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America's ignorance towards Pakistan supported terrorism.


kshinu 1 / 1  
May 29, 2011   #1
America is known as least tolerating nation when it comes on its personal security concern . We have lots of example to prove this weather its saddam hussain to the very latest osama killing.They ruin the whole country for just one attack on them or even of the suspicion of an attack like Iraq where they thought that WMD's are under construction. But when the case of a country like Pakistan emerge why this least tolerating nation is handcuffed. Is this because Pakistan is an eternal part of their foreign strategy. Is this because Pakistan is in touch of all the three nation which can be the possible threat for america in near future. But there is an old saying that'if your neighbour's house is on fire and you are silent ,then next turn is yours'

Recent development have shown that if middle east is financial hub of terrorism then Pakistan is the man force provider for them. Pakistan secret agency is involve in a brutal mass killing in India as confessed by main accused of the attack in an American court. Pakistan had provided shelter to most wanted man on earth for near a decade. There are possible threat that alleged Pakistan supported terrorism is in direct reach of there nuke power and its not impossible as the man behind there nuke makeover abdul qadir khan confessed regarding a meeting with LET chief.Now if America is thinking that Pakistan supported terrorist even if get nuke power is not a threat for us then they should understand that taliban is the major body of terrorist in the world and have a strong foothold in every such organisation.A nation like Pakistan which on one hand shows serious concern towards terrorism and secretly do whatever it takes to help them in every way. America should work on a all round attack on terrorism if they want it to end it completely. Any serious disease should be ended with every trace other wise the disease can come back anytime.

Guys this is my first essay ...plz give honest responses
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 30, 2011   #2
America is known as the least tolerant nation when it comes to its personal security concerns.----Is this the right way to correct the sentence? America is least tolerant of what?

weather = rain and snow
whether - whether or not

We have lots of examples to prove whether its saddam hussain to the very latest osama killing.---To prove what? I'm not sure how to correct it...

Be sure to capitalize the names of the people! i.e. Osama and Saddam

They ruin the whole country for just one attack on them or even of the suspicion of an attack like Iraq where they thought that WMD's are were under construction.

But when the case of a country like Pakistan emerges why is this least tolerant nation so handcuffed?

Is this because Pakistan is an eternal part of their foreign strategy?-------Yes, same as Egypt, I think. We Americans are looking out for ourselves before we look out for anyone else, I think. I hope America and all the other dangerous nations can support one another instead of hurting one another!

Is this because Pakistan is in touch of all the three nation which can be the possible threat for america America in near future?---I am adding question marks to your interrogative sentences.

But there is an old saying that'if your neighbour's house is on fire and you are silent ,then next turn is yours.'

Recent developments have...

Pakistan's secret agency is involved in a brutal mass killing in India as confessed by a man accused of the attack in an American court.

Pakistan had provided shelter to most wanted man on earth for nearly a decade.---nearly

America should work on a all round attack on terrorism if they want it to end it completely. ---This is a well-constructed sentence.

This is a very interesting essay, friend!!

:-)
ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
May 31, 2011   #3
Hi Kevin,
thanks for responding to this essay... I would say that there r two ways of criticism- constructive and sarcastic ( negative). In this essay I find that their is too much negative criticism about the American foreign policy...however when we are in an international forum, we should restrain from making too much aggressive remarks about any specific country, religion, race, caste etc.

- to be clear, I would say that their is always a sweet way to criticise or question anything... the calmness, respect (even for your foes) and politeness should be reflected in any author's writings n thats what a good writer should do. literature, books,novels, paintings and all other artistic forms should not be making controversial remarks or depictions.

- try to be polite in this essay n just know that there are many countries who have very weird forgien policy...its all about diplomacy and politics.- which i personally wish to keep a distance from.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 31, 2011   #4
too much negative criticism about the American foreign policy

Well, maybe, maybe now. I am an American, so I tend to feel like it is important to criticize American policy as much as possible! That's what Americans do, ha ha...

And also, American foreign policy has some shameful elements in its history.

always a sweet way to criticise or question anything... the calmness, respect (even for your foes) and politeness should be reflected in any author's writings n thats what a good writer should do.

Thanks, this is a great reminder. I remember reading that students of Buddhism are taught always to speak with the intention of benefiting the person who is listening. I sometimes get angry and abandon that idea, but it is a good practice!

So, you want to keep your distance from politics, Ajit? Maybe that means you are someone with potential to be a wise politician. ;-)
ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
May 31, 2011   #5
Hahaaha thanks Kevin n yeah I dont wish to hurt the American sentiments anywhere as I personally feel that all countries should b respected for their progress n development... all my friends or whoever asks me how to improve writing skills- i always advise them to join EF as i feel that it has benefitted me a lot... n btw i really wanna b a technocrat-never a politician for sure... :-)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jun 2, 2011   #6
Technocracy is something I have trouble understanding. Who determines which people have the most expertise? And what do we do about people's conflicting interests? I think politics might be inescapable...
ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Jun 2, 2011   #7
My teacher in school told me to become a technocrat- n not an engineer- i always have his description in mind- an engineer can b good or bad in terms of knowledge but a technocrat has the sufficient expertise in the field... both r i think almost same however technocrat is i feel someone with the right set of knowledge for a particular task... quite confusing still i know lol


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