longer be a problem, and therefore it will push learning among students.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages of one language that individuals should take into consideration. First and foremost, it would mean that millions of other linguistic teachers will lose their jobs as everyone only have to study one language in the curriculum system. Secondly, it will result in the collapse of cultures. Traditions and customs are one of the joys that the world has to offer. As a result, they will eventually disappear when only one language is left.

In conclusion, while there are plus points to having one global language, too much will be lost as a result. Maintaining local languages and cultures should be prioritized to ensure a rich world heritage for future generations.



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Dec 8, 2021   #2
although I agree that this will promote economy and understanding, I also think that there will be some drawbacks.

Incorrect response. You are not being asked to give an opinion on the topic. You are asked to provide a general discussion regarding the advantages and disadvantages of English as the dominant world language. Provide one advantage and one disadvantage topic, completely avoiding any personal opinion since it is not required in the prompt. Do not alter the prompt discussion requirement. That will result in score deductions as your restatement + opinion paragraph is no longer related to the original presentation. Do not add information to this part for any reason.

several shreds of evidence

You are using this phrase out of context. Do not use English slang in reference to a formal and academic discussion. You must use an academic tone and avoid exaggerated references, such as this slang phrase. It does not have any place in academic writing.

millions of other linguistic teachers

Stop exaggerating. The examiners do not appreciate stretching the truth or over emphasizing information in the essays. This shows a lack of academic writing ability on the part of the student. The sense of logic in your writing disappears and the examiner is left with a piece of writing that lacks common sense discussion points.

Maintaining local languages and cultures should be prioritized to ensure a rich world heritage for future generations.

Another prompt deviation. You are 3 for 3 in terms of severe deductions for this writing. Add to that the lack of proper sentence formation in the conclusion, which is 3-5 sentences or 2 sentences of at least 40 words and you will understand why this is not going to get a high score during an actual setting. Most specially since you have a habit of adding unimportant or non prompt related discussion points in certain aspects of this essay.


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