Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. - That is the topic
Any kind of help and advice in order to improve my writing, will be highly appreciate.
Nowadays, we live in a technological era, which provides numerous opportunities for the companies to promote their products. The advetising is all arounds us and while many people believe it is a good thing, many other argue that the advertising has rather negative effect on out society.In one way, the advertising educates us and ease our decision making process, but on the other hand it can be annoying and confusing.
We all know the feeling, when we are at the supermarket, unable to choose from the deviersity of available products. In these situations, the advertising helps us by providing additional information about the products in order to make our decisions easier. Moreover, they educate us to understand the consequesnces which will follow the purchase of particular good. Even though the advertisments are helpful, they can often create confusion into the customers.
Everybody has experienced the situation, when you are watching your favourite movie and it is interupted by an annoying add. In addition to this, the advertisments can often not corresopond to the reality and sometimes even abuse some of the viewers. Also, very often the advertisments invide our privacy, because they are simply everywhere - on the internet, on the streets and sometimes even in our workpalces.
In my opinion, the advertising is an important part of our lives. They are vital, because without them we will be unable to choose, which is the most suitable products or service for our needs.But, at the same time - the goverments need to set strict rules in order to cease the practise of interupting our privacies by the marketing companies .
Hi Lola
here some suggestions for your writing
technological era, which provides numerous (No need comma)
many other people argue that the advertising
effect on outour society
from the deviersitydiversity of available
It is much better in your body, firstly you provide your topic sentence then example after your supporting details. (it shows in Body 1, you mention your example first, so does your body 2)
Everybody has experienced the situation, when ... (you is not suitable subject here since you refer to everybody)
You did not write down your conclusion, it is only your own opinion not conclusion.
Dear Lola, here some advices from me and feel free to correct me too!
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Regards
Hi @Lola12,
Here some corrections on your essay:
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... unable to choose from the deviersitydiversity of available products.
... to understand the consequesncesconsequences which will follow ...
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