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Most Americans Think Burgers Are Healthy


kiki23 37 / 64 4  
Sep 15, 2016   #1
Surprisingly depressed news comes from nutritionist examining 1.767 Americans who had ordered a tasty burger instead of healthful sandwich from a restaurant in the last three months. As much as 62 percent from the respondents of the survey obviously choose fatty burger than fresh sandwich, while 82 percent realize that sandwich is healthier. Moreover, their reason appeared because they think burger is not only a delicious glut meal but also cooked and served with an amount of vegetables, meat, and bread contains good sources needed by the human body; such as protein, iron and vitamin B12. However, it comes with a lot of problems than it seems which made of fatty meat, sugary ketchup and refined grain buns. Therefore, the World Health Organization (WHO) just proclaims the processed meat is a carcinogen and red meat likely causes cancer which all contained in the burger instead of healthy sandwich.

Sources : time/4345052/burgers-healthy-red-meat/?iid=sr-link1

fadhilmd25 41 / 75 11  
Sep 15, 2016   #2
Dear Kiki, here are some advices for your summary,

their reason appeared--> reasons

red meat likely causes cancer which all contained in the ... --> we can change this sentence into red meat in burgers are likely to cause cancer instead of prepared healthy sandwiches
swr10 10 / 16 2  
Sep 16, 2016   #3
It is my suggestion:

... Americans who had ordered a tasty burgertasty burgers instead of healthful ...
As much as 62 percent frompercent of the respondents (...) choose fatty burger than the fresh sandwich, while ...
... because they think the burger is not only a (...) such as protein, iron, and vitamin B12.
... fatty meat, sugary ketchup, and refined grain buns.
... contained in the burger instead of the healthy sandwich.

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