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IELTS Task 2: advantages and disadvantages of working mother


tiaDS 73 / 236 52  
Feb 23, 2014   #1
In some countries, it is common for women to find a job when their children are young. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Throughout the world, working mother is a phenomenon in the several countries. Many women become working mothers when the children are still young. This is occurring, because of growing economical pressure, personal preference and so forth. In this day and age, women are not restricted to be homemaker as compared to the past. There are the merits and the demerits which are being discuss in this essay.

For some people, there are some demerits of mother working which is giving bad impacts for developing children psychology. Firstly, children and their mothers seem to be less close nowadays. It is because mother spends less time with their children and working mother often works full time. As a result, children do not have enough time to share about their problems in school or about themselves. Secondly, children attempt to get affection, so children are more closely with their nannies of babysitters than their mother. Take one example in the dinner time, most of working mothers cannot serve the healthy meals for their children and family, not only meals but also an attention to keep warm the atmosphere at home. In the other way, youngsters spend more time with friends or surfing the internet to get well-being.

While some people critic claim that mother working has disadvantages for children, so I tend to say that working mother has some advantages for children and her family. First of all, there are many reasons why mothers choose to work when their children are still young. The first reason is cost of living which is more expensive in several countries. The second reason, women have the same opportunity to take place at managerial level in global company, because most of women are well-educated and well-qualified people recently. Moreover, mother working can give a contribution to pay basic needs in daily activity and education their children. Also, her salary becomes income to guarantee children living in as a wealthy people and working mother still can keep contact as deep as direct contact with mobile phone.

If we compare the condition in the past and nowadays is quite different. Long time ago the cost of living was cheaper than the cost of living at this time, so in the past only husband who held a responsibility to be breadwinner. However, recently the condition is the reverse where mothers also play an essential role in family to earn much money.

In conclusion, mother working will create advantages and disadvantages effect which will appear if they cannot divide the balance time between working and bring up their children.

agi 13 / 31 4  
Feb 23, 2014   #2
hi, buddy,

i want to give your few advise, fist, there are around more than 4 hundred words. You should not exceed than 3 hundred words. I think you should abbreviated your sentences to few comprehensive and meaningful sentence.
dumi 1 / 6,948 1592  
Feb 24, 2014   #3
Throughout the world, working mother is a phenomenon in the several countries.

... hey, this makes us confusing :D .... I mean "throughout the world" and "several countries"

Many women become working mothers when the children are still young.

You should have polished this idea a little bit for your hook and left out the above sentence;
Today, many women have become working mothers.

i want to give your few advise, fist, there are around more than 4 hundred words. You should not exceed than 3 hundred words. I think you should abbreviated your sentences to few comprehensive and meaningful sentence.

Although there are no ceiling on the maximum word count (you can go upto even 1000 words if time permits :D ) I think agi has got a good point. You need to handle time efficiently and hence you should limit your writing only to the essential ideas. Otherwise you would not be able to complete your essay within the time allocated for this task :(
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,210 459  
Feb 26, 2014   #4
If we compare the condition in the past and nowadays is quite different.

I prefer to place all or part of the main sentence at the end of the sentence. Like this:Comparing to the past era, today's life is quite different. This focuses on the reader's attention on the complexity, rather than the simplicity, in this way address the essay's topic.
anselzhang 4 / 5  
Feb 26, 2014   #5
in the several countries
Pahan 1 / 1,932 553  
Feb 27, 2014   #6
There are the merits and the demerits which are being discuss in this essay. .... the reader anyway expects you to do that and there is no point in repeating that in your intro.

For some people, there are some demerits of mother working which is giving bad impacts for developing children psychology.

... you should improve the presentation of this idea;
There are some disadvantages of having working mothers. First, mothers working full time outside home may affect negatively on their children's emotional and physical development. For example, in the families where there are working mothers, there are certain limitations to build close bonds between parents and children
ehaforyou 3 / 6  
Feb 27, 2014   #7
Long time ago the cost of living was cheaper than the cost of living at this time, so in the past only husband who held a responsibility to be breadwinner.

Long time ago the cost of living was far much cheaper. so only the husband who held a responsibility to breadwinner.


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