Your tone should be set for report writing and therefore it should have a more formal presentation. For example;
Beside that the rise of Japan more remarkable than the USA and Sweden.
.... the word "remarkable" does not help you maintain a reporting style. Also this sentence fails to deliver a logical reason. This is what I suggest;
Japan is expected to record the highest proportion level of aged population by 2040 exceeding the levels of the USA and Sweden by 5% and 2.5% respectively.With only 5 percent from the begining of the observeobservation
In conclusion, the chart distingiush surpassing of Janpan to the USA and Sweden to occupy the first place in the people aged 65 and over.
.... "distinguish" makes this sentence questionable as to what you try to mean. You need to re-phrase your conclusion.
p/s: the first time i've posted so hope you guys help me to improve my writing skill.
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