Agree/ Disagree -Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program

Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is an obvious fact that financial aspect is an important part of the daily life, as an adult and even as a young individual. Every one of us has to make financial decision to spend money for vital needs such as food, clothes, home and more. The question is whether to start with financial education as part of school program or to postpone it for a later stage in life. For me, I support this idea that financial education for teenagers is necessary.

In Vietnam, many students have to learn far from home. Every month, they receive a limited allowance from their family. If they are trained about finance, they will consider to spent money reasonably. Which demand is really necessary and which isn't. People who are without financial knowledge will spend money freely. So maybe they buy something mostly worthless. Further more, they are easily in debt.

In addition, finance should be subject in school curriculum. During the course or after graduate, many young people begin trading in something. However, most of them are lacking capability of financial analysis. Commonly, the reason can be the lack of good foundations or not take in mean of financial terms. Therefore, starting from an early age, building a strong background, can very likely reduce risks in their business.

In conclusion, I agree that financial education should equip in school. However, preparing knowledge about finance should include awareness of real value of services and merchandise, otherwise it will make them so considerate and gradually become miserly.

I feel this sentence provides a better hook for your essay. So, you should have opened the essay with this line.


This is a very general topic and when you provide reasons to justify your opinion, you should not narrow down your scope. Give the reason in general context and then give a specific example to support that reason. In your example you can narrow it down to Vietnam. For example;

First, in this globalized world, children often have to stay away from their parents for educational reasons. In such situations, a prior knowledge in handling their own finances is a great benefit. For example, many students in Vietnam study in cities that are far away from their homes.

It would be better if you could provide us with the full prompt of the essay. Does the prompt mention the particular level of education?


Deep understanding of finance will help them manage their money wisely and give priority to demands of real importance.


who lack


finance should be included in


after graduation


This is not clear. What are they trading and why?


I feel that these two sentences depict the same meaning. This won't add more value to your paragraph.


should be equipped


It is more like another idea that you haven't stated in your essay.
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