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The amount of China and India's population from 2000 until now and the predicted number up to 2050

juhuihjijuh 3 / 8  
Jan 24, 2020   #1
Hello everyone, I hope you can provide me with your feedback.

IELTS TASK 1 Population in India and China since the year 2000

The line graph illustrates the amount of China and India's population from 2000 until now and the predicted number up to 2050. Overall, it is very clear that the population in both countries has been rising and will continue growing except Chinese population which will fall afterwards.

At the beginning of the period, the number of Chinese people in China was more than India's population by being 1.200 and 1.000 billion respectively. The figures has been growing up to the moment by having almost 1.500 billion for china and nearly 1.350 billion for India.

In the future, the graph expects that population will continue growing in both countries and it will become about 1.420 by 2030. After 2030, the number of people in China starts declining and it becomes almost 1.400 in 2050. But when it comes to India, the population will continue to grow even after 2030 which exceeds China in that respect. It is expected that India's population will reach almost 1.600 billion in 2050

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Holt [Contributor] - / 9,336 2874  
Jan 25, 2020   #2
There is an error in your topic summary. The information provided covers the year 2000 up to 2050. That means, the graph covers half a century of information. The more accurate explanation for your overview would have been:

A line graph comparison for the population growth of China and India has been presented. The information covers half a century time span beginning in the year 2000, ending in the year 2050. China is represented by the pink line graph and India, by the purple graph. The information was sourced from the UN population Division covering the medium variant for population growth based on the billions growth measurement. The trend based on the graph indicates that India will have a continuously growing population over the aforementioned time frame while China will experience a population decrease over the same period.

The first thing you should remember is that all of the information in the chart is there for a reason. It is there for the complete information of the reader. Therefore the summary must indicate the following:

- The topic
- The comparison points
- Measurement points
- Source of information
- Trending measurement (Optional and may be located within any paragraph in the report summary)

Do this effectively in the first paragraph and you will be sure to score the highest possible TA marks in the test. While your presentation is acceptable, you need to have a keener eye for information. Look for possible information that is not as obvious at first glance. For instance, the overlapping of information that shows how India and China will have an equal number of population count, 1400 billion by the year 2030. While your presentation for that year is acceptable, the overlapping information would have shown that you really took the time to study and observe the graph.

There are no right or wrong approaches to writing the Task 1 essay. There are only more improved versions of writing it so don't worry. As long as you meet all the scoring requirements, you should be fine. Unless of course you write less than the minimum word count in which case, you may not pass the test.
OP juhuihjijuh 3 / 8  
Jan 25, 2020   #3
Thanks you so much dear @ Holt. Your notes can obviously improve my writings and any other reader's for sure.

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