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IELTS Writing Task 2 - Agreement or Disagreement of Saving Money Rather Than Paying Tax


Aug 18, 2016   #1
People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer

People who are being workers want to save their earnings for living on. Some of them suggest that they do not have to pay their salaries' duty to their country. Based on that, I do not agree that people especially workers should keep their money and not paying the taxes.

First of all, many people like to work for earning money as much as they want. They want to keep theirs for their future life or just for their living on currently. Indeed, most of them do not want to do their responsibilities to pay the taxes to the states that paid them. They think that they do not have to because they have already taken pains for their country. However, it is just one of their reasons to exempt from the obligation of paying taxes.

On the other hand, the country has already paid for their efforts. Moreover, the tax payment is for the society's concerns in the state. Especially for the workers who work for their country such as civil servants, they might pay the taxes from their salary. It must be done because it is for themselves and for their families' necessary. The taxes that come from their salary's reduction can be used for medical and education cost even for life insurance. Thus, paying taxes will give many benefits for them who paid it.

From the reason mentioned above, I truly believe that people especially workers should pay the tax and do not have to store all of their money. Paying taxes that is done by workers will be worthwhile for themselves. Instead of keeping all of their earnings, it will be better to pay tax because they can get much profit rather than just saving.

Beatrice96 2 / 5  
Aug 18, 2016   #2
People who are being (people who work is the same as workers, so this is tautology) workers want to ...
bung ilham 14 / 30  
Aug 19, 2016   #3
aloha Faizatin, below are my suggestions for you:

1st paragraph

People who are being the workers want to save their earnings for living on . Some of themthe workers suggest that they do not have to pay ...

Based on that, I do not agreedisagree that people especially workers should keep their money and not paying the taxes.

2nd and 3rd paragraph

I have found no clear reason why you disagree for the statement. one example reason is that paying the tax could help education system more developed or something like that. in this main point, you should assert your statement to make readers understand what you wrote down your essay.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Aug 19, 2016   #4
Hi Faiza, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website to be helpful and valuable to your writing reference, we strive to provide you with the most accurate feedback and review, in order for you to feel confident in submitting your project.

Moving forward,I immediately notice the need to reconstruct most of your sentences, so here we go;

- Working peoplewho are being workers want to save their
- earnings for livingto live on.
- Some of them suggest that they do not have to pay their salaries'tax duty
- Based onHaving said that,
- and not paying the taxes.

- First of all, many people like to work for earning money
- theirssalary for their future life or
- just for their living on currentlyto live comfortably .
- taken pains for theirpart of the countries painscountry .
- However, it is just one of theirthe reasons to
- exempt them from the obligation of paying taxes.

There you have it Faiza, as you can see, there's quiet a lot of modifications to be done for your essay, however, everything can be learned, so don't stop practicing and honing your skills in writing, having said that, I left the rest of the essay, for you to practice editing your essay yourself.


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