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The amount of world's energy use in 2010 by type of its sources


intiaiqbal92 13 / 13 2  
May 7, 2015   #1

The chart below shows the world's energy use in 2010.



The chart gives information regarding the energy use and parts of renewable energy in 2010 and is measured in percentage. In general, it can be seen from the chart that petroleum was the most energy that people used and there were various energy sources within renewable energy.

In detail, the petroleum energy was the primary source of power in the world. About 39% of this energy had been used by people. Then, people consumed 23 percent of natural gas and 22 percent of coal power. It means that in 2010 these three main energy became world's energy supplies.

Following this trend, the percentage of nuclear and renewable power use had more or less the same level. Eight-percent of the world's energy comes from nuclear source, it was 1% higher than the proportion of renewable energy. Within the renewable sector, there are different sources of energy. Biomass and hydroelectric were dominant in this sector at 53 percent and 36 percent respectively, whereas the percentage of wind energy use was the smallest figure at 1 %. In addition, both solar and geothermal had been used at 5 percent by people in 2010.




ChristineB - / 108 55  
May 7, 2015   #2
Hi, intiaiqbal92. I'm going to help with your grammar and word choice:

The chart givesdisplaysinformation regardinga percentage breakdown of the sources ofthe energy used throughout the worldand parts of renewable energy in 2010 and is measured in percentage .

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Within the renewable sector (7% of total energy consumption in 2010) , there are different sources of energy. Biomassbiomass and hydroelectric energy were the dominant resourcesin, accounting forthis sector at 53%percent and 36%percentof all renewable resources respectively.,whereas the percentage ofSolar and geothermal energy both provided 5% of the total renewable energy consumed in 2010. Wind energy accounted foruse was the smallest figurethe least amount of renewable forms of energy used in 2010 (1%).at 1 %. In addition, ... people in 2010.

I hope this has helped you!
ChristineB - / 108 55  
May 8, 2015   #3
These type of assignments are challenging in my opinion, but your did a good job presenting accurate and detailed information about the chart.

My suggestions for future projects are the following:

1. Review my grammar corrections and read, read, read to improve your English proficiency. The more you read, the better you will write!
2. Plan out your paragraph structure in advance. Assign a basic thought to each paragraph, then start a new paragraph when you introduce a new, main thought. Practice the grouping of your thoughts into paragraphs. Be organized about how you present your material.

Best of luck! It was a pleasure helping you!


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