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Advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity; Laos, Mekong river


tvisva 1 / 2  
Mar 17, 2013   #1
Now days people become aware of decreasing in the travel expenses of the international travelling and this has positive impact on the tourism industry,it is a trend without drawbacks.Both positive and negative impact of the increasing tourism activity will be discussed in this essay.

Tourism industry is playing a important part in different countries in term of social economy.Firstly,a host countries will benefit in term of currency exchange rate thus has a positive impact on the locals whether directly or indirectly.Increase of the tourist arrival also will create thousands of job and business opportunity for the local peoples.

Some countries now days spend quite a lot of money to promote their country as the holiday destination and become on of the main GDP income.

Due to the booming of the industry,The local government building new and better infrastructure to support the industry and it has benefited the locals most.

Secondly,International travelling also is a way where different cultures meet.For example,Country like Laos their second GDP income comes from tourism industry.
They are taking advantages of the Mekong river to promote as tourist holiday destination.In the past the local lived near mekong river used to be self sufficient and depends on agriculture and fishing industry as their main source of income.Now days because of the tourist arrival,They have another source of income which comes from tourism.

fisherman along the mekong river convert their fishing boat as water taxis to bring tourist for river cruising.The local live-hood has become better due to the increase of the tourist arrival.

However tourism industry has negative impact on the environment,both natural and man made.Take mekong river for instance,it used to well known for fishing industry and clean water source for the surrounding areas.The river is polluted due to local government allowing hotels to build near the riverbank that causing the soil erosion and the waste is discharge into the river.

In conclusion,Tourism could very important for developing countries,However the increasing of the tourism activities could damage the environment.From my point of view,the local governments should set up strict guide lines to maintain healthy tourism industry.

Please provide me some feedback on my essay.Thanks

x6karebear9o 3 / 7 1  
Mar 17, 2013   #2
Nowa days, people are becoming more aware of the decrease in the travel expenses of the international travelling.and This has resulted in a positive impact on the tourism industry. I t is a trend without drawbacks. Both positive and negative impacts of the increasing tourism activity will be discussed in this essay.

The tourism industry is playing an important partrole in different countries' in term of social economy. Firstly , a host countriescountry will benefit in terms of currency exchange rate,thushastherefore it will have a positive impact on the locals, whether either directly or indirectly.Increase of the tourist arrivalThe increase in the arrival of touristsalso will create thousands of job and business opportunity for the local peoples.

Some countriesnations nowa days spend quite a lot of money to promotepromoting their country as thea holiday destination spot and this becomes one of the main sources of GDP income.

Due to the booming of the industry, the local government building new and better infrastructure to support the industry and it has benefited the locals most. (did not understand this sentence)

Secondly,International travelling also is a way wherefor different cultures meetto interact . For example, Country like Laos their second GDP income comes from tourism industry. (how is this a direct example of different cultures interacting?)

They are taking advantages of the Mekong river to promote as tourist holiday destination.In the past the local lived near mekong river used to be self sufficient and depends on agriculture and fishing industry as their main source of income.Now days because of the tourist arrival,They have another source of income which comes from tourism.

fisherman along the mekong river convert their fishing boat as water taxis to bring tourist for river cruising.The local live-hood has become better due to the increase of the tourist arrival.

The previous paragraph might read better as follows:
Second,international travel is another way for different cultures to interact. For example, the country of Laos is taking advantage of the abundance of the Mekong river and promoting it as a tourist destination. In the past, the locals living near the Mekong River used to be self-sufficient and depended on agriculture and the fishing industry as their main source of income. The fisherman along the Mekong River convert their fishing boats into water taxis and guide tourists on river cruises. Nowadays, because of the increase in tourism, the locals have an additional source of income. The second GDP income for Laos comes from the tourism industry.


However, the tourism industry has negative impacts on the environment.,both natural and man made.For example,Takethe Mekong River for instance,it used to be well known for its fishing industry and was a clean water source for the surrounding areas. Now, the river is polluted due to the local government allowing hotels to bebuildbuilt near the riverbank. These hotels causethat causing the soil erosion and the waste is discharged into the river.

In conclusion, Tourism couldmay be very important for developing countries, Howeverbut the increasingeofin the tourist activities could damage the environment. From my point of view, the local governments should set up strict guide lines to maintain healthya more efficient and sustainable tourism industry.

Please provide me some feedback on my essay.Thanks
OP tvisva 1 / 2  
Mar 18, 2013   #3
Thank you for the feedback
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 18, 2013   #4
Now days people become aware of decreasing in the travel expenses of the international travelling and this has positive impact on the tourism industry,it is a trend without drawbacks.

In conclusion,Tourism could very important for developing countries,However the increasing of the tourism activities could damage the environment.

Well... these two lines sound contradictory to one another. If you take a moderate stance then you better express that in the introduction itself.

Tourism industry is playing a important part in different countries in terms of their social andeconomy economic development

... well ...tourism contributes a lot for the economy and its effects on social factor are somewhat questionable. In fact this topic is also based on that.

in terms of currency

peoples

.... the correct word is " people" which is already a plural word meaning a collection of persons.

Firstly, a host countries will benefit in term of currency exchange rate thus has a positive impact on the locals whether directly or indirectly.

.... there are many economic benefits to the host country that are more prominent than the exchange rate profits. There is a direct income generating from tourists by selling them accommodation, places of attraction, food and beverages etc.
OP tvisva 1 / 2  
Mar 18, 2013   #5
hi Dumi,
Thanks for the feedback.


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