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American Youth and Poverty


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Jul 1, 2019   #1

defense against poverty



Everyone can make a difference if they give a little bit of help. Just by providing a little bit of time to volunteer for programs and provide education, support, and insight into other programs. Volunteering is our fist defense against poverty, there is so much each person can offer if they just provide an ear to listen or a shoulder to cry on or a list of resources. Provide food or clothing to families in need will assist in them having to use their limited funds for clothing and can use it to spend on other things they may need. If you own a business hire within the Poverty pool to show them basic job skills to ensure success.

I would like feedback on my sentence. I need it for my class. Can anyone help?

Maria [Contributor] - / 934 337  
Jul 4, 2019   #2
@aknutson119
Hello there!

Simplify your sentences as your meaning gets a little bit lost in translation because of the deemed complexity of the structure of your writing. Trying to give out a proposition also entails that you should have a little bit of a mixture of a persuasive and informative tone in your writing to convince the readers that this is something that they would or should have. If you can curate something with all of these merged meanings, you'll improve the overall context of your writing.

For instance, what resources specifically should people look after? Why is this method more convincing and effective than others that may be present?

Consider these questions. Best of luck.


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