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Age discrimination occurs when a decision is made on the basis of a person's age.


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May 28, 2015   #1
Human health needs nutritious foods and medical care. If a human being do not take balance food he would not get immunization power. In other words, human beings with malnutrition is attacked by various diseases. For example, people who do not eat enough green vegetables suffer from eye diseases. Likewise, we get protein, vitamin, and carbohydrate from food intake. To get such substances we should include those grains in our daily meal which consist these things.

It is true that living long life depends on good food and medical care. Nowadays, because of medical advancement, the number of aged people is increasing. According to experts, aging is positive indicators of development. Healthy people contribute to nation as a manpower. Either physically fit people can be trained for the technical jobs. Additionally, in school age people, physically fit children acquire merits in their study.

In contrast, aging people consider as burden for society. When they become old, need care giver to them. It incurs additional cost to family. For instance, an economically active person leave his job so that he can care his physically disable family member. Aging people often require medical care in comparison to younger people. That is why, government tend to increase expenses in medical care.

In conclusion, as nation move to economic development people get long life. Developed country provides health benefits, subsidies for nutritious foods and so on. Consequently, life expectancy of the people increase.
Anfalia 40 / 56 23  
May 29, 2015   #2
Hello, allow me to give you some feedback on your writing.
1. you need to include the topic of your writing? it will be hard to focus on particular topic if you do not mention so
2. identify your essay into each paragraph

Human health needs nutritious foods and medical care. If a human being do not take a balance fooddiet he would not get immunization power. In other words, human beings with malnutrition is attacked by various diseases. For example, people who do not eat enough green vegetables suffer from eye diseases. Likewise, we get protein, vitamin, and carbohydrate from food intake. To get such substances we should include those grains in our daily meal which consistsof these things.

Let me ask you, is this free essay/academic writing/ielts task 2? I'll help you more if I know the topic. Thank you
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May 29, 2015   #3
I am writing for IELTS task 2 , and for PTE as well.


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