after I read your writing, I want to ask you some questions:
1. It is IELTS writing task 2, as far as I know, we should write at least 250 words, why you just write by 243 words ?
2. is that the complete question?
A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
3. I found that you write 2 verbs (do and want), is the word 'want' as a noun ?
This process starts with preschool all the way to grade 12, where we already have formed our own criterion and have an idea on which role we [do want] to play during the rest of our productive lives, whether we decide to continue through college or simply choose a different path.
4. I though that you write 2 subjects, we and humans, I suggest you write We as
[We humans] are very different individuals as we all have our own very particular skills and capabilities, such as our own way of learning, our own way to perceive and express things.
I hope you can help me to answer my questions,CMIIW