Alaa Murabit was nominated to address the UN General Assembly including the Commission on the Status of Women, and was nominated to address the UN Secure she works to amplify the voices of women and to highlight experiences and participation in peace processes and conflict resolution, and she recognizes that the only way to ensure the full participation of women globally was by reclaiming religion.
As a young Muslim woman, she very proud of her faith. It gives her the strength and conviction to do her work every day. Initially, she focused on the economic and political empowerment of women. She thought that would lead to cultural and social change. In 2012 and 2013, her organization led the single largest and most widespread campaign in Libya. She entered homes and schools and universities, even mosques. She discussed taboo issues, like domestic violence. She spoke to 50,000 people directly, and hundreds of thousands more through television commercials, radio commercials, and posters.
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