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The amount of energy used and manufactured in the United States


Ann Ngo 3 / 5 1  
Jan 10, 2018   #1

Energy production and consumption



Task 1: The graph below compares figures for the production and consumption of energy in the US from 1950 to 2000. It also predicts figures for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives the changes in the amount of US energy production and consumption from 1950 to 2000, and a prediction till 2025. Overall, the amount of energy consumped outweighs the produced amount with the continuously increasing trend during the given period.

The first period from 1950 to 1975 saw a proportional growth of both production and consumption with 30 units, and although the consumption was consistently higher, the difference was marginal during 20 years.

While energy production was on the gradual increase in the next 20 years, the consumption of energy was more fluctuating and steeper with a double increase of 20 units, from 65 in 1975 to 90 in 2000, compared to 10 units increase of energy production. This forced the import to rise to keep up with the trend.

During the last years from 2000 to 2025, the imports of energy are projected to be on a dramatic rise when making a comparison between the consistently increasing figures of energy consumption, ranging from 90 units to 140 units and the modest amount of energy production increasing in this period.

Holt [Contributor] - / 6,896 1718  
Jan 11, 2018   #2
Ann, what amazes me is that you were able to write 182 words in this essay and yet, you were not able to follow the proper paragraphing format for a task 1 essay. Sure you produced 4 paragraphs for the essay, but that doesn't assure you of a potentially high score because you disregarded the sentence and paragraph requirements for the IELTS Task 1 test. Remember, each paragraph, in order to gain maximum scoring consideration, must be composed of 3-5 sentences per paragraph. You have written only 2 sentences per paragraph, which tells the reviewer that your essay is nothing more than a series of run-on sentences. Additionally, you do not create a series of simple and complex sentences in the process. It is only by writing more sentences, not more words, that you accomplish the all too important C&C and GRA considerations for a higher score in the end. Due to the lack of the graph, I cannot assist you with advice regarding the content of the essay. What I can tell you, is that your opening sentence is missing the discussion instruction as well as the measurement type indicated in the graph. If you review your current essay, you will see that is most likely contains all the required information but lacks in comparison statements. You should divide your run-on sentences into short or mid-length sentences in order to create the complex sentence requirements of the scoring system.


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