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Do you agree or disagree? People should read only real books.

ilaha 2 / 2  
Jun 11, 2014   #1
There are so many books that write about fictional events or persons. I think that all of these aren't beneficial for people. Everyone should to read about more realistic books. I can prove my idea by some reasons.

Firstly, realistic books teach us more about real life situations. Because in these we can find any life situation. Every author of these books tries to criticize each of life events by their own methods. So we can learn about life from these books. Because they not only show us real life situations but also give us chance to see these situations by eyes of professionals, educated persons. So we can see thinks of specialists who can clarify all of these events by specific way.

Secondly these books help us to be more realistic. Nowadays most of people live with wishes. Some of them don't care about their surrounding, their position in society. These kinds of books can help them to be more realistic. People can learn more from these books about don't take bigger aims than their potential, don't wish about unreal events.

As a conclusion people should to read that kind of books which can teach them more about life. So they can make it one of their instruments that help to improve their personality.

I prepare for TOEFL and i need someone who can evaluate my essay
Hang Le 2 / 6 1  
Jun 11, 2014   #2
too many simple sentences in your essay. That's my opinion
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 11, 2014   #3
Please use the following structure for writing an essay (an "agree or disagree" one):
1. Introduction: Motivator+ thesis statement+ your own opinion (either agree or disagree)+ blueprint
2. Body paragraph 1 (Topic sentence, including general and precise ideas + one supporting sentence, which can be an example, statistics, quotations, a study conducted by a researcher, etc.)

3. Body paragraph 2
4. Conclusion: reword the topic or the first paragraph+ ending statement or clincher

For other types of topics different structures are suggested, but first start with this type.
Read as many texts as possible to improve your grammar and vocabulary.

Hope this helps.
Good luck,
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Jun 12, 2014   #4
Well, I see that you need more work for the punctuation. Also, every time opening a new paragraph, I suggest you to leave one space as to be readable. Another point is to write your prompt completely as to earn a good feedback. In the bodies of paragraph, you'd better raise one real example to support the topic sentence. Thanks.
OP ilaha 2 / 2  
Jul 3, 2014   #5
I m very thankfull. But i couldn't understand anyway what you mean by saying i repeat myself. Can you explain it if you have time?

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