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Do you Agree or disagree that celebrities are paid far too much money ? Give reasons for your answer

Amy Tran 2 / 2  
Apr 15, 2020   #1

Big wealth of famous celebrities

Entertainment is significian in life ,so famous people such ac singers ,actors,models who benefit from this field.It is argument that they are paid far too much money .In my opinion, I tend to agree that they deserve a high salary for their delication and effort.

First of all,as other professions,celebritieshave to give a lot of time and relentless training effortin the hopes of shinning in the limelight .For example,, Korean trainees who spent many years efforting against thounsands of ones ro reserve a debut .Secondly,not everyone has a rich artistic talent that has to go through the process of harsh training ,so that thay can compete in a fast-firing work environment. Therefore,They absolutely deserve be paid a high income for their efforts.

Another argument in favor of paying a lot of money for the jobs which helps decuation and healthof community .In fact, Professtions such as teachers,doctors,engineers who have a more stable salary than well-known people.Because they do not have retirement pensions then they get older and the amount of money they receive depends on the numberof stickets sold each concert and profit from the music product .While the the new celebrities just appear and the old ones have to try their best to bring the quality end trendy goods in order to maintain their social position.It is undeniable that famous people are influencers who have power in media community to join them and their fans together to help the disadvantages or donate charitable funds.Futher more,the spiritual contributions of celebrities not only help us to relax but also inspire the dynamic.

In conclusion,I belive that celebrities appropriate be paid far much money for their dedication.Because every occupations are equal,no job is more noble than any one,as long as they work true
hoimin2399 1 / 1  
Apr 15, 2020   #2
Entertainment is significian-->\significance\ in life ,\ remove commas\so famous people such ac\as\ singers...
it is believed that ......
Try to present related ideas in the paragraphs that can be tied together using proper examples and reasoning sentences.and i think you should get topic beforereason .
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Apr 16, 2020   #3
You are not taking the test seriously. You are not being careful with your grammar, your punctuation marks, your spelling, your sentence formations... The list just goes on and on. This is the work of a student who is not interested in passing the IELTS test. I cannot even begin to correct your errors because, frankly speaking, the only 2 parts you got right was that you presented a single opinion in the essay and you defended your stance within the given reasoning presentation paragraphs. However, the lack of care with the development of the ideas, the presentation of the ideas, and the overall lack of content review, presentation editing, and final touch ups to the presentation, will all combine to make you fail this test. Since you are most likely going to take the typing test at the center, the only advice I can give you is this:

Review your grammar rules, double check your spelling, ensure you have proper spacing between words, and make sure that every sentence you write is properly formatted. You are failing because you are lazy and haphazard in your writing style. The way your wrote this essay tells the examiner that you just wanted to get the test over with, not that you wanted to pass the test.

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