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IELTS Writing Task 1 - Amount of money spent by school and percentage of students getting passed


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May 30, 2021   #1

Riverdale Public School system graphs



These two bar graphs show how much money was spent per student by Riverdale Public School and the percentage of Riverdale Public School students who were getting the Reading and Math test passing grades. Based on the given information, not only did they spend less money, they also happened to achieve less number of students who were getting the passing grades for Reading and Math test.

Every five years, from 2000 to 2015, the amount of money spent per student at the Riverdale Public School decreased gradually. In 2000, Riverdale Public School spent 12,000 USD per pupil, while in 2015, they only spent 8,000 USD per pupil, a 33% decrease over the span of 15 years.

Within the same period of time, the percentage of students getting the passing grades for Reading and Math test also consistently declined over the years, though it was not too significant, approximately a 3% decrease over the span of 15 years. However, they were able to maintain the percentage above 80%.

It is still unclear whether the amount of spending impacts the percentage of students getting passing grades. No data shows the correlation, nor the causation of these two pieces of information.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 11,252 3656  
May 31, 2021   #2
These two bar graphs show

After indicating the number of bar graphs, end the sentence. Follow it up with 2 separate sentences that identify the upresented information per graph. The separate identification sentences will add clarity to the summarized information which, in this version, is difficult to differentiate I You may assign image numbers such as Bar 1 and Bar 2, to help you clearly refer to the image being analyzed in the data paragraphs.

Your ERA abilities are limited to run-on sentences and comma usage. These will not help increase your score in this section. familiarize yourself with actual complex sentence structures to help increase your GRA potential. There are other punctuation marks, aside from a comma that can helpyou score better as well. Vary your punctuation usage.


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