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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Watching television is bad


umanga 1 / 1  
Oct 27, 2013   #1
In the short span of almost two century the world has changed from the wood age to the towards modern scientific age.In this time alot of invention took place and one of the most important one is telivison. As also debate goes pass by pass that television is good for student or not.And I strongly disagree with the above statement.

I think I would probably not be wrong If I say that Television is the major cause for making people unsociable.Watching television is just the waste of the time as instead of watching the television you could read the novels to boost your vocabulary,play games for your physical fitness or help your parents in the different household purposes or do some part time jobs so you could earn some pocket money for the expenditure.

Students are the one who always are in the lack of the time as they have to complete a lot of assignments and make their notes and watching television for them causes them the misuse of the time.Even though their are few channels like Discovery,National geographic which give proper education but their are alot of the channels which shows pronography,horror action and other drammas which causes only the reason for the unsociable and only the cause of waste and waste of time.Also in the South Asia we can get a lot of the cases that watching of television causes in the proper care of the babies also.

As in my opinion watching television is only the waste of the time

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 31, 2013   #2
In the short span of almost two century the world has changed from the wood age to the towards modern scientific age.

This has several mistakes and also not a strong hook that can grab reader's attention.
Shinigami97 10 / 16 1  
Oct 31, 2013   #3
You used repetitive words " Waste " " Waste of the time " "causes " "watching television "

Instead you can improve your writing by changing them into different synonyms and paraphrase them into a new sentence structure for not repeating the same words.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Oct 31, 2013   #4
I think I would probably not be wrong If I say that Television is the major cause for making people unsociable...

Ok, here the reason you give is that TV makes people unsociable. Then you should tell them how does it happen and your examples must confirm the validity of the reason. You say TV makes people unsociable and it is better for them to read books. How can reading books make people sociable? It is again an activity that does not contribute anything in the direction of socializing. So, you need to concentrate on the reason you use to justify your position on the arguments and give examples to support that reason. That is what you are expected to do in the body paragraphs.


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