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Task 1: Amount of books purchased in Germany, France, Italy and Austria during 1995 to 2005


fariz10 13 / 18 2  
Jan 14, 2016   #1
The graph illustrates the much money spent on books in four European countries such as Germany, France, Italy and Austria during 1995 to 2005. US dollars uses as the measurement on this graph. Overall, it can be seen the spending money on books in four European patterns were increased for all of four countries. However, Germany occured as the most dominant on it in the end of period.

The Germany's amount was higher than the other three countries and it stood at 80 million US dollars in 1995. There was a steady rise in Germany's money spent on books in 1999. Otherwise, in 2003, it decreased slightly at approximately 83 million. Next two years experienced rose in Germany's amount which it reached a high of around 93 million. Besides, the money spent on books in France increased gradually until the end of period.

Turning to Italy and Austria, both countries trend growth gradually till the end of 2005. Although, Italy was higher than Austria in the beginning of period that it stood at 50 million, Austria reached a high of about 60 million higher than Italy in 2005.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 15, 2016   #2
This is one of the better Task 1 essays that I have read today. It has a proper overview statement at the beginning and offers all of the factual information in an analytical manner. There is a clear understanding of the chart provided and you ensured that each factual data presented in the chart made its way into the final summary report. You did a very good job on this essay even though there are some points of revision to be addressed.

... the much money...during THE YEARS OF ... ... dollars WERE USED... seen THE the spending...Germany occured APPEARED as,,, on it in the end of period.

The Germany's amount SPENT... and AS it stood ...Otherwise THEN , in 2003, ...decreased slightly at TO... approximately 83 million. ... THE N next two... rose A RISE in Germany's... it reached a ...

... trendED A growth ...of THE period that WHERE it...

Overall, you have proven to have good English comprehension skills and you have shown a grasp of the written English word. Both of which have lead to a well discussed, although grammatically problematic essay. The grammar problem is not a big issue since you will continue to show improvement in that area as you proceed with these tests.
bijal 1 / 1  
Jan 15, 2016   #3
hi,

the graph illustrate the much (more) money spent ....
US dollar was the currency used for the measurement of money.
Overall, it can be seen that the money expended on books have similar increasing trend among the four European countries. (four was used twice in one sentence)

However, Germany stood out to be the most dominant one at the end of the period.


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